Reviewer: CoffeeGuy Signed Date: 2018.02.01 - 05:09PM Title: Disruptions
Ha. There's nothing that says girlfriend/boyfriend like a spicy little spat followed by reconciling. Hettie and Rob are a fun pair -- they seem a lot less trying than any Hermione/Ron pairings I've read. Also, on a completely different note, Ginny and Gemina are a riot together. I think they could be just as funny as Fred and George were. So all told, an entertaining chapter. Very!
Reviewer: RighT3rantZ Signed Date: 2018.01.12 - 11:44AM Title: Disruptions
First time we have seen dual spell casting from the same body since Splinters. Of course the host was one of the two casting in that case.
Guesses and guesses!
First of all, you know in your heart who the subdued wizard was. And this shall be confirmed in chapter 12.
Secondly, the old man whose name you do not speak will also make his entry in chapter 12. Apparently lots of 'not-so-secrets' are on the verge of being revealed!
Thirdly and lastly (for 'nowly'), you speculate (in a very Splinter-y way) about the number of stones... Before you lock into to your count with too much finality, I would advise you to think for a moment about the meaning of the lurches for which chapter 8 takes it's name. Does that, in any way, complicate the counting?
Anyway, my sincere commendation for hitting so close to the mark on multiple targets!
Reviewer: AuntieMuriel Signed Date: 2018.01.11 - 05:49AM Title: Disruptions
Oh, dearie, I'm glad to hear that Murietta is still alive. I'm sure Robert can tell only good things about his Auntie Murietta, after all, he will inherit her fortune when she's gone. Although I've heard she's bossy at times, but that's good for a young man like Robert, it prepares him for later life. He needs a woman in his life who tells him what to do.
A beautiful little irony in the way you honed in on Murietta being alive. Gemina, too, has something to say on this (I think it'll be in Chapter 13) which, I swear, was drafted before your latest note.
Yes, actually, I rather agree that both Rob and Ron are men who are at their best when prodded by strong females.
I believe you'll find that Gemina bequeaths herself both honourably and usefully in the opportunity provided. More on that to emerge soon!
Ironically, implications of your very last point overlaps with impetus emerging relative to your first statement. I realise that's a fairly obscure way for me to phrase things, but I feel a need to preserve an element of mystery.
Thank you most graciously for your feedback, Muriel!
Reviewer: Aurorofthelight Signed Date: 2018.01.09 - 02:22PM Title: Disruptions
BTW, in reference to the word 'poofty' that Hettie used to describe Rob, which definition was she referring to?
Wow, I had no idea I pulled off a semi-viable double entendre!
By 'sound a bit poofty', I actually *did* mean gay. I had originally written 'sound a bit Nancy' in there (effeminate), but most of Hettie's vernacular is Kiwi/Aussie by this time, so poofty it had to be. And that, of course, was why she had a difficult time keeping a straight face.
Now as to the second definition (lover of old music), there's clearly lots of irony there given the way I set it up... but no. Not the original intention.
Reviewer: Aurorofthelight Signed Date: 2018.01.09 - 02:16PM Title: Disruptions
(Educational note: when Gin110881 said Vielen Dank für ein weiteres großartiges Kapitel, it means, Thank you for another great chapter, to which you reply, Vielen Dank, which means Thank you very much!) Meanwhile, back at Hogwarts, Greyback is missing an arm and teed off, the Malfools are scared and confused and Moldyshorts is in another of his frequent snits, this time about a missing ring which may just be the Slytherin ring Horcrux! No wonder Ron and Hermoine are having a hard time trying to figure out what they saw! Great to see a reunion of the three timeline Ginnys and especially between Ginny and Harry! And with a surprise pop in by Gemina to boot! Seems to be a lot of popping around in this story! Nice job by Ginny and Gemina taking out whoever that was - a deathgulper perhaps?! While reading this chapter, I got the sudden feeling I was in the series, "The Chronicles of Narnia" in the story, The Lion, the witch and the Wardrobe" but nobody seems to know the way back to the wardrobe! If Prince Caspian shows up in this thing I might just scream! Egads, did Hettie say 'poofty'? That means she either thinks Rob is gay or likes to listen to old fashioned music! (per the Urban Dictionary) When Dolohov spoke to Mulciber in that accent, I'd have sworn it was Viktor Krum, except he's not in this story - I think! Hopefully we'll soon know who is out of place - them, us or your readers! Bring den nächsten! :D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D
Merci pour les conseils utiles Allemands!
