Reviewer: CoffeeGuy Signed Date: 2018.01.31 - 05:28PM Title: Fire First
Ha! I think someone else already commented, but there are 2-2.5 cliffhangers in a single chapter. And yes, I can see that the reason would be more along reasonable scene breaks than pure author evil. Anyway, very entertaining!
Reviewer: lunagranger Signed Date: 2017.12.18 - 01:49PM Title: Fire First
Poor Gemina, who has to live a love vicariously through Ginny.Finally Harry discovered that fire is the answer. Kutgw
Very true! It was not easy to write a segment acknowledging that such a tough, heroic figure has the same human frailties as we all do, although it was vaguely alluded to by Lucy Lovelace (i.e., Luna) in the 'obituary' in Splinters. Of course, it is factors such as this that necessitated a sequel to Splinters -- to give the unspoken heroes / heroines in that story a second chance at life, and a chance to be full human characters on par with our regular favourites. Implied in there are some opportunities, and some compensation for the tough existences they have led.
Yes, identifying the fire is definitely a step in the right direction! Now to hopefully soon finished editing chapter 8 to see what the next step is.
Thank you very much for the review, Silvia!
Reviewer: MollyandArthur Signed Date: 2017.12.14 - 08:38AM Title: Fire First
Wonderful update! I particularly enjoyed the conversation between Ginny and Gemina. Fire or ice. I don't know whether to be pleased or nervous about their choice. Clearly they are all rushing into danger of one type or another. I'm glad that Traianius is hurrying after Annisgwyl towards Herculaneum. Cliffhangers are indeed prolific in this story, though I don't see that you have many other options and so will not hold it against you :)
Ah! It is possibly one of the frustrations of this story that it swept in on the winds of peril, then... remains on the brink. Danger is all around, but fate is being just a little bit aloof. Where and when will the next jolt occur? What, and to whom? Everyone who's anyone may well teeter on the edge before it's all done, but... some might wait a bit longer than others.
Thank you very much for your forbearance in terms of the cliff-hangers! I think chapter 8 is a rare break from them, with the tension coming mid-scene instead.
In any case, I greatly appreciate your kind words!
Reviewer: AuntieMuriel Signed Date: 2017.12.14 - 05:17AM Title: Fire First
Oh dearie, wouldn't it be wonderful if young Ginevra really had a twin with young Gemina. Molly's twin boys would look like choirboys, and Molly would look at least twice as old as me. Well, then she'd still look better than she's now, wouldn't she?
Verily! The extent to which Gin&Gem can induce grey hairs is hinted at in a couple chapters. They definitely do make Fred and George look 'mostly harmless'. However, in the final (mysterious) conclusion we will not have to threaten Molly's sanity (or matronly comeliness) with responsibility for such irrepressible spirit. Another ending awaits!
Sadly, Horace stiffed me at the door, perhaps because I have no claim to the sacred 28... or to the ineffable 218, for that matter. I believe he may have hindered my progress with Cuffe as well, although I am entering preliminary negotiations with Flourish & Blotts...
Chapter 8 shall bring young Harry closer... closer...
My sincere thanks for fine words of encouragement, Mlle. M!
Reviewer: RighT3rantZ Signed Date: 2017.12.13 - 03:41PM Title: Fire First
Ah yes, the repatriation of our beloved Ignotus. You have immediately cast me into the memory of the first chapter. A reminder, that I now remember. Somewhere in through the 6th from the 2nd the ol' confundo trickled in. Wilsey's reception of the insinuating.
So, let me begin with the most basic: if you're getting unwanted javacript-induced crap accompanying SIYE, then my best guess is that your browser acquired some spammy combination of unwanted apps and/or cookie-driven annoyance. Depending on which browser you have, it should be possible to alleviate the problem by cranking up browser security to the max, and perhaps selectively deleting cookies and/or personal data.
Onto more fundamental stuff, you allude, I believe to the three who, by legend, outwit the one? For a story that is nominally about them, it has taken quite a while to actually meet one of the players and he is, as you suggest, not very pleasant. Perhaps less murderous than before, though?
