Reviewer: TomBombadil Signed Date: 2016.07.26 - 02:57AM Title: Eyes
Fascinating that you are picking up on Teri's story that was so less than subtlety planted by Fake-a-smile (Matt) in TC! Excellent move! And I just knew 'Bella wouldn't be hanging around such a sensitive location out of sheer coincidence. Oh, I just re-read TPC for the third or fourth time! Congratulations on an outstanding job! It surpassed a modest effort by a wide, wide margin! You have given me high hopes for this story!!!
Kind words, indeed. Thank you Ed!
Great to hear that you enjoyed TPC; this story is definitely intended as a natural progression of the trends that had developed in Taking Control. There is a bit of a change of pace (somewhat articulated in this first chapter) arising from the fact that with Voldemort's death (and the corresponding loss of urgent motivation) Harry is somewhat adrift. The urgency, however, begins rebuilding; it takes a while because the enemy is maddeningly slow and deliberate, but my current point of writing (midway through chapter 15) is where it's about to begin spiraling again. Hope you enjoy it!
That all said, I need to get back on the horse again. Lots of distractions, but hopefully I'll find some 'me'-time soon to get back to it.
Reviewer: MollyandArthur Signed Date: 2016.04.10 - 07:43AM Title: Eyes
Great opening chapter. Bellatrix on the loose is a rather terrifying reality they must not ignore. Ginny is correct that in many ways she is more dangerous than Voldemort who at least had a clear motivation as well as weaknesses that could be used against him. Love the way that Harry tricked Ron into appropriate behavior after his cruel comment, though it is a shame that it was necessary. Ron still needs to learn to think before he speaks. So, the opening scene with the purple stocking...
Yes, it seems that in almost any HP universe, there is no truly 'happily ever after'. No victory is absolute. And that, of course, is realistic. So in this one, Bellatrix is definitely angling for a measure of payback. One might ask a question though -- is she the only one?
I think you'll be happy to hear that Ron grows tangibly in this story -- more so than in Splinters where, technically, he only had four weeks to turn around. This time has closer to a year. This is a story that is heavy on magical theory, which is not his strong point, but after being left on ambiguous ground at the end of TPC, he definitely grows back into relevance in Trix.
Purple stocking... yes it does take a while for understanding to catch up with that imagery!
Reviewer: MisterBlack Signed Date: 2016.03.22 - 05:47AM Title: Eyes
I imagine that with his occlumency skills, Harry is better able to deal with the tough memories from war. It could be why he does not seem to be having nightmares. Then again... relative to what we see in canon... this Harry did not suffer as much during the war. That is not to say that people did not die or that it was easy. It is just that for the most part he was well fed, had a roof over his head, and had Ginny by his side.
Regarding nightmares, it was actually Matt who took that off the table by having Ginny's close proximity solving Harry's severe sleep issues (a rather useful way of enabling their young but rapidly maturing romance to become acceptable in the eyes of Dumbledore and MacGonagall). Ginny was ultimately a shield against Voldemort's connection to Harry, but let's say more generally that she was a calming influence.
Yes, Ginny's tranferred skills are indeed going to be very useful to Harry, and her instructions will begin to factor increasingly into the middle portion of the story.
Regarding Harry and charity, yes I don't think that it's a natural role for him and I don't think it ever becomes effortless, but if you'll recall in TPC when Harry returned to Hogwarts, he did so with the attitude that winning the war was not all about Horcruxes and dueling -- he very much wanted to soften the blow for those people who might otherwise be caught up as innocent victims, and thus gathered a wide circle around him, encouraging (and bankrolling) others to go out and be productive in their efforts to meet the broader needs. The implication is that a lot of the 'charity' activities taking place are the whims of people like Daphne Greengrass, Susan Bones and Hannah Abbott. For the most part, they''re off doing stuff with Harry's money but, as seems inevitable, there are times when they (especially Daphne) feel a need to bring Harry in for show or whatnot. So it is there -- never his main focus, but also somewhat inescapable.
Regarding the Aurors, you are correct that to guess that things will remain tenuous and unhelpful there. Tonks has a relatively important role in the story though -- somewhat independently of her Auror responsibilities. As far as Harry's own future as an Auror is concerned, I have indeed espoused it for this series (it manifests in full by The Seeker Daughter). I have not thought things through fully, but I believe that Auror failure in this story will be one of the reasons that Harry finally accedes to fate and joins DMLE.
Yes, the girl in the very opening sequence is indeed Teri. Bellatrix is indeed more devious and patient than she was in canon, and just as evil. And fortunately, yes, Harry is much better equipt to deal with her than in previous years but there will be suprises to contend with.
Finally, if you like humour and you like the twins, then this is a good story for you. Although the plot has some grim elements, the story is very likely my most humourous work outside of the Fuddle Fog series. Hope you enjoy it!
Reviewer: Gin110881 Signed Date: 2015.07.16 - 03:43AM Title: Eyes
Some time ago, I've promised to come back to Trix. Now the time has come. I must admit that I have procrastinated over again to start reading the story after you have indicated that some parts of the story will not be to my taste. Now I'll sit in your boat and you must live with my nagging, when I find something to complain about, lol.
So actually what you're capably providing here is indeed literary criticism, which is comprised jointly of the practical (how well is the authour saying that which he purports to say) and the symbolic (what is the authour saying that he won't quite admit to). There's also plenty of basic opinion in there. All is welcome and appreciated.
Within the scope of this story, Harry will not join the Ministry, and Ginny will not play a single professional Quidditch match. TSD reveals that they ultimately do conform to canon and proceed with those 'fates', but I don't think I will treat the subject matter in any great detail beyond what I wrote for TSD. People can read Northumbrian for that -- he handles that world very adeptly. After I finish Trix and the final Fuddle Fog / Secrest sequel, I have one more AU in mind that will take things in a completely different direction.
The precise nature of Harry's and Ginny's angst remains a little vague. The nagging sensation that things are a bit too quiet? A feeling that one should be preparing for something, but one isn't sure exactly what? Premonition? Anyway, yes, Ginny seems to be able to gently wheedle the requisite introspection out of him in ways that Harry's other friends are far less competent. We all do need someone like that.
Reviewer: LysCsuri Signed Date: 2014.11.24 - 07:47AM Title: Eyes
Hey -- there actually is some sweetness in this story too! ;-) Harry and Ginny seem to have great chemistry, even if they don't exactly tell each other everything the way they should.
Reviewer: skiutahnum1 Signed Date: 2014.11.13 - 08:33PM Title: Eyes
well now we see how harry and teri had there start in way....she is a little cold but thats ok to work out later...kutgw
Reviewer: dannbard Signed Date: 2014.11.12 - 09:14PM Title: Eyes
Wow -- lot's going on! I'm sensing about four plot threads already starting to assemble here; it will be interesting to see how they weave together.
Reviewer: zorica Signed Date: 2014.11.11 - 06:40PM Title: Eyes
Well you had me at "the man held aloft a small purple stocking". What man? Whose purple stocing? Ginny's? Looking forward to this very much. Am I your first again? Yay.