Reviewer: CoffeeGuy Signed Date: 2018.02.01 - 08:45AM Title: Southern Slopes
Beautiful bits of overlap. Dreams laid over dreams, and mountain paths over mountain paths. Love how the different story lines seem to line up parallel, or blend at the edges. Feel like I'm talking about a painting.
Hey, I'm not sure if that particular point has been raised before. It is, of course, deliberate cultivation of overlap and parallel. To be honest, I frequently wait until a late edit to set a chapter title then, once it's been specified, I will go back and tweak things to accentuate the title / theme for the chapter. I don't think I'd do this for every story (it's a little bit artificial), but in a story like this (i.e., disjointed), I do it to sustain a bit of homology.
Anyway, cool that you picked that out. Thanks for the review, CG!
Reviewer: AuntieMuriel Signed Date: 2018.01.05 - 05:07AM Title: Southern Slopes
Oh, dearie, they're all running around like crazy chickens, the Gravener lass and the Briton birdie around Mount Vesuvius, the Potter lad around the Hogwarts grounds. I just hope the Potter lad will soon move his arse. Asking the Granger lass if she'd make him a Portkey to Herculaneum seems to be a good idea to me, at least better than staring into frozen flames.
Hmph. Negotiations at Flourish & Blotts have rather stalled, as the manager is of the opinion that a biography of the sort might be too inflammatory, and a bit ill-timed. I shall try some counter-arguments next week.
Yes, the crazed chickens on Vesuvius will only multiply, however a Granger-crafted Portkey might not be the best solution since that would deliver Harry on site in May 1998, which would be somewhere between five months and nineteen centuries too late. He might have to either borrow a trick from the enemy, or get lucky. Time will tell which.
Fortescue's fabulous burning ice cream requires a smidgen of saliva from a Swedish Short-Snout (I know, 'yuck'. Wish we'd never asked, eh?) which is clear evidence that Florian is more courageous and sturdy than most readers gave him credit for.
Thank you for the thoughtful comments, AM!
Reviewer: RighT3rantZ Signed Date: 2018.01.04 - 11:43AM Title: Southern Slopes
Did I detect an unseen guest with Annisgwyl as she journeyed to find the Forge? A remnant of the her titillating tryst with Traianius? A necessity to ensure the Cupla connects... just before she drank from the water...just the barest hint....or just another confundo
Many interesting points and questions! I will actually answer a fair number of them!
First of all, you are asking, as euphemistically as possible, whether Annisgwyl is pregnant, and whether that is important to the story (in the way such an occurrence factored into Splinters)? The answer to the first question is that this is an astute thing to wonder, and I have vaguely already considered that myself, but at the time of this reply fate has not yet decided. This indecision kind of tips the hat to your second question; Annisgwyl's status is indeed important to her long-term story, but it is not crucial to the resolution of the FoT plot. Excellent thinking, though.
Step out of the flame? Let me say that there will come a point in a few chapters when the flame no longer poses a barrier. This happenstance will be a major (very tenuous) development. For the time being, however, Ginny and Gemina are limited to cerebral journeying.
Harry's attempt to connect via Cupla; swaying without a breeze; trembling; forge; fire... Go down that path.
Hettie and the bird in the bag may be stuck playing phone tag (or family album tag if you prefer) for a while.
Will we find out Voldemort's sneaky plan? Yes indeed. A right bastard he is!
And yes, a good guess on Annisgwyl's peripheral flicker, but that would only happen in an alternate-alternate-AU :)
Thank you so kindly for a rather fascinating set of thoughts!
