Reviewer: MollyandArthur Signed Date: 2016.04.10 - 04:19PM Title: Flowers in the Spring
Okay, so Tracey was very creepy there at the end. I hope that Pansy realizes something is wrong soon and says something about it to one of the others. George and Fred should be careful about going out drinking with Blaise at a wizarding bar. They would probably be much safer in a muggle pub.
Trelawney would be most proud of you, MollyandArthur! I suspect that the background contrabass as throbbing with imminent foreboding during some of the sequences in this chapter.
Good point about finding a Muggle establishment instead of The Spiny Swampe -- entirely possible that things would have proven safer. Note that alcohol-related problems are a bit of a recurring theme in this story. I do not necessarily mean to sound like a teetotaler temperance type, although it has often struck me that DWM (drinking while magical) misadventures have a risk that exceeds that of your Muggle partier, and the villain(s) of the story may well see intoxication as a state ripe for exploiting.
Thank you very much for your most foresightful comments!
Reviewer: MisterBlack Signed Date: 2016.03.27 - 10:00PM Title: Flowers in the Spring
If Harry from two years ago could see the Harry present now, I wonder if he would look at him and recognize himself. Would he look at his choices and agree with himself or not?
Ah! Many many points on the money here!
So it is indeed a point of valid irony that Harry is finding himself lurking uneasily on the edge of the manipulative domains he loathed so much while under Dumbledore's sway. Somewhat mitigating the circumstances is the fact that most of those refugees cosseted in Dolwyddelan are more willing than Sirius or Harry ever were. The fact that the children latch enthusiastically onto nearly variation in routine is a sign that they're likely a bit bored where they are, but in all cases the nurturing environment provided by Andromeda, Ted Tonks and Narcissa is healthier than where they came from. Andromeda and Narcissa have obviously rediscovered a sisterly bond, and would probably prefer to be sheltered than to be exposed to Bellatrix right now. I don't really give Ted Tonks much of a voice, and one can guess that an independent-minded soul of his nature probably feels a bit constrained, but he never had the adventurous streak that Harry or Sirius had, so he's probably accepted his lot, as evinced by his constant backstage efforts in maintaining the estate and pitching in with childcare. That leaves Draco as an obvious malcontent. On one hand, we've been trained to dislike Draco intensely, but on the other hand he has a valid complaint. He is the de facto head of a major pureblood wizarding head; one can only assume that he's chafing fiercely under captivity while Malfoy Manor is being left to rot. Of course, if it were Harry alone standing in Draco's way, Draco would very likely have whined and agitated enough to force his release (one can imagine Harry, at some point, throwing up his hands and letting Malfoy go get himself killed) but Draco is also heeding his mother's will. So all that leaves is the one caged bird we always come back to -- Teri. She is not terribly unhappy at Dolwyddelan in that she doesn't pose major problems to the adults and remains close to Anna, but Teri has little patience for the other children and is inherently the type of person who will only blossom out in the open. The weekly visits from Harry are highlights for her, and give her a flavour of the wide world outside. But does that satisfy her cravings or intensify them?
I could argue that, in addition to Ginny's perspective, Harry at least wrestles with his own conscience regarding the decisions he must constantly make for others and the constraints he finds himself imposing. Yes, I could argue that this gives Harry a moral standing somewhat above Dumbledore, but in truth Dumbledore likely wrestled with such a conscience even without having Harry shout at him. One can only hope that Harry will shed such moral burdens as quickly as he can, rather than cling to them just a little longer until loose end after loose end is wrapped up. Yes, one can hope.
So clearly Teri is very well aware of the evil that is Bellatrix, but does Teri know that this evil corresponds to Bellatrix Lestrange, or that Bellatrix is her own mother? Well, she's never been told -- not by Harry (who mostly knows) and not by Andromeda or Narcissa (who may suspect, since surely they could not help noticing the resemblance to their own family), but like any hyper-observant child it's possible she may be picking up enough clues on her own to suspect.
Is Tonks working? The answer is yes, but as far as clarification is concerned, I'll defer that to the next few chapters.
Anyway, thank you very much for the detailed thoughts, MisterBlack! Very helpful to re-inspect everything like this as I begin to pick up the writing again. Note that I've had a steady stream of distractions since finishing Splinters, but the writing is starting to progress tangibly again!
Reviewer: RighT3rantZ Signed Date: 2016.02.02 - 04:30PM Title: Flowers in the Spring
Just a re-read for research here.
