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Reviewer: I Love Ginerva Signed Date: 2012.04.18 - 01:01AM Title: Stopping Quirell
in this chapter you have Ron's knight moving to "a spot three spaces in front and one square to the right", however in chess a knight can only move TWO spaced forward and one space to either side...
ILG
Reviewer: foxfire23 Signed Date: 2010.12.28 - 05:23PM Title: Stopping Quirell
So much for Quirrellmort
Reviewer: Larry Signed Date: 2008.10.10 - 02:11AM Title: Stopping Quirell
The one thing I like about your story is the fact that Neville is included more and is part of the pack. Well done.
Reviewer: Kingslee Signed Date: 2007.09.19 - 02:49PM Title: Stopping Quirell
Thank goodness the squib act is over with. I hope you don't consider doing anything like this in the future. Interesting idea to have Sirius help protect the stone.
Reviewer: swordchucks Signed Date: 2006.09.20 - 12:35PM Title: Stopping Quirell
I think you could stand to have a little more polish and beta reading go into your story, but aside from that, I enjoy it. I'm really quite addicted to this sort of fic, in any case, so you've got me there. There's are a lot of little things I could say, but I fully realize that they're not things that are "wrong" so much as things which were handled differently than I would have.
I find Harry's insecurities to be some of the funniest bits in the story.
Reviewer: Kezzabear Signed Date: 2006.09.20 - 11:55AM Title: Stopping Quirell
I am enjoying this story - evil cliffhanger though!!!
Just one thing that's bugging me, you keep using the word 'wandering/wander' when you should be using 'wonder', Wander, with an a is when someone walks around without purpose and you've used it exclusively when you mean someone was wondering, or thinking about a puzzle. It'd be a lot less distracting if you could fix that up.
Hope you can update soon as I am looking forward to what happens next.
Reviewer: Dragen Signed Date: 2006.09.20 - 08:33AM Title: Stopping Quirell
What another great chapter, I can't wait to see more... how on earth did Quirrell get past Sirius room that portacted the stone?? I hope NOW, Harry will do more and more magic, and it get more powerful too... keep up the great work, and update soon.
