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Reviewer: TomBombadil Signed Date: 2017.08.23 - 04:10AM Title: Chapter 4: What a Week

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Wow! We have already discussed this, but Harry's rejection of Ginny feels terribly wrong! I was furious with Jo Rowling for what she did with Harry and Ginny. In my own effort to expand the epilogue while remaining true to canon, I really struggled to have Harry's explanation for his behavior when they were apart make sense and allow Ginny to retain her sense of dignity. I see you doing the same thing and utilizing many of the same arguments I used. We can make it make sense, but I was left with the belief that JKR was simply using Harry's nobility as a cheap trick so she could continue with the trio format. Ron's terrible insecurity and jealousy of Harry's relationship with Hermione's would not have made sense if he was constantly wrapped around Ginny! The vision of Harry returning his necklace to Ginny is heartbreaking! He is rejecting the piece of herself that she sacrificed for him! He is rejecting HER! I know you felt bound to follow canon when you wrote this but, DAMN! I'm not sure how any relationship could withstand this kind of personal rejection! I look forward to seeing how you handle this. I sincerely hope you didn't decide to keep the apart for almost a year!

Author's Response: The part of this story that still feels wrong to me after all these years is Harry's rejection of Ginny. You're quite right that I struggled with that part of the story because it seems counterproductive to their mutual goal of getting rid of Voldemort. However, there is the possibility that the Horcrux within Harry's scar is asserting some influence on him, making him reject her and maybe she recognizes the signs of this for what they are and is strong enough not to lose hope. I also like to think that the time Ginny spends with her mother is taken up with talk about her relationship with Harry and the sort of motherly advice Molly can dish out to bolster her daughter's flagging spirits. You'll see how strong Ginny is the further you go into this story. Oh, I promise Harry and Ginny won't be apart for a year. Thanks for reading.



Reviewer: Gin110881 Signed Date: 2015.05.11 - 07:04AM Title: Chapter 4: What a Week

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Ginny was so glad to meet Harry, and now she's disappointed. Harry was very rude. If you love someone, you should be more respectful to the other. His words and his behaviour towards Ginny do not match.
With hindsight, it would have been better for Ginny's mood, if she had not gone to Mrs. Figg's. She is hurt deeply, and rightly so.
Just to be make it clear, I am upset about Harry and not the story!

I do not know what it is (my English is not so good that I can distinguish between the nuances), but this story can I read more fluently than the previous two. And these were already well readable for me.

It is a great story so far! Tanks!



Author's Response: I think you'll find that my skill as a writer is what is making this story a little more readable for you. I'll take it as a compliment that you find this story easier to read. I also understand you being upset with Harry. However, in his defense, he's at a point in his life where he's now feeling the responsibility of the prophecy and is beginning to question whether it's a good idea to keep secrets from Ginny, when they have this marvelous method of communication due to the bond. Yes, he blocked her thoughts at Mrs Figg's but in the long run, I think he will eventually open up to her, once he understands the role he wants Ginny to play for him. Does that make sense? I hope so.



Reviewer: pottermania Signed Date: 2011.09.19 - 04:22PM Title: Chapter 4: What a Week

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I like your previous response about Dudley believing that Harry wouldn't look after his injury properly without Madam Pomfrey or also Giny bullying him into focussing on getting his shoulder mended, Harry did need someone else to do it!

When you explained about Ginny enjoying doing the laundry with her mum because it gave her a ot of one-on-one with her I was hoping a big "girl" talk was going to be had about Harry! But there was a bit right at then end of the chapter:)

I chortled away at Harry and Ginny sitting so close at first at Mrs Figgs and the picture of Ron doing everything he could not to look in their direction!

Harry blanking Ginny must have been very hard for her, but Harry has to keep things from her and it probably hurt him too to do it.

I found the giving back for safekeeping of the pheonix pendant really moving and I was REALLY moved deeply at the point when they communicated their love for each other. I kept re-reading that one part..."Harry inhaled sharply, the green of his eyes intensifying at her words. I love you, too, Ginny. Thank you." It seemed so poignant but at the same time sad...a farewell. On her return to the Burrow ginny tried hard to disguise her disquiet and just get away to be by herself, but of course mothers always know when things are out of kilter:)

Author's Response: What a lovely review! I'll start with Ginny. As much as she and Molly both hate to do laundry, it's a necessary task that has to be done whether its done the Muggle way or magically. It's usually done by the women of the house, but in the Weasley family, Molly taught all her children how to do it. Still, Ginny ends up helping nine times out of ten because she likes the time with her mother: if Molly used the time to lecture Ginny rather than let her daughter choose the topics, I don't think they'd have the rapport they do in this story. So... no big mother/daughter talk until the end. Two things about the tea: first, writing Ron as the censuring big brother was a lot of fun because for some reason, I pictured my grandmother's sitting room as the setting for Mrs Figg's house and also Ron has always felt their parents hold him responsible for Ginny and he definitely doesn't want to mess this up; and second, writing how Harry forced himself not to tell Ginny things he knows was difficult for him, but he made up for it in the end when they exchanged "I love yous". I'm really glad you liked that part. It's one of my favorites, too. Oh... P.S. Mothers do have a sixth sense when it comes to their children...



