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Reviewer: isabel380 Signed Date: 2016.08.16 - 11:21PM Title: All My Dreams, Torn Asunder. A Little Problem and The Rat Revealed

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Someone mentioned the Butterfly Effect, that Harry could drastically alter the future. Uh, that's the whole point! Voldemort won and Harry lost everything. And everyone he ever loved. Any future he creates is going to be an improvement.



Reviewer: SYLVELLE Signed Date: 2014.08.12 - 12:49PM Title: All My Dreams, Torn Asunder. A Little Problem and The Rat Revealed

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Interesting story so far. Just found it when you updated. I've never read a time travel where Harry blatantly tells Albus at least he's from the future. What problems will that bring?



Reviewer: pottermania Signed Date: 2012.01.29 - 03:59PM Title: All My Dreams, Torn Asunder. A Little Problem and The Rat Revealed

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Love the way six year old Harry is talking to them all . It's going to be awfully hard for him to wait all these years ahead to get ginny again (and of course she needs to fall in love with him too!)



Reviewer: foxfire23 Signed Date: 2010.12.27 - 06:42PM Title: All My Dreams, Torn Asunder. A Little Problem and The Rat Revealed

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HAH!!! A story in which Harry has more secrets than the Great Dumbledore...love it!



Reviewer: mamu2 Signed Date: 2010.08.16 - 04:55PM Title: All My Dreams, Torn Asunder. A Little Problem and The Rat Revealed

Just started this. I'm not sure how Harry is going to be able to relate to Ron and Ginny and eventually Hermione as an adult trapped in a six year old's body. Especially talking like an adult.

I'll keep reading...



Reviewer: peregrin Signed Date: 2010.01.04 - 01:34PM Title: All My Dreams, Torn Asunder. A Little Problem and The Rat Revealed

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Reviewer: Artistand Signed Date: 2008.10.14 - 12:53AM Title: All My Dreams, Torn Asunder. A Little Problem and The Rat Revealed

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I like the idea of your story and I am looking forward to reading more of it. It is both interesting and creative.

I hope the following criticism is constuctive. I am not trying to be mean.

Your chapter contains numerous errors in grammar and misuse of homynyms (your/you're). I am American and I believe you are from Austrailia so I do realize there is a difference in how we speak and write English. But please proofread. And then do it again and ask someone else to do it with you. The best way I know is to work backwards paragraph by paragraph. It helps tokeep your attention not focused on the plot but on possible errors. Spell chck is great but inadequate.

I hope that you continue to write. Your story is too good to skip but after awhile I get annoyed and skip to find another story. Good luck!

Author's Response: Actualy I'm british. and there is a difference between american speak nad english speak as well. and since Harry Potter was based in england, written by an eglish author i will keep it british :). This isn't meant to be an attack. This is just explaining. Thankyou for your critism. when its constructive critism like your i dont mind it at all.

Author's Response: And now i just realised that this was the very first chapter. and yes. its very bad :D my first ten or eleven are. if you could get through nad put up with it until year two. you will see that my writing improves dramaticaly. Of course you're more than welcome to stop if you're not enjoying reading it

Author's Response: p.s and yes i can't type :P



Reviewer: Larry Signed Date: 2008.10.09 - 11:50AM Title: All My Dreams, Torn Asunder. A Little Problem and The Rat Revealed

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I see a great story in the making here, well written and well don.



Reviewer: hms42 Signed Date: 2008.09.30 - 03:26PM Title: All My Dreams, Torn Asunder. A Little Problem and The Rat Revealed

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Reviewer: gin_gin7 Signed Date: 2008.05.01 - 03:25PM Title: All My Dreams, Torn Asunder. A Little Problem and The Rat Revealed

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amazing! update soon PLEASE!!!!



Reviewer: runnerman87 Signed Date: 2007.10.21 - 01:16AM Title: All My Dreams, Torn Asunder. A Little Problem and The Rat Revealed

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Does Harry know about The Butterfly Effect? Because I imagine that even a little think like getting Sirius out of jail will throw a massive wrench in the works of future effects.



Reviewer: ace2552 Anonymous Date: 2007.10.18 - 12:04AM Title: All My Dreams, Torn Asunder. A Little Problem and The Rat Revealed

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Reviewer: BeyondRedHorizons Signed Date: 2007.10.17 - 11:57PM Title: All My Dreams, Torn Asunder. A Little Problem and The Rat Revealed

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Reread the chapter, and I really can't figure out what Harry's being punished for. A week's detention, plus points, for defending himself - and Ginny - from an unprovoked attack? It's even more ridiculous because what Harry did to Malfoy was so mild. Ginny doesn't even get a reprimand from Slughorn when she uses the bat bogey hex on Smith at the beginning of HBP, but Harry's threatened with expulsion for repelling two stinging hexes and retaliating with a flinging hex? Dumbledore shouldn't even have needed to get involved.

Now that Harry and Ginny together, the real question is how she's going to take it when he reveals the truth about himself to her.



Reviewer: Kingslee Signed Date: 2007.09.19 - 12:58PM Title: All My Dreams, Torn Asunder. A Little Problem and The Rat Revealed

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Interesting idea for a story. I'm surprised that you had Harry return as a six year old. The Peter story line is surprising since he's so crucial to Voldemort's return.



Reviewer: nwsgrl032190 Signed Date: 2007.07.23 - 10:27PM Title: All My Dreams, Torn Asunder. A Little Problem and The Rat Revealed

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ginny seams to smart for a 5 year old but i still think this is awesome



Reviewer: Victor Aagaard Signed Date: 2007.06.22 - 02:29PM Title: All My Dreams, Torn Asunder. A Little Problem and The Rat Revealed

Ten for plot. Ten for characterisation. Five for writing mechanics. I'm just a finicky grammarian, though, so don't mind me. :-) Very well written.



Reviewer: Victor Aagaard Signed Date: 2007.06.22 - 02:25PM Title: All My Dreams, Torn Asunder. A Little Problem and The Rat Revealed

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Ten for plot. Ten for characterisation. Five for writing mechanics. I'm just a finicky grammarian, though, so don't mind me. :-) Very well written.



Reviewer: Firebolt2006 Signed Date: 2007.03.31 - 05:18PM Title: All My Dreams, Torn Asunder. A Little Problem and The Rat Revealed

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Great first chapter. I love these type stories. Keep up the good work.



Reviewer: Breanie Signed Date: 2007.01.18 - 02:44PM Title: All My Dreams, Torn Asunder. A Little Problem and The Rat Revealed

wow so good!



Reviewer: Breanie Signed Date: 2007.01.18 - 02:43PM Title: All My Dreams, Torn Asunder. A Little Problem and The Rat Revealed

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wow so good!




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