Reviewer: MisterBlack Signed Date: 2016.03.17 - 04:45PM Title: Sister Awakening
I just read your AN from "Knife's Edge."
No, to be honest I had never actually heard of "The Unbreakable Vow" before you mentioned it. I'm now several chapters into fulfilling your recommendation and am enjoying it -- straight, clear narrative, somewhat similar to Northumbrian's, although not quite as polished as his best. Anyway, the fact that I hadn't heard of it is in part because I had never even heard of even the concept of HP Fanfic before I stumbled on Reis Macleod's "Ginny Weasley and the Half Blood Prince" in late 2013. From there, I have followed a grapevine embodied by Trinket lists, recommendations, and the 'favourites' list of some of my favourite authours. If a story hasn't availed itself within those limited lines of inquiry, I probably haven't heard of it, which is unfortunate because I'm certain that there are lots of great tales out there, buried by the year, and I may never stumble across them. Ironically, although Splinters has unquestionably been my most ambitious work, it runs the risk of being buried in that way too because it appears destined to be the first of my stories to never get Trinket consideration. Bad timing I guess -- the last round of Trinkets (some 8 months ago) was just a few weeks before I started posting the story. Anyway, at this point I don't care a whole lot about the recognition, as much as feeling that little pang when I stumble across some other authour's really great work that was never recognised and I think to myself, 'Cor, to think I'd never have know about this story if not for [insert chance occurrence here]. How may other gems have I been missing??'
And of course, no, I was fairly certain you had not been skipping ahead. You were on quite a prognostication roll, though, so I had to tweak you!
Anyway, appreciate the thoughts, perspectives and the recommendation!
Reviewer: MisterBlack Signed Date: 2016.03.17 - 03:34PM Title: Sister Awakening
“I see noble hearts, Terna.” The princess gazed into a distant blue sky. “Imagine great souls — people such as us but kinder and nobler. Suppose that we have the power to grant them the chance to love and strive for goodness with a magnificent and pure passion. What if, in turning our backs upon them, we doom those great hearts to never beat? Imagine a frightful darkness rising up and pouring across the land simply because we denied the chance to those who would stop it.”
Another fine review, thank you most sincerely for your expansive thoughts!
Yes, it is clear that Ginny and the princess have greater awareness of each other than do Harry and the Publican. Much of the reason for this is that Ginny has possession of the 1995 brooch, while the princess holds the A.D. 61 version of the same charmed object, although there is a secondary factor in play as well, which will become more apparent as the story progresses. As people close to Ginny/Lanossea, Harry and the Publican are swept along. Harry does derive a fair bit of perspective from the Publican, although the Publican is only weakly aware of Harry. Whether that is incidental or subtly fundamental is open to interpretation....
Regarding the staff vs. wand, and the ultimate implications to the Battle of Hogwarts, let me only say that there is a reason there are two instruments of power in the past.
I like the level of detail to which you apply to reasoning an eventual failure at the final battle; a most worthy theory, but not the one implemented by the authour. In DH, much thought is devoted to the adversarial motivations for the wand's allegiance, however Rowling herself has penned discussions of a second influence on the wand's behaviour (it would never truly work for anyone who was not prepared to face death) which suggests that the allegiance was more complex than Ollivander intuited in DH. In this dim light, perhaps there are other capricious influences upon the nasty little stick?
Finally, Hermione = important = too true! Why did Hermione not speak about the sea dream? I do not think she ever had any intention of withholding this, but I would assume that someone of her intellect would feel a certain reluctance to admit an experience that seemed so baffling and disconnected... We will see (indeed, given my regrettable delay in response) you have now already seen how that soon plays out.
Reviewer: RighT3rantZ Signed Date: 2015.12.14 - 05:55PM Title: Sister Awakening
The Horse Head could only be a gargoyle in the treacherous hands of the Legate. Interesting detail. When Harry deflected the staff what became of it?
Ah yes, the queen actually ended up picking up the staff and running off with it. I should go back and check the passage to see if I made that clear enough -- it was difficult to produce highly lucid narrative there because I was writing from the point of view of someone who had just slammed his head into the paving stones...
Indeed, the staff will be there for the final showdown and will make it (eventually) into those predestined hands. Be prepared for a major twist first, though!
Hermione's path becomes much better elaborated in the next chapter (half way through draught). I say 'elaborated' rather than 'apparent' because the precise intersection with H&G will only become fully clear in time for the final climax.