Reviewer: santafe Signed Date: 2010.04.11 - 05:07PM Title: Chapter 4: What a Week

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A really good chapter. I enjoyed Harry and Ginny trying to be discreet in front of Mrs. Figg, and Ron's reaction. I also liked the way you handle the mental communication concept and the pendants. The thing that most impressed was the linkage between Harry trying to keep Ginny safe and Molly's brothers doing the same for her. That connection is one that I have never seen explored that way before. Gives Ginny an extra anchor. Thanks for writing it. SF

Author's Response: I'm glad you like the chapter. The first part was fun to write because I was exploring the ways Harry and Ginny could non-verbally communicate in front of Ron and Mrs. Figg. The pendants and their mental communication link will definitely be an important part of this story and will serve them well all the way to the end. As for Molly telling Ginny about how she felt when her brothers left on missions, it was time for a little mother-daughter understanding so that Ginny knows she's not alone: it will definitely be her anchor later in the story. I look forward to reading your next review.~~Arnel



Reviewer: knightsbridge Signed Date: 2009.06.05 - 09:40AM Title: Chapter 4: What a Week

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Reviewer: NotACat Signed Date: 2008.05.16 - 09:30AM Title: Chapter 4: What a Week

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I can't help feeling that leaving that necklace off is going to prove a bad decision...

Author's Response: I can't believe how perceptive you are. You're picking up on all my hints and I'm jumping up and down because a reader has finally cottoned on! Thanks for your review.



Reviewer: Miri Signed Date: 2007.10.08 - 01:41PM Title: Chapter 4: What a Week

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Another enjoyable chapter!

Yes, your Ginny showed just the right balance between wanting to insist on being with her beloved Harry and a mature realisation as to why she couldn't ( me, I wanted th shake the prat when he blocked her thoughts LOL! but that's my own reaction ;-) do so. Poor Ginny...I hope someone realises just being left behind is going to do to her. It seems like Molly does at least.

I continue to enjoy your take on Ron. I'm bewildered by those fanfic authors who claim that Ron ( and/or Hermione! ) have never been good friends to Harry, especially when they ignore the times that Harry made some friendship goofs. I sometimes wonder if they've read the same HP books that I have with the numerous times that all three of the trio have done caring things for each other. None of them are perfect but they do try to be a good friend to the others. And now you're adding Ginny to the mix in just a great way.

BTW, I noted and chuckled over the little bit of business of Ginny preparing the tea, in just the right way no less ( a good many people make tea in just horrible ways ), while she talked to Mrs. Figg. A nice contrast between a mundane, commonplace chore and the fearfulness of the discussion of Voldemort's actions. Also. that was quite a nice tea that Mrs. Figg put on.

Lokking forwrd to the next chapter, especially to see what happens with the parting of Harry and Dudley.

Author's Response: I'm glad you like my Ron and Ginny. They're two of my favorite characters and I've tried to do them justice in this story. Their tea at Mrs Figg's occasioned a special meal because Mrs Figg has a huge soft spot for Harry, so she pulled out all the stops. (It also gave me the opportunity to get out my British cookbooks and go through them looking for the perfect foods, as well as the proper way to prepare the tea pot! I love making tea the British way and began learning the art of brewing it when I discovered SS/PS!) It was fun, too, to have Ginny instinctively know how to make the perfect pot of tea--I'm sure her mother would have drilled it into her at a young age! I appreciate you reviews and hope to have Chapter Five out soon.



Reviewer: Wolfs_Scream Signed Date: 2007.10.08 - 01:22PM Title: Chapter 4: What a Week

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I see that Molly remains perceptive -- of necessity, no doubt; still, it's good to see.

Yeah, I'd expect that Harry giving Ginny the Phoenix pendant -- even merely for safe-keeping -- would be unlikely to go over well. I'd not have blamed her had her reaction been less subdued. I get the impression -- ;probably because of that "sudden mischievous smile" -- that she's in the planning stages of something for which she'd be extremely unlikely to get permission (and will thus likely seek forgiveness at some later date). :-}

I suppose Ron & Ginny took the news about Sundat afternoon about as well as couldl be expected. But Mrs. Figg appears to have helped Ginny change her perspective a bit. I wonder if she'll be inclined to share her thus-acquired insight with anyone else....

Well done.

Author's Response: Being a mum myself, I have quite the affinity for Molly Weasley. She's had a lot of practice being perceptive to her children's needs and because she has detected that things are not quite right with Ginny, she's being very supportive of her daughter right now. By the way, you'll just have to wait for future chapters to find out whether or not Ginny decided to share her conversation with Mrs Figg with anyone else. :-} Thanks for the review.



Reviewer: jeannet Anonymous Date: 2007.10.08 - 08:18AM Title: Chapter 4: What a Week

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Author's Response: Thanks for the vote of confidence.



Reviewer: skiutahnum1 Signed Date: 2007.10.08 - 07:57AM Title: Chapter 4: What a Week

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well now ginny is on the low of the lows and needs some lovein from harry for her to regain the hope she has lost...but harry was smart to give her the pendant back/.//....but will be paying for it later......kutgw

Author's Response: Life has its ups and downs and this time it's Ginny's turn instead of Harry's. Ginny is still her understanding self. Eventually she'll come to realize that her role is to keep the home fires burning so that Harry has someone to come back to. Thanks for reviewing.



Reviewer: Zaion_Indulias Signed Date: 2007.10.08 - 07:54AM Title: Chapter 4: What a Week

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as always, an amazing chapter Arnel. perfect thing to lift my spirits. ^_^ can't wait for the next chapter.

Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing. I'm glad my latest chapter could put a smile on your face.




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