Ah yes, there's no question that I was thinking back more to the golden age of radio, as opposed to the trashier sportscasting we have today. There's also no question that, like many professions in the Wizarding world, it is not always competence that rises to the top. Richard Auclair is the straight man of the duo, but that doesn't mean he's particularly smooth or well composed.
Your commercials are wonderfully scary! No wonder nobody in magical society seems to smoke!
Thank you for the review, and for your exemplary service to the Trix project!
Reviewer: Gin110881 Signed Date: 2015.07.21 - 04:32AM Title: Flowers in the Spring
I was fully aware that it was Teri’s wish that she won't talk about serious stuff with anyone but Harry. I think there is no reason to modify the text. However, the fact that Ginny is voluntarily holding herself back was not so obvious to me because I would have expected that Harry ask Teri whether Ginny may attend. Just to make sure that nothing important escapes him. Finally, it is one of their main problems. Probably it is a bit too much nit picking from my side just because I'm always worried when it comes to Ginny's participation in important matters. Please forgive me...
Yes, your trepidation is justified, especially since the first chapter sets a bit of a tone by implying that there had been a slight drifting-apart after the pair's exceptional closeness in TPC. They are still close, but after the loss of the Voldemort-induced connection, they have started doing a greater number of things separately, and don't automatically sense what each is doing at any given time (with the latter being the key issue that Ginny was unwilling to share with Tonks in chapter 1). In other words, they are a bit more like a 'normal' couple -- something that might not sound like a major problem, but of course is a strategic weakness compared to their earlier synergy.
Yes, your skepticism regarding occlumency is also reasonable. To some extent, Harry is guilty of the same sort of attitude ('well, we have to try something') as Dumbledore had in OotP. By contrast, Ginny's intervention in Chapter 5 went far beyond Occlumency. It's not explicitly stated, but one might analytically speculate that it was a bit of evidence of her Fugo-acquired powers. The rather different steps taken later for Tracey (chapter 9; in light of her Occlumency ineptitude) might also be considered as a possible alternative for addressing the threat.
So, perhaps this is something that needs to be reflected in modified text somewhere, but by this point in the story, there are no major issues that H&G 'understand' but have not yet at least partially shared with each other. Ginny had not yet had an opportunity to talk to Harry in great detail about changes in her powers (Salvatore's parting gifts), but Harry is aware that changes have occurred.
The label 'Harpies Recruit' refers to the fact, established in TPC, that Ginny has been invited by the Harpies to their training camp for summer 1998. She's still under-age, and thus hasn't signed a contract with anyone yet.
Finally, you're most welcome -- great that you're enjoying this twisty little drama!
Reviewer: lunagranger Signed Date: 2015.04.04 - 03:51PM Title: Flowers in the Spring
Oh. Teri is becoming an even more interesting character. I loved the Rita Skeeter's book thing. And the way you write quidditch is very entertaining. I usually am not a big fan of quidditch but you are very good at it.
Yes, I keep asking myself if there's anyone in my real-world experiences whom I might be modeling Teri after, but I continue to largely draw a blank. She is a damaged person in both Seeker Daughter and in Trix, although in Seeker Daughter, there is also the added teenaged angst (which many of us have experienced both first- and second-hand). In both cases, the cure to her ills is an easy-going, sympathetic and admirable role-model, and Harry proves to be a natural each time.
More Quidditch to come -- hopefully I can keep it entertaining for my 'character drama' audience such as yourself. To some extent, I intend the Quidditch to actually be character-drama as well -- as much about personal growth of the characters as about 'sports fiction'.
Thank you as always for reading and reviewing!
Reviewer: skiutahnum1 Signed Date: 2015.04.03 - 07:50AM Title: Flowers in the Spring
Oh boy now what is going on with Tracy ....you just like to keep throwing plot twist don't you.....kutgw
Reviewer: aimless Signed Date: 2015.03.31 - 01:11PM Title: Flowers in the Spring
Your Quidditch commentary are one of the best for sure ). I can guess two possible motives for twins, a way to impress certain ladies, or a way to prove they can be serious business. I feel concerned about Tracey and I think Pansy/Ted break may be connected here. As always good job )
Aha! "Impress certain ladies..." Hold that thought, but think outside the box. I will let you take another stab after chapter 8, during which a clue shall be dropped.
Speaking of clues, your instincts are definitely well honed on Tracey, and you will not have to wait much longer for that to get messy.
Greatly gratified that you like the Quidditch -- it will definitely progress as a major plot element. Hope you enjoy the ride!