Reviewer: Aurorofthelight Signed Date: 2018.01.02 - 05:16PM Title: Southern Slopes
Frohes Neues Jahr, tatsächlich! Vor allem mit einem neuen Kapitel um es zu beginnen!! Glad I still remember alot of my Deuche vocabulary from when I took German in school! When I saw the title of this chapter I immediately thought of the Glen Campbell song, "Southern Nights", and now I can't get it out of my bloody head! Close but no cigar on Ginny reaching Harry! I have to hand it to you - I don't think I've ever heard of Deathmunchers being referred to as a "pack of punky plonkers" or "perplexed poxy pea-brains"! You must have had a sudden thing for P words(I think the only ones you missed were Peter Piper picked a peck of pickled peppers)! I have to agree with Herr Martin - I am now more confused as well! I'm also curious - who or what is a " Briton birdie" - Hermoine, Fawkes, Hedwig or someone's patronus? Will be interested to see if Annisgwyl does indeed produce another cupla(a path I guess but I never assume anything since that usually leads to trouble)! Strange, but while reading this chapter I suddenly began to think that I was in a scene from " Alice in Wonderland", but I couldn't tell if it was the Madhatter's tea party or the Queen of Hearts Croquet tournament! Annisgwyl would've made Euel Gibbons proud with her breakfast from the wild! Wonder what she would think if she realized she was on top of a volcano, which incidentally, has a whole lot of power bubbling underneath?! Nice little cliffy you left her with not to mention a possible case of vertigo! Glad to see Rob is finally getting the boyfriend/girlfriend thing! Hope Ron is having similar success! You must have spent some time with Google translate and a Roget's Thesaurus while writing this chapter! One final question I just have to ask, who were those 2 owls heckling? Looking forward to your next foray! :D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D
Ah yes -- the Teutons and their affliction with capitals. This is why I have urbane multilingual readers!Ah, there were many possible directions to run with 'southern'. My condolences with the Repetunitis -- you might need one of those cliche Queen anthems to break it. We will we will rock you! We will we will ROCK YOU! Feel any better?
Regarding the P-preponderance, I believe it's analogous to the Repetunitis, except that Hettie likely passed the affliction to Gemina, who then infected Ginny. Dangerous stuff.
Your non-assumed guess is reasonable. An answer is soon forthcoming.
The two owls are likely heckling each other. If you've never heard such an occurrence, then you might live in too urban an area, or else you tend to sleep soundly at hours that normal people, well, sleep soundly. I do not, therefore I write. If you read a bit of twisted Descartes in there, you're onto something.
Anyway, I spent way too much time on the road today, and it's badly compromised my sanity. Hopefully next time you'll find me more coherent. Either way, thank you for the review!
Author's Response: Oh, I forgot to answer a simple question: 'Briton Birdie' is synonymous with 'Celtic Chick'. Gemina, you might surmise, is rather sick of Annisgwyl, and nicknames help sustain her. Admittedly, given how many alternating characters there are, it's a bit perverse of the authour to add nicknames into the mix.
Reviewer: MollyandArthur Signed Date: 2018.01.02 - 08:12AM Title: Southern Slopes
Ohhh! Love the ending! Rob figuring out the 'boyfriend-girlfriend' thing is perfect! So, back to the angst, Annisgwyl seems to be in a situation almost as desperate as that of Harry and Ginny. Is she actually seeing what is before her or before them? Is she sensing magic they are experiencing or being struck down herself? And if it is one of the other two, which one? Too many questions I realize, and I am likely asking the wrong ones. I'm also thinking of Annisgwyl's longing for Traianius. Does it mean more than the obvious? Okay, stopping now :)
Ah, goody goody! Great to hear that you enjoyed the little exchange at the end :)
Yes, Annisgwyl has reached a point where Amaethon has (at least figuratively) intervened. Her quest is suddenly far more than just *her* quest. Things veer in an unexpected direction for her -- a wrinkle that I have carefully hinted at, but that few normal, logical people would guess. You shall see. I feel the need for a second emoticon :)
I should address your additional question about whether her vision refers to something that affects her personally, or is something referential to Ginny and Harry -- a wonderfully imaginative thought! You are not all that far off, but perhaps not in the way you imagine.
In any case, wonderful questions that keep me hopping about in my quest to traipse the line between leading and misleading. Thanks Kimberly!
Reviewer: Gin110881 Signed Date: 2018.01.01 - 07:14PM Title: Southern Slopes
Great to see another update, an update whose goal it seemed to be to increase the confusion of the reader. I must admit that I'm just as disoriented as Annisgwyl was on her trek, lol. And again, I'm quite curious how many different mysterious dark figures are moving around Vesuvio in the different timelines.
I believe the most useful saying, here, is, "The night is coldest, just before the dawn."
We have reached the point where the disparate stories are moving fairly quickly toward a unifying crisis. If we had only two story lines converging, then it would be simple to just interpolate two lines to a single point, however there are (according to my count) roughly 'six' different threads (including two antagonist plots) coming together, which means that you have a fairly complex multidimensional landscape to try to map out. I suppose that might make 3D chess seem pretty tame :)
How many dark wizards can dance on the head of a volcano? An interesting rhetorical question that shall be answered in 'time'.
As far as Annisgwyl is concerned, I suspect you will be a little bit surprised by several developments as that plays out.
My sincere appreciation for your 'wonder'ful review, Martin, und frohes neues jahr!