harry does not do enough to change things for the better ot make things easier for himself and others. like risking his and friends lives for the stone wen he could have done it very easily by himself by stopping Quirrell before he went down the trap door. also he could have avoided revealing to the whole school and thus to voldemort that he is a Parselmouth thus having another advantage later on. and his biggest mistake. not taking the diary for ginny

PS more the the twins would be great

This is a good story overall. I like the inventive re-imagining of things in the HP universe, among other things. However, several typos distracted me and interrupted the flow, not a good idea as it "breaks the illusion" that good fiction creates. Also, you cite some passages from the books, but seem to give no credit to the things that come from the movies. A simple (Harry Potter and the Sorceror's Stone, movie) would do, for example. Otherwise, keep up the good work and remember to read over your work before submission if you choose to forego the use of a beta.

Nice chapter so finnally some one gives harrry a pices of there mind over his very stupid decision of letting ginny getting the diary although this is something that dumbledoor & sirus should have done at the beging of the year so hpefully when ginny dose find out as iam sure she will iam hopping that she relly lets those two have it at least harry has some deffence in that he truley belived it was the right thing to do.

i hope everything works out

I finished reading the chapters before this one a day or two ago, and was waiting for this chapter to become validated before I reviewed.

I really like this. I almost didnt get past chapter one because of the grammar and word usage were horrible (I AM A GRAMMAR NAZI!) but the plot seemed really interesting, so I persevered, and am quite glad that I did.

I really like where youre going with this. Are we going to see Luna anytime soon? I was slightly surprised that you didnt have her meet up with the others, but Im sure you have a reason.

I really have enjoyed this, and look forward to the next chapters.

For some reason, I have the feeling that the Diary isnt so out of play as Harry believes. I have a feeling that Ginny is somehow going to get it or something. It would make so much more sense for Harry to leave it with Sirius or in his room at Potter Manor; that way, its completely and totally safe from Ginny.

I cant wait to see how you end this year. And Harry and Ginny are getting very close, in more ways than strictly friendship. I cant wait until they get together.

I find myself weary of Ginny's reaction to Harry being from the future. She will no doubt be angry with him for some time, but hopefully, they will work things out.

So they're already married? The marriage bond or whatever you have marriage as in your Universe carries back, or over, into the past? Interesting.

I do hope you update as soon as possibly possible. I love this so far. Though, I do see some word usage problems still, and grammar here and there. One such instance is when you use the word 'wander' instead of 'wonder'. To wander is to go about, someone wanders through woods, the streets, so on. To wonder is to think about. One wonders what people think of them.

That was just one thing that glares at me, and I had to tell you. I really do like this, though, and wait, eagerly, I might add, for the next chapter.

~Tricia~

aw, danget... sucks that Harry didnt think that through

I'm glad Godric told Harry off.