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Reviewer: pottermania Signed Date: 2009.11.11 - 03:39PM Title: Chapter 16: Going To School
I like them being at Hogwarts...it may seem stupids but I feel they are much safer there...and some much is familiar. It was interesting that the professors obviously were discomfited by their presence,
Reviewer: dakkon13 Signed Date: 2006.10.22 - 07:13PM Title: Chapter 16: Going To School
I'm sorry I haven't reviewed before, but I wanted to get current first. First comment would be that I feel about this the same as I do about cannon, if the Trio AND Ginny are not happy and safe AND together at the end, then this is just an interesting story with a disappointing ending. Just my opinion. ;) The actual writing has been very good. I like the story in general. The Ginny situation is of the biggest interest to me. I have long ago fallen in love with her character and must admit that your story has a fresh perspective on what she might do in book seven. I like it, and I'me very frustrated by it as well. I was getting very annoyed with Hermione refusing to enlighten the boys on what she thought Ginny was doing. Not telling the first time was out of frustration and understandable. Continuing to not tell just seemed spiteful. I know the feeling of not being able to understand something and having someone tell you that it is obvious only makes it ten times worse. Well, keep at it and update soon.
Author's Response: Hermione is a bit of a... well in HBP she was kind of spiteful, so I'm continuing that a bit ;-) It's one of those things that I want to 'grow her out of' eventually but that's one of the things that drove everyone nuts from HBP and I tend to agree, although I can see why she would act that way. I'm glad you're enjoying the Ginny stuff! I love Ginny too and it's a blast to write an interesting, in my humble opinion of course, plot for her! Thanks for the review!
Reviewer: Flibertygibet Signed Date: 2006.10.18 - 04:01AM Title: Chapter 16: Going To School
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Reviews For Harry Potter and the Final Flame
AllChapter 1: The Journey Away From HomeChapter 2: Dudley DrunkChapter 3: Going HomeChapter 4: The Brush OffChapter 5: Going BackChapter 6: Propositions and RememberingChapter 7: The Search BeginsChapter 8: His Severed SoulChapter 9: Leaving The LairChapter 10: Lost and FoundChapter 11: The Road HomeChapter 12: A Chilling ThoughtChapter 13: The Locket's SecretChapter 14: Their First HorcruxChapter 15: Ron and HermioneChapter 16: Going To School
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Reviewer: Flibertygibet Signed Date: 2006.10.18 - 03:51AM Title: Chapter 16: Going To School
Ok, you know I love your writing I've loved everyone of your stories including this one but for the first time I'm having a hard time reviewing for this one. Not that its not as good as the rest, if not better, but (and I feel terrible for having to say this I really do) its taking forever to get to the point. 4 out of every 5 chapters has them doing absolutely nothing of importance. I'm not saying that you should change a single word of it, but maybe make the chapters longer so that when the chapter is up to read there is actually something TO read. Every time there is a new post I get all excited and think 'awesome, I wonder what's going to happen in this chapter' only to read that they went to the graveyard and found out nothing then went to the school, returned some books, decided that they need to search the school and then, well, thats it. Do you understand? I feel like I'm hating on the story and on you, I'm really not because all of your writing is so creative and well written that I enjoy reading your stuff, and this is the first time I have ever felt this way about anything I have read of yours. But I can only call you the most wonderful author I've read so many times before it becomes old. And thats an awful thing because you are the most wonderful author I've read but it would seem fake to me if I reviewed with "wow that was an excellent description of the walk to the castle" This story is NOT boring because when something happens you really go all out, you never disappoint when it comes to progression in the story. And cliff hangers in a story keep people interested thats just fine with me but I feel like the last 2-3 chapters have been one big cliffhanger, where nothing really happens and you are posting just for the sake of posting. Please, Please dont be upset or mad because I do love this story I cant say that enough. But I dont think that as a reviewer it would be benificial to you if I keep saying how great the story is without constructive criticism. I respect that this is your story and that it is completely up to you. I also understand that you have put a lot of planning into this story. This is fine too, I'm not suggesting you to change a single comma, but you ask for reviews for your chapters, good or bad, and I, as a faithful reader, try to do so because I truly believe, that reviewing is what makes an author a better writer but I cant give an honest review on something when I dont think there is anything happening in a chapter. Dang I feel like a total *itch and you are totally within your rights to tell me to "f" off if you like, I'm really sorry to sound mean but I get the impression from this story that you dont really know where you want to go with it. And that pains me because it really is good.
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Author's Response: woah, with this program I can't delete a repeat review. Ah well, that's the way that goes.
Reviewer: Flibertygibet Signed Date: 2006.10.18 - 03:51AM Title: Chapter 16: Going To School
Ok, you know I love your writing I've loved everyone of your stories including this one but for the first time I'm having a hard time reviewing for this one. Not that its not as good as the rest, if not better, but (and I feel terrible for having to say this I really do) its taking forever to get to the point. 4 out of every 5 chapters has them doing absolutely nothing of importance. I'm not saying that you should change a single word of it, but maybe make the chapters longer so that when the chapter is up to read there is actually something TO read. Every time there is a new post I get all excited and think 'awesome, I wonder what's going to happen in this chapter' only to read that they went to the graveyard and found out nothing then went to the school, returned some books, decided that they need to search the school and then, well, thats it. Do you understand? I feel like I'm hating on the story and on you, I'm really not because all of your writing is so creative and well written that I enjoy reading your stuff, and this is the first time I have ever felt this way about anything I have read of yours. But I can only call you the most wonderful author I've read so many times before it becomes old. And thats an awful thing because you are the most wonderful author I've read but it would seem fake to me if I reviewed with "wow that was an excellent description of the walk to the castle" This story is NOT boring because when something happens you really go all out, you never disappoint when it comes to progression in the story. Please, Please dont be upset or mad because I do love this story I cant say that enough. But I dont think that as a reviewer it would be benificial to you if I keep saying how great the story is without constructive criticism. I respect that this is your story and that it is completely up to you. I also understand that you have put a lot of planning into this story. This is fine too, I'm not suggesting you to change a single comma, but you ask for reviews for your chapters, good or bad, and I, as a faithful reader, try to do so because I truly believe, that reviewing is what makes an author a better writer but I cant give an honest review on something when I dont think there is anything happening in a chapter. Dang I feel like a total *itch and you are totally within your rights to tell me to "f" off if you like, I'm really sorry to sound mean but I get the impression from this story that you dont really know where you want to go with it. And that pains me because it really is good.
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Author's Response: You're fine! Don't worry, I'm not upset and this is the kind of review I love... it's the good ole kick in the bum. The really funny thing is that I know exactly where I'm going and I'm having an issue getting everyone else on board. SO I am going to brain storm with a few people and see if I can't get that issue resolved. It's going to be tough because I really think that keeping a lot of the plot will be better but you're right, we can't have everyone totally missing it.
Author's Response: a lot of the plot secret* and for some reason it sumbitted your review twice so I'm going to delete the second one.
Reviewer: Wolfs_Scream Signed Date: 2006.10.17 - 10:31PM Title: Chapter 16: Going To School
Heh -- at least this time they have a certain amount of official santion for (re-)visiting the Slytherin common room. (Well, it would be Hermione's first visit, but the guys have been there -- briefly -- during 2nd year.)
Well done, of course! :-)
Author's Response: I just wrote that bit, in the common room... should be fun :-D You'll probably see another chapter ready for beta'ing tomorrow. Thanks again for everything!
Reviewer: _kb_ Signed Date: 2006.10.17 - 08:07PM Title: Chapter 16: Going To School
I will have to say you have an interesting plot. And I still don't know that I like what you're doing to Ginny, but hey, you're the author. :-) The Slytherin area is where I'd search first. :-)
Author's Response: I usually write about and I tend to focus on her more than on the other characters. So when I conciously decided to move in another direction, it was with the plan all along to make sure that Ginny got a really great spot in the plot. Actually... if you want to be technical, I thought up the plot for Ginny and then made a story for the trio to go around it.
Reviewer: wvchemteach Signed Date: 2006.10.17 - 04:26PM Title: Chapter 16: Going To School
Transitional chapter... not too much happening here...
I'm not sure what is up with the professors... and the thought of Hogsmeade in ruins is eerie.
It seems this plot is much deeper and more intricate than I ever imagined considering that we are 16 chapters in and it seems the Trio is absolutely 'stumped' for the most part.
As for Ginny... I'm torn between wanting someone to grab her up and just not wanting to hear about her at all. She's become a dangerous distraction for Harry... even worse in this situation than if she was by his side.
I can't necessarily blame her for making her choice that she did since Harry didn't tell her what is 'really' going on... but I have to believe she is smart enough to read between the lines to know that he really is The Chosen One. If she was able to make that leap of logic and still made her decision then I have to wonder if she understands what she really means to Harry and the effect it would be on him if something happens to her. If she is killed then I find it likely that Harry would become reckless with his own life... not caring if he survives the final confrontation with Snake-Eyes. Given she made the decision then I have to assume she doesn't understand what she means to Harry... and the blame comes back to Harry for never letting her know.
I've rambled on and to be honest I'm not sure what my point is... if you figure it out... let me know.
Author's Response: I have a better arguement!!!!!!!!!!!! *does happy dance* You did ramble but you lead me down a great path! :-)
Reviewer: eaglebird Signed Date: 2006.10.17 - 02:36PM Title: Chapter 16: Going To School
I must be clueless, like Ron. I didn't get any clues at all out of that chapter. I did feel a longing to know more about what is happening with Ginny ....... but that's your big mystery isn' it? Even Tonks was cryptic and un-cooperative. Looking forward to your next tease of a chapter.
Author's Response: It's okay, no one's gotten it yet and that's how I want it to be for awhile. BUT if you do figure it out, good for you! It should be an interesting journey! :-)
