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Reviewer: RighT3rantZ Signed Date: 2018.01.16 - 05:31AM Title: Chapter 6 Drinking Games
Anna and Charlie...Better than Malfoy and anyone, really. Even if it still is a little creepy at this point... hopefully you remedy that feeling as the story progresses.
Interesting to see you parlaying the 28 families into the tale. I was a bit late on starting this. Binge reading a bit now, my reviews will come here and there.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I hope you continue to enjoy the story.
Reviewer: GHL Signed Date: 2017.11.09 - 10:03AM Title: Chapter 6 Drinking Games
Hmmm. The 'never have I ever' game makes for an interesting vehicle to deepen the character development. Well done!
Also of note is the line you draw here, and previously, in the story between youth on the light who tend to seek out a bit of the frivolity that one would hope would still avail at that age, versus those on the dark side of the spectrum who seem to move with Victorian rigidity. A fascinating contrast!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I truly enjoyed writing this chapter as it allowed me to create a slight moment between certain couples as well as showing teens being teens. You are quite correct of course about the youngsters raised by the dark side being more rigid. A bit of harmless teenage frivolity can be character building, and it is difficult to imagine a scene like this occurring at Malfoy Manor with the young Death Eaters.
Reviewer: Aurorofthelight Signed Date: 2017.09.04 - 02:39PM Title: Chapter 6 Drinking Games
This was an interesting but fun chapter! I can remember playing drinking games like that in college! Suppose Anna was checking out Charlie's bod when he was showing off his tattoo? Narcissa is definitely up to something but glad Augusta won't force Anna into anything! I can't see Anna as Mrs. Dorko Malfoy! I thought Neville was going to come unglued at that thought! Can't wait for the next one! :D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D
Author's Response: Thank you so much!!! College drinking games, oh the memories! I fully admit I was trying to subtely depict Anna admiring the view. She's reached an age to notice such things. I love writing Neville! Glad you liked his reaction to the thought of his cousin with Malfoy!
Reviewer: alterdream Signed Date: 2017.09.04 - 12:41PM Title: Chapter 6 Drinking Games
This was nice to read, with several different viewpoints. I'm surprised at Severus not wanting to find out more about Anna but I imagine it makes some sense. She's not Harry, after all.
Regarding the previous chapter, I did not mean that the teens' part should not have been there. Only that perhaps they could have been arranged in a different order.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! Severus's curiosity will wax and wan a bit over time. He is an extremely busy man! I appreciate your comment about the previous chapter. I don't always notice the best way to organize and sequence events. Writing this two part story over the past year and a bit has been a great learning experience for me (first fiction I've attempted since finishing school almost two decades ago), and I fully admit I have felt the learning curve!!!
Reviewer: Prongs I Signed Date: 2017.09.04 - 10:51AM Title: Chapter 6 Drinking Games
How comes that I always feel uncomfortable when I read the name Malfoy?
I'm really curious what you're planning for Charlie and Anna. Sounds like a strange couple for me, but it sounds undoubtedly better than Malfoy. On the other hand, Anna isn't even allowed to date Charlie, if he'd ask her out.
Thanks for another fine update.
Author's Response: I understand exactly what you mean about the name Malfoy! Uncomfortable is a kind way of putting it! I'm glad you're curious about Charlie and Anna. His interest in her will soon become more clear, as well as her options. Thank you so much for this review!
Reviewer: Gin110881 Signed Date: 2017.09.04 - 07:28AM Title: Chapter 6 Drinking Games
There were some funny questions in the drinking game. Poor Ginny didn't get a chance to have a drink.
Obviously Mrs Malfoy continues to pull the strings. I wonder what will happen with Anna if the Malfoys eliminate Augusta. Anyway, I think it's good that Anna knows about her situation.
I suppose Snape and Dumbledore tried Legilimency on Anna, not Occlumency.
Reviewer: Gin110881 Signed Date: 2017.09.04 - 07:28AM Title: Chapter 6 Drinking Games
There were some funny questions in the drinking game. Poor Ginny didn't get a chance to have a drink.
Obviously Mrs Malfoy continues to pull the strings. I wonder what will happen with Anna if the Malfoys eliminate Augusta. Anyway, I think it's good that Anna knows about her situation.
I suppose Snape and Dumbledore tried Legilimency on Anna, not Occlumency.
Author's Response: Oops!! Thank you for pointing out the Occlumency/Legilimency error. I just corrected it. Regardless of how many times I try to edit a chapter, a mistake always seems to remain! I truly appreciate you letting me know! As for Ginny, she was able to drink twice this round (for illicitly consuming liquor and for receiving a detention at Hogwarts). She also had a couple of drinks during the first round of the game in the previous chapter. Thank you for the wonderful review!
