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Reviewer: Gin110881 Signed Date: 2015.06.26 - 05:34AM Title: Chapter 24: The Tattoo

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The Tattoo and the potion crystals are a tough intervention on Harry. What about Harry when something bad happens to Snape and Snape is not able to produce more potion crystals? He is very dependent on others, on Ginny anyway.
Many thanks for sharing!



Reviewer: Brian64 Signed Date: 2010.07.22 - 07:13AM Title: Chapter 24: The Tattoo

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Over the last 24 hours I've read the first 24 chapters of your story, and thought it was time to put down some notes in a review. I hope that this comes acoss as constructive, but in any case, it is simply one persons opinion, and judging from the number of other reviews I've read, there are many people that like your story the way it is going. So don't take anything to heart.

As I think back over the story I've read so far, I try to think what has actually occurred in the plot, and how things have progressed. In the first chapter, Harry was injured, and Snape bonded H&G together. It didn't take more than a couple of chapters for them to work ut they both liked the bonding & each other. but in 24 chapters, Harry is still injured, barely able to walk, and for all the comments about 'amazing, rapid progress' he's supposedly making, it doesn't seem like it is progressing much at all. Congratulations Snape, You've crippled Potter after all.

I couldn't help but be regularly reminded of Bobmin's double, Sunrise/Sunset over Bitain and compare the similarities with Harry's crippling injury due to the spider bite. I eventually gave up on that fic about a third of the way through the 2nd story because I was simply tired of reading about a crippled Harry. In contrast though, there was a heck of a lot going on in that story besides Harry's injury.

I like my main characters to be healthy, or if injured, to get better. Isn't that one of the manin benefits of magic? Quick healing for most things? I still remember Poppy's line from CoS "I can fix a broken bone in a hearbeat, growing them though... you're in for a rough night, Potter". Yes, yes, I know all about those times when magic is slower & ineffective, such as with Dumbledore's hand, but the story wasn't about Dumbledore, it was about Harry Potter.

Like other reviewers, I do enjoy some of the detail that you've added to the tale to give it some authenticity, but it is taking over the story. There really isn't anything else going on besides Harry's "recovery" - everything else is taking a back seat to it - and his recovery seems to be only marginally faster than a glacier's advance.

I want to read the next four chapters already written, because I want to see where the story is going, but I'm also worried that after I have done so I'll learn that nothing much will have changed with Harry's health and there will be little advance on the plot.

Your writing style is easy to read, and the tale is well-written. On the other hand I've yet to laugh out loud or shed a tear over what has been occurring in the story, which I think means I'm not connecting with it, or your characters as much as I ight want to. I did like Ginny's rant at Snape over his potons teaching after demonstrating he did know how to teach properly.

Anyway, happy writing. I hope there is something in the above you can find at least a little useful.

Brian


Author's Response: Thank you very much for your kind and well-though out review. I would never complain about someone giving me an honest, considered opinion, so please set your mind at ease on that account.

I will share a secret with you, and everyone else now, I guess. I never intended to write a crippled Harry. The original plot ideas and outline I wrote had him getting completely recovered from his original injuries within a week or so of going to the cottage, and then getting the scar Horcrux cleaned out was to take only about a week as well.

Then, as I was researching the injuries Harry might have recieved from his torture, some of those ideas took off and he ended up having a longer recovery from that. Then, there was a large volume of research into brain trauma. It is fascinating, and I realized that I could not stomach waving a wand over my Harry and having him recover instantly and completely from what should have turned a Muggle into, at best, a marginally functional permament invalid. Hence, his road is much harder and longer than I ever intended it to be. I intended this story to be complete by now.

My concept of this story is that it is a relationship story, and I am attempting to show how the relationship grows against the background of interdependence and medical complications. My greatest frustration with it at this point is that I am sick of Harry being sick, but I still refuse to simply wave a wand over him. I want to move the story forward, and I am doing so in other chapters that I am writing whenever I have ideas about them, but I have to get us to those points. Elements of the Weasley visit were written within weeks of starting this story, but I had to get to the point where I could logically move the Potters on to a visit with them. There are story elements written that are for the very end of the story, and many in between.

Harry and Ginny are going to be moving along more now, since, at present, I do not forsee any further complications to keep me from the way I intended the rest of the story to flow. I hope that you will continue to read, but if not, I do appreciate you giving me a chance.



Reviewer: Alifromnm Signed Date: 2009.10.26 - 03:37AM Title: Chapter 24: The Tattoo

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Spent the weekend rereading this and catching up on the new chapter. Wonderful story! Can't wait for the update! Snape's character is just about perfect! Love Harry and Ginny. Bill , well I figued he'd act te way he did. Still not sure if I'm enjoying Ron and Mione being left totally out of this loop. Poor Molly and Hedwig! Keep up the good work!

Author's Response: Updating as soon as I get home from work. I like my Snape, too.



Reviewer: norbert Signed Date: 2009.10.21 - 02:06AM Title: Chapter 24: The Tattoo

great story hope you update soon!!!

Author's Response: Updating tonight!



Reviewer: RealmofShadows Signed Date: 2009.10.12 - 10:31PM Title: Chapter 24: The Tattoo

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A little paranoid maybe?

Author's Response: :D It's not paranoia if they're really after you ...



Reviewer: rushda Signed Date: 2009.10.08 - 02:54PM Title: Chapter 24: The Tattoo

i really liked ur story a lot......hope u ll update it soon....

Author's Response: Thank you for reading! The next chapter will be coming out soon!



Reviewer: hpf2114 Signed Date: 2009.10.06 - 08:11PM Title: Chapter 24: The Tattoo

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This is a great story. Very intellegent