Whew, a far more basic language. As I recall, we can thank Napoleon for such simplicity -- proof that the crazy Corsican was actually useful for something other than blowing up German castles.
Your comments reveal a remarkable grasp of this crazy story -- my sincere compliments! I will hint that the adversary that Ginny and Gemina subdued is more important than your run-of-the-Mühle deathgulper. Beyond that I will not spoil.
Narnia! Over the holidays, I had some relatives working their way through some documentary about the philosophical and theological implications of some discussions between J.R.R. Tolkein and C.S. Lewis. Unfortunately, I have no patience for sitting in front of any screen that I can't type things into, so I'm not sure what was said, and I know rather little about the Chronicles (other than the the lion dude is supposedly a god-like caricature), so I don't think Prince Caspian will come riding through. Ditto for Krum. Of course, nothing is certain in a bonkers story like this.
Cool review -- thank you! In Engelsk, even!
Reviewer: MollyandArthur Signed Date: 2018.01.09 - 09:17AM Title: Disruptions
Well, I can certainly understand Hettie's confusion! Traveling through both time and space would leave anyone a bit disconcerted. The fact that Mulciber and Dolohov seem to have no concrete understanding of where and when they are is typical of Voldemort. As usual I'm concerned about Annisgwyl. Is she merely unconscious or in a more damaged state? Also, I must say I love the phrase 'whingingly nasal yet deathly perilous.'
Yes, interestingly, the current track approaches a state that is both simpler (multiple story lines condensing) yet more complex (lots of characters with rather odd cause/effect status). And yes, Voldemort is fairly pleased to be unique in his understanding of the intricate plot. For all those readers who are shaking your heads, blame Riddle ;)
I am wrestling with a practical matter of, under current draft, only bringing us back to Annisgwyl in Chapter 13. I prefer to not leave a thread loose for that long, but... the scene sequence is tricky to alter or interrupt. In any case, perhaps I can say for the time being that her story is unique and may prove surprisingly, despite a series of little clues scattered about like biscuit crumbs behind a small child.
How's that for the gratuitously silly analogy of the day?
Oh, and with respect to your kind compliment, I read once that liberal use of adverbs is something akin to being complicit in the moral degeneration of culture and society and... yeah, whatever. Obviously, I scoff. Profusely. Feistily. :)
My continued gratitude for your thoughtful readership!
Reviewer: Gin110881 Signed Date: 2018.01.09 - 08:40AM Title: Disruptions
Ah yes, there're new things (hopefully) worth pondering. Greyback has stolen Cadmus' ring...but in what timeline? Or did he steal it more than once?
Zunächst einmal, vielen Dank für die Veranschaulichung der richtigen Verwendung von Großbuchstaben. Eventually, I shall learn suitable attention to detail. It's rather like learning SMS in reverse :)
Some rather interesting postulates -- thank you! I shall not delve into the first yet, however I will suggest for backstory (wrt your second paragraph) reconsidering the blithe assumption toward the end of Splinters that it was harmless to let Mundungus knick the drained Cupla. In any case, yes, Voldemort was for a brief moment being uncommonly transparent.
I find myself skipping daintily past your paragraph 4 (er, okay, I can't risk say that Gin&Gem together on the same side of any fight just isn't fair :), and progressing onto point 5, to which I say this -- you'll have too wait until chapter 13 for it, but yes, you do catch the tail end of a Harry / Gemina conversation and, needless to say, what Harry comes away with is not all fluff!
As far as Ginny picking up a few choice Geminisms -- great idea. An idea that it's not too late to implement. Thanks!
Russian? Are you from east of the wall, or were there interestingly pragmatic sociopolitics at work in the shadow of the curtain? In any case, I know no Russian, but fortunately can generally read Cyrillic -- a byproduct of having made the effort to learn all the Greek characters for my math / science pursuits.
Eighth comment -- indeed, things are screwy! Causality is, at best, jumbled right now. Good luck to those analytical sorts who seek to diagram this plot when it's all done :) It is actually mostly consistent (in a high dimensional sense) but I assume that sane readers will have more pressing matters ;)
Anyway, you're welcome for the chapter, and I thank you for continuing to spice up not only the writing experience, but actually the writing as well!