A preview? That may be possible toward the end of the holidays. Right now, my first drafts of chapters 8-11 are requiring a lot of editing (which I am lagging on) because of the epiphany that I reached several weeks ago on precisely how to end the piece. The general chapter shapes are stable, but I'm having to parse dialogue and key details very carefully to make sure that things align well. Anyway, hopefully I'll find time to catch up with that (and begin writing 12-15) over the next few weeks, and thus perhaps give me an opportunity to send you something that's not too misleading...
Anyway, thank you as always for the diligent reading!
Reviewer: Dad Signed Date: 2017.12.12 - 05:57PM Title: Fire First
I can feel a cheer coming on.
Sometimes the buildup can inspire a bit, yeah?
I must cautiously warn you, though, that there are a few mountains left to climb :)
Thank you for the review, Dad!
Reviewer: Aurorofthelight Signed Date: 2017.12.12 - 02:31PM Title: Fire First
Great to see a new chapter, which begs for an appropriate soliloquy in response! While reading this story, I was actually reminded of a famous Shakespeare quote from his play, "As You Like it" - ‘All the world ‘s a stage, and all the men and women merely players. They have their exits and their entrances; And one man in his time plays many parts.’ (Sorry, but you opened the door to The GLobe Theatre). This was an interesting chapter which led me to a question about this story - 'To be or not to be?' Is this a story, writing exercise or something more mysterious? Really enjoyed Act III featuring Ginny's scene with Gemina! It was almost as if she was talking with another self!
In reading this review I was 'nearly' rendered speechless!
If it had been more than 'nearly', I don't believe my readers would have believed it, so fortunately I won't stretch your credulity too far. Nonetheless, I do find myself hitting the Submit button on a placeholder reply as I contemplate several soliloquies, some philosophical robotics, at least one highly perceptive intimation, and a spirited black rooster.
Okay, I'm back to comment properly!
First of all, the "All the world's a stage" quote really caught me as a wonderful encapsulation. In particular, a theme that runs through many of my stories is the element of fate as an over-arching power. It, indeed, is the stage, and both heroes and villains strive to learn their parts and play them to the best of their abilities, but fate remains an actor of undeniable voice. That was true in Splinters, so it is perfectly reasonable to expect something comparably adventitious in this story.
Of course the 'dreams' soliloquy is very much what I had in mind when I mentioned The Tempest in my A/N. However the preceding question offers a remarkably salient phrase. Brilliant! The only corrective hint I would offer is wondering whether you should replace the definite article ('the') with the corresponding indefinite ('a')?
Finally, I should ask whether the Black Rooster Merlot is indeed from the famed Chianti Classico wine country between Siena and Florence? Needless to say, I checked to see whether any of old Will's tales hailed from thence, but no luck. Nonetheless, I'm sure a fine woody Merlot would inspire a wondrous review!
Reviewer: Gin110881 Signed Date: 2017.12.12 - 09:23AM Title: Fire First
Will Antioch really help Annisgwyl, or is he just trying to trick her. Who knows what he and his brother have done with Ignotus. Looks like a trap to me...
As in title, so in response: 'fire first'
I can state categorically (without giving up too much) that the eruption of Vesuvius was not set off by fire in the Forbidden Forest, nor vice versa. That would stretch credulity, even for an insane story like this one, right? Oddly enough, I have actually given everyone a tiny clue about the metaphysics of the fires. The clue was in a chapter prior to this. More, at this point, I shall not yet say.
So, you suspect Antioch of setting a trap? Maybe; maybe not. There's only one thing I can promise is that the authour has set a whole mine field of traps for his dear, logical readers... How evil of him.
Your fourth paragraph is all about collaboration. This is exceptionally apt, as the whole multi-threaded nature of this story is intended to emphasise the eventual collaboration. I won't yet say much about what brings this all to an end, though I'll admit that you are right that this will not conclude all in the hands of one person this time. However, I do believe that I will nonetheless deliver something unexpected. Another one of those nefarious traps ;)
Finally, I absolutely have to laugh! Yes, Harry would certainly have his hands full with even a half-Gemina! That said, though, don't even try to speculate about the ending; I think you'll like it best as a surprise.
Thank you very much for the review, Martin! It's wonderful to hear that you enjoyed the Gin&Gem scene!