Reviewer: MollyandArthur Signed Date: 2016.04.10 - 10:50AM Title: Tears in the Dark
Teri seems to be suffering so much and likely is in terrible danger. I am glad that Harry and Ginny are working so hard to try to determine what is going on and how to block the damage. The meeting with Pansy and her mother was very interesting. Unfortunately determining the girl's parentage is of critical importance.
I must admit that I did not give Teri an easy path to follow in this story -- she had a terrible childhood; her only semi-stable home life was disrupted by the war; when she starts to settle into caring (if pseudo-orphanesque) environment, she finds herself enmeshed as a pawn in a criminal plot. This is perhaps as close to Thomas Hardy character development as I will ever permit myself to write, but unlike TH I will promise you a good outcome at some point.
Glad you enjoyed having tea with the Parkinsons! I haven't yet decided if Rose will be back, but she was fun to write for one scene anyway.
Interestingly, I have had some mixed opinions over whether there is fundamental value in determining the girl's parentage, or whether the authour is simply leading everyone on a goose chase. Sometimes in research the journey is as important as the destination.
Thank you again for some wonderfully thought-provoking comments, M&A!
Reviewer: MisterBlack Signed Date: 2016.03.23 - 09:39AM Title: Tears in the Dark
To tell you the truth I am far more concerned with Teri and her problem than I am about who is her father.
Yes, your humanistic attitude is certainly reasonable in Teri's case. I think at this point the interest in her origins stem from wondering whether there are any clues in her past to shed light on what unusual powers she might have and how/whether those powers might be being manipulated, and by whom. The familial connection, you now know (via next chapter) have other implications as well though. Anyway, you are quite correct in stating that she is in potentially grave danger, and implying that no resolution of question of parentage is going to alleviate that danger directly. Basically, now is not the time to veer off in Hermione-like intellectual tangents. Point well made.
That said, I will mercifully eliminate one big question mark and state that, by mechanisms that have not yet been hinted at, Bellatrix is indeed the girl's mother. The father I shall not identify, but I will certainly cheerfully share that I am definitely trying to drive you (and other dear readers) to distraction ;)
Less distracting, I will also confirm now that the girl in the opening scene is indeed Teri, and that an article of clothing was indeed taken from her before she became safely ensconsed in Dolwyddelan (just as items were also taken from other upstanding citizens). And yes, the issue of control is indeed at stake; the success of which and prospects for which you shall discover as time goes on.
Thank you for another engaging review, MisterBlack!
Reviewer: Gin110881 Signed Date: 2015.07.17 - 06:02AM Title: Tears in the Dark
OK, Mrs Parkinson was not my first option when I wondered whom Harry has meant in the little Cliffie at the end of the previous chapter. In fact, she would have be the last option I would have thought about, if at all.
So what is the extent to which H&G are willing to stoop to Slytherin tactics to extract info from Slytherins? At what point does it taint them? I would maintain that H&G earned the respect from Slytherins by their embrace of Machiavellian strategies that brought down the Death Eaters and Voldemort, and that it is all second-nature to them. They do not manipulate friends like that, but have no qualms about enemies.
My recollections od Quidditch matches in this stories are personal growth dramas -- not play-by-play, but rather a condensation that reveals character strengths. Let me know if you agree.Yes, please do catalog the open issues, just in case the authour lets a thread slip through the cracks!
Reviewer: skiutahnum1 Signed Date: 2015.02.26 - 11:52AM Title: Tears in the Dark
Leave it to the library kids to figure it out where they need to look for information. Harry and Ginny are working a lot of extra hours and seem to be make headway but it's still going to take awhile to figure this out. Kutgw
Reviewer: lunagranger Signed Date: 2015.02.22 - 04:59PM Title: Tears in the Dark
It was great to see how Ginny and Harry obtained information from Rose. And you're keeping the new information about both mysteries (Teri's ancestry and the mind spell) coming in a very good pace. Kutgw.
Ah! The only day better than one with a LunaGranger review, is a day with *two* LunaGranger reviews! Thank you again, Silvia!
And this, of course, is the greatest challenge with Trix -- how to parcel out the discoveries, knowing that a large amount of information gathering must be accomplished in order to solve the case. I'm grateful for the fedback! Affirmation that the pace thus far seems about right gives me a benchmark for subsequent elucidation.
Reviewer: ProfessorBinns79 Signed Date: 2015.02.22 - 10:50AM Title: Tears in the Dark
I'm glad to see an update and hear that you're "back in the saddle." The mystery of this story is enthralling! I can't quite come up with what Ginny is thinking of that reminds her of her fourth year (which is before "Taking Control" and thus back into canon, right?). I'll be looking forward to the next chapter.
Yes, this is indeed a canon reference! I suspect you'll figure it out, but if not then the recollection will emerge quickly within the fifth chapter.
Great to hear that you're enjoying this! Hope to not delay overlong in trotting out the next installment. Thanks for the review!
Reviewer: Dad Signed Date: 2015.02.21 - 05:21PM Title: Tears in the Dark
This is getting really interesting.
Ah -- glad you think so! The story is a bit more demanding in terms of juggling disparate plot point and trying not to drop any threads from the weave. Makes it fun to write; hopefully the same will be true for reading.
Thanks for continuing to follow and offer your thoughts!
Reviewer: nesciamema Signed Date: 2015.02.21 - 12:14AM Title: Tears in the Dark
Very curious as to what Ginny is one to. Can't wait for an update.
Great! That, fortunately, is one thing that I plan to address in the very next scene -- both Ginny's initial hunch and Ryan's best guess for an explanation. I do hope to not leave you waiting too long, though unlike TPC, I have not written far ahead. Writing far ahead has the advantage of helping one to understand and resolve inconsistencies before they get posted, but on the other hand make it more difficult to benefit from brilliant suggestions from readers :)
Thank you very much for the review!
Reviewer: Aragorn Signed Date: 2015.02.20 - 10:23PM Title: Tears in the Dark
Appreciating the new chapter. Certainly a mystery being woven here....
And I appreciate your appreciation! Yes, there is definitely an element of mystery to the story. It's clearly not a whodunit, but more of a 'what are they going to do next?' plot, with an element of 'who can you not fully trust?'
Thank you for chiming in!