Yes indeed -- over the next month or so I will approach you with an Obeah scenario. Shall try the accursed PM systerm, though perhaps neither of us have the juju to make that work.
Thank you very much for your thoughts and the offer!
Reviewer: Gin110881 Signed Date: 2015.12.14 - 04:40PM Title: Sister Awakening
I was just a few days away and almost missed an update. Moody was right. Constant vigilance is needed if you won't miss a splinter.
Ah yes, I did get that last chapter out quite efficiently. Blink and you miss it :)
This chapter is taking a bit longer because of life cutting into my writing time so much recently, but after scrawling the first half of the new installment, I can indeed promise (just as you expect) more answers and more questions. The answers may be starting to overtake the questions, or at least the questions are starting to point in similar directions.
Thank you very much for the kind words and for the helpful tasting notes, Martin!
Reviewer: lunagranger Signed Date: 2015.12.13 - 08:45PM Title: Sister Awakening
I'm really very curious about what will happen to the Publican and the princess. I love that couple that is a proxy of HG, but is not the same thing. Their life expereience and the fact that they are from different people and ages make them quite another thing, but lovely all the same.
I have to admit that my plan for the Publican's and princess's final outcome has oscillated a bit as I've written this, but I've finally settled on one that I believe best suits the rest of the story.
Yes indeed -- one thing that has been quite liberating is the fact that, although graced with many similarities to H&G, they are certainly very distinct people and are marked by differences in culture, age and life experience in ways more pronounced than Harry and Ginny. They are sort of an exceptionally 'alternate' example of AU in that respect. Another scenario that's fun to write!
Maybe that's what this story is all about -- writing things that are fun to write :)
Great gratitude for getting me caught up on the LunaGranger viewpoint. Thank you, and best wishes for your holiday season!
Reviewer: LysCsuri Signed Date: 2015.12.13 - 08:20AM Title: Sister Awakening
Wow -- this story continues to amaze me! Do you write anywhere other than here? You could probably get a lot more feedback and exposure on a site like Booksie.
Wonderful that you're enjoying this so much Lys!
In truth, all of my writing besides this is non-fiction. Most is in print; I've contributed to a few blogs as well, but that's all likely immaterial since I doubt you'd enjoy it much. Regardless, thank you very much for the tip about Booksie -- looks like a good target for some fiction ideas I might start nurturing at some point.
Not yet though -- hard enough to find 10-15 hours per week to finish off the stories here, let alone ramp up on completely new projects.
Reviewer: MollyandArthur Signed Date: 2015.12.11 - 07:43PM Title: Sister Awakening
Really enjoying this story. It is so incredibly unique to anything else I have read. Harry and Ginny are clinging to one another in a very healthy way, and I am glad to see that Hermione is handling the situation well. I am thinking she will have an important role to play since she seems to be having dreams of the sister. What is the queen doing now? And, I am so happy that Sirius is involved once again. Looking forward to reading the next chapter.
Very flattering words -- thank you MollyandArthur!
There are times when 'uniqueness' is a sword with its edge facing the wrong way; you may recall my note (way back in August) saying that I was fairly uncertain about launching the story in the first place. Luckily and most gratifyingly, that worry has long since been assuaged!
There's no question that the story has its disorienting moments, but I think you've hit upon why most readers have tolerated that -- the fact that Harry and Ginny have always been there to anchor each other through the worst turmoil, thus giving readers the okay to read on. I doubt I could have gotten away with this, otherwise :)And yes, there will be validation for Miss Granger. This is not a story where she is not consigned to ridicule or even to playing a ho-hum secondary role. This tortuous journey still has some turns ahead, and perhaps the twistiest of all is set right upon her path.
Next chapter? Ah yes -- someone needs to appease the god of 'meetings' and get him to lay off for a while so I can get my writing done. Soon, hopefully!
Thanks again, M&A!
Reviewer: gracepark Signed Date: 2015.12.11 - 08:24AM Title: Sister Awakening
So let me get this straight -- Hettie Gravener and Rob Wilsey? There's surely an interesting story there somewhere! I wonder what their dangerous adventure is?
Yes, those indeed are the names, and I would like to think that there really is an interesting story there, although not for SIYE. I will definitely share at least those glimpses of their tale that relate to Harry and Ginny though. Stay tuned!
And verily, another Sirius lover -- you people are all over the place :)
Thank you for keeping up with the story and dropping the kind words!
Reviewer: ginnyweasley777 Signed Date: 2015.12.10 - 09:37AM Title: Sister Awakening
Well well well, what a fascinating chapter this is!
Ah, you're the first reviewer to refer to Hermione and Heanua in the same sentence! Possibly not the last.
Lots of favourable comments about Sirius -- I'll have to give him a larger role in future tales.
I guess I should mention that the queen will be around again when everything comes to a crux, but yes indeed, her rebellion will fail just as Tacitus requires it to. I had to smile at one blogger who noted that she is a rare person to have had a great statue erected in her honour in the very community that she burned to the ground and pillaged mercilessly. A most capable, articulate and notable personality, but perhaps not the sort of lady one would invite over for tea :)
Thank you again GW777 for everything you do!
Reviewer: Aragorn Signed Date: 2015.12.09 - 11:55PM Title: Sister Awakening
Appreciating both the weaving of your story...and your prompt updates!
Thank you very much for the positive feedback, Aragorn! The story's pace has benefited from a bit of chronic insomnia that I've simply decided to stop fighting. I might have to stretch the lag-time a little for the final few chapters since they are very intricate, but the story remains a key part of my regular routine. At this point, as a matter of swimming with the current, I will likely defer Trix until this one wraps up (sorry Aimless & LunaGranger!)
Also greatly heartened that the story weave has entrapped you! Challenging but gratifying little beast, this story has been!
Reviewer: Wolfs_Scream Signed Date: 2015.12.09 - 11:05PM Title: Sister Awakening
Well... Attendance to Duty has, IIRC, been a Roman virtue.
I'm glad that you enjoyed the Prefect scene. I've been looking forward for some time to that rewrite of canon, with the idea of a light-hearted and reasonably supportive banter that would reflect all of the characters having shifted a bit from their canonical positions. Like everything in this story, though, it has a dual purpose, playing toward other currents that are subtly sweeping toward the climax.
Yes, Hermione's role continues to expand. Her recent prior decision to voluntarily withdraw from the cognoscenti is what grade school English teachers might refer to as 'irony' ;) The question I would pose for consideration, is why she should get wrapped up this? Unlike Harry and Ginny, she does not have an AD 61 doppelganger (bushy-haired know-it-all) running around. She is not part of some 'love knows no bounds; neither space nor time' scenario. She had vowed not to interfere or even try to comprehend the strange temporal dynamic, yet...?
And there's Sirius, of course. Crowd pleaser; fun to write. I suppose I understand reasons why Rowling killed him off, but there are plenty of reasons why it's great to have him around.
Anyway, thank you most kindly or your comments, David! You can expect a bit more enlightenment and confusion in chapter 13!
Reviewer: KateP Signed Date: 2015.12.09 - 05:50PM Title: Sister Awakening
Yay new chapter the whole mione part of this took me by surprise that was a twist that made me change a few things in my mind
Change a few things in your mind, indeed! The PM you sent me revealed just how many of the twistier turns you've now navigated. I wonder how many others will see things in a slightly new light?
And I agree wholeheartedly -- just because, Hermione has discovered 'her inner Slytherin' (as another reviewer so eloquently put it) does not mean that working with someone as irreverent and impetuous as Sirius will be 'easy' for her. Methinks there might be room for silliness in that interaction before the curtain falls.
Great comments -- thank you for spicing up the reviews page, Kate!
Reviewer: mdauben Signed Date: 2015.12.09 - 10:42AM Title: Sister Awakening
Now Hermione is having visions, too? Curiouser and curiouser! The battle was exciting, even if it did open up more questions. I wonder what the Queen is up to now, what's going on with the staff and how much longer they can avoid Dumbledor's interference? Can't wait for the next update.
Yes indeed, three is not always a crowd. From the very outset, I was semi-conscious of a certain plot wrinkle that would be very difficult to smooth based on merely two protagonists. I think that's why so authours tend to 'triangulate'. It took a bit of time (and crowd-sourced character development) to pencil Hermione into the strong supporting role, but I think my plans for her were starting to gel by around chapter 4 or 5.
As to the queen's future, I think at this point it is safe to answer some earlier questions and say that her fate is now sealed. She will now walk down the path that our history has recorded -- a tale of riven complexities that would have been great fodder for Shakespeare, had he ever needed another tragedy.
The staff and Dumbledore's interference, though, shall be secrets under lock and key for a while longer.
Thank you most kindly, fellow writer, for your kind thoughts!