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Reviewer: pottermania Signed Date: 2009.11.11 - 05:53PM Title: Chapter 21: Forget To Live
Gosh that was an incredible chapter. I really wasn't sure where it was going and was terrified that it was some sort of trap. I love your closing paragraphs. It's perfect that Harry sees a future with Ginny as not something to be afraid of but as what he desperately wants. His love for her and his desperation for what it will give him, will, I'm sure, give him what he needs to defeat Voldermort. I adore that line (and the italics just made me fist my hand!) "He wanted it. Badly" So few words, but with a vast meaning.
Reviewer: Chunky Signed Date: 2006.12.02 - 10:37PM Title: Chapter 21: Forget To Live
Heyo. Outstanding job you did. I was just digging about some new storys to read when I stumbled over this little treasure. Couldnt stop reading ^^ that should give you a hint an your writing skills, I guess. Well some things I noticed that may be improved, though it is not really essential...
At first, the whole world seems a bit... well... plain to me. Not much details, just going forth with the story, without an eye on the environment. I know this is one HELL of a work to describe a whole world, but well, its worth it. I did this a few times and I actually gut some people to have tears in their eyes once they finished reading. Your story is great, no doubt. But its lacking of depth. It sort of hovers in nothing. If you could improve that you will have people crying all over you ;)
Well frankly, thats the only weak point I found.... just keep going :)
As usual I apologize for my bad spelling and grammar, english is not my native language, so please forgive me ;)
--Chunky
Author's Response: Okay, I tried to add more visuals to chapter 22 but I will be the first to admit that it is my weakest point. I get bored with writing/reading descriptions so I tend to leave them out. For those who are visual and need them, it really sucks though and I am working on it. Thank you for the kick in the bum to remember, I appreiciate it :-)
Reviewer: eaglebird Signed Date: 2006.12.02 - 12:42PM Title: Chapter 21: Forget To Live
This was one of the more powerful dreams I have ever read about. Not only did it lead to Harry obtaining a horcrux and giving him the clue for how to destroy it, but I also wonder if the rest is meant as foreshadowing of his future with Ginny. I'm surprised that not more protection was taken by the three against a possible explosion. You would think that it would be the first protective measure they would take. Well, on to the next horcrux and now closer to meeting Voldemort and possibly seeing Ginny.
Author's Response: Boy I hope it is foreshadowing! But in their defense, I thought that if I had them protected against an explosion, it would be too easy. ;-)
Reviewer: Wolfs_Scream Signed Date: 2006.12.02 - 09:16AM Title: Chapter 21: Forget To Live
Very good, though I still think that naming Ginny's son "Thomas" would remind folks of one of her former boyfriends, which seems odd, at best.
I wonder about Harry sharing his vision/illusion -- with whom, and under what circumstances. Assuming he ever does, the the ensuing interaction ought to be quite interesting.
Author's Response: I know... I know... but see I chose that name intentionally because he was one of the great people from the Grail quests and I sort of *loosely* modeled this chapter after a grail quest. So yeah, didn't really have to sit well because it wasn't reality, which is why I kept it. Harry wasn't in his right mind anyway. :-D
Reviewer: Flibertygibet Signed Date: 2006.12.02 - 12:28AM Title: Chapter 21: Forget To Live
By Far the best chapter in the story yet. at first I was like what the hell is going on? He's got to be dreaming or something. cause even though you said that Harry was sucked into the box it still seemed kinda like he was imagining it. So I was confused and then Ginny shows up and almost in passing Harry mentions a baby and I'm thinkin ok he's seriously cracked his noggin but I kept reading and then it all comes together. I was reminded of the scene in Triwizard Tournament where they have to get past the riddling sphinx and was really impressed with how you wrote Harry through all of that. So smart and intuitive, never hesitating for a second. It gave me hope, that He will someday (hopefully soon) actually be able to act like that. Right now he lets his emotions overpower him and he uses the emotions as the force behind his action. Which almost always leads to him getting into deeper trouble than he began with. It also gave me hope for their futures. And I think right now with everything that the three of them are destined to do they definatly needed a little light to shine some hope into their lives so that everything doesnt look so grim. They need something other than death and misery and being the "saviours of the wizarding world" to look forward too. Overall, when it was done with I let out this huge breath I didnt even realize I'd been holding. So well written that even when you confuse its not enough confusion to lose us and then when you finally reveal what you've hidden its another one of those "smack the forehead' moments. So again, in my opinion, this was by far the best chapter yet.
A standing ovation for you and your imaginitive brain.
Well done.
Fliberty
Author's Response: Goodness what a review! Thank you and I'm glad you enjoyed it. I actually thought you probably would, so it was a nice wait to see what you thought. I started planning this chapter with the realization that I needed to do this one differently from the others and I had just watched The Da Vinci Code and it all just fell together. Anyway, thank you for all the lovely compliments and here's hoping I can 'out-do' myself again before I finish the story. :-D
Reviewer: marinepotterfan Signed Date: 2006.12.01 - 08:51PM Title: Chapter 21: Forget To Live
Another one bites the dust
Author's Response: LOL yes, indeed.
Reviewer: Milk Signed Date: 2006.12.01 - 01:00PM Title: Chapter 21: Forget To Live
wow! that was so cool. more pleeeeeeeeeeease!
Author's Response: Next chapter is up :-)
