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Reviewer: GHL Signed Date: 2018.01.06 - 10:45AM Title: Chapter 15 Horcruxes

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Interesting incremental chapter!

Without feeling the need to read too much into my comments, I hope you don't mind if I ramble a bit, since I'm always interested in how different people craft plots.

In literature there are scads of examples of great prose writing that is wrapped around a weak plot, or a great plot that is diminished by bland writing. Of course, we all aspire to have a cool plot, and compose it compellingly, but the grand slam combination is quite rare.

Which brings us to the unenviable problem of Horcruxes -- a nasty contrivance that my suspicious nature attributes as an insurance policy by Jo Rowling that nobody would ever produce a great AU retelling of the HP saga. I'm sure not everyone would agree, but I always thought that JKR produced her greatest plots earlier in the series, only to have the storylines become more 'forced' later on as she sought to bring the series to a plausible conclusion. Fortunately, her wordsmithing continued to mature with every new novel, so the vast majority of a huge audience went along semi-happily, despite the increasingly contrived circumstances. Worst of all contrivances was the laundry-list-like procession through Horcruxes -- a literary slog that is only made better because she wrote it well, and because it's difficult to find any fanfic retellings that are any more compelling. And now you (like so many of us before) are clambering up this jagged ridge. I wish you well!

Fortunately, the Horcrux plot line can exist as a secondary thread behind a strong primary tale -- the complex trajectory you've painstakingly crafted for Anna; a very unique and compelling subject. In the end, the latter will likely be what I prize about this story, but I will nonetheless watch with curiosity to see how you handle the Bete Noire that Rowling bequeathed to us :)



Author's Response: Reading this really made me smile! I recently enjoyed a conversation with a fellow Harry Potter fan about what we loved about the books and what we found frustrating. Personally, I have always loved the characters JKR created and the magical world generally. Starting with book 5, I had difficulty reconciling certain events (The blood wards at Privet Drive holding after Harry's blood was used to resurrect Voldemort. Dumbledore's extreme and sudden fall from grace at the Ministry and with the public. Sirius being trapped at Grimmauld Place. The constant lack of information throughout the school year.) I could of course go on. It is always interesting to learn the likes and dislikes of others! With regard to Horcruxes, they will be involved in this story, but will probably not feel of paramount importance. Anyways, thank you so much for reviewing and sharing your thoughts!



Reviewer: alterdream Signed Date: 2017.11.15 - 12:55PM Title: Chapter 15 Horcruxes

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Dumbledore is sharing now? That's quite a change! I'm not sure it makes up for not having Kreacher's head on the wall but it's interesting anyway.

Author's Response: Thank you so much!!! I'm giggling at your last sentence. Love it! Anyways, Dumbledore is indeed sharing information, at least for the moment.



Reviewer: Gin110881 Signed Date: 2017.11.13 - 09:35AM Title: Chapter 15 Horcruxes

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Wow, itís a nice bonus to find two chapters instead of one when returning from holidays....maybe I should go on holidays more often.

It's been an intriguing turn with Sirius, Kreacher, and the locket. I really like that. I'm (positively) amazed that Dumbledore introduced Sirius and Remus to the Horcrux topic.

I also loved the way Neville proclaimed his opinion about betrothal contracts. I wonder if Augusta also plans to discuss the topic of a betrothal for Neville. At least the topic seems to be quite important to her... (Neville might be a wee bit afraid of it, but I'm sure he would fight it with tooth and nails.).

I'm looking forward to reading about Malfoy's accident. I hope you won't withhold this experience from us. ;)

Great cahpter, thank you so much for sharing!

Author's Response: Thank you very much! I think it was a bit of a weak moment for Dumbledore. I had Sirius and Remus show up directly after his accident with the ring reminded him that he is mortal and that if he died too much knowledge about how to destroy Riddle could be lost. Sirius and Remus have both proven themselves to be strong physically and mentally as well as capable of keeping secrets. I'm very fond of Neville (as I'm sure you guessed), and I completely agree with you that Augusta would be wise not to attempt a betrothal for her grandson!



Reviewer: Aurorofthelight Signed Date: 2017.11.06 - 02:28PM Title: Chapter 15 Horcruxes

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Holy bodycast Batman! Good thing for Dorko that shot glass in Charlie's hand wasn't Dorko's neck! Charlie seems a bit peeved! Would be fun to see you make Dorko's unfortunate accident actually occur(hint hint)! So the horcruxes make their evil appearance - really like that Sirius and Remus know about them in your story! Considering that Sirius knows what the Dursleys did to Harry, they'll be lucky if a couple of muggle heads don't end up along side the elf heads at Grimmauld - wouldn't Mrs Black's picture and Kreacher love that! Glad Neville is protective of Anna about the betrothals but she seems to be in a quandry - wonder if she knows more about her Grandma's betrothal then she has let on?! Really looking forward to the next chapter! :D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your wonderfully spirited review! You never fail to make me smile! I'm glad you are comfortable with Sirius and Remus being heavily involved in the Horcrux situation. Adults (even one as "maturity challenged" as Sirius sometimes is) are far more equipped than teenagers (even ones as brilliant and important as Harry, Hermione, and Ron) to be in Albus's confidence in the effort to destroy Voldemort (I hope!!!). Oh goodness, the image of the Dursleys at Grimmauld Place is now stuck in my mind (more as animated portraits on the wall than merely heads). If Petunia could actually speak to the portrait of Sirius's mother...their screaming matches would be beyond disturbing and probably legendary!!!



Reviewer: Dad Signed Date: 2017.11.05 - 08:43AM Title: Chapter 15 Horcruxes

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Will we expand on Anna's parents or not?

Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing! I'm not certain how to answer your question. Anna's parents are of course both deceased. Since Remus knew Andrew, it seemed logical that he would wonder about her father's opinion of the situation. This naturally led to thoughts of Anna's grandmother who raised her. If you are wondering whether the fact of Tom Riddle being Anna's grandfather will ever be known to her friends and family, the answer is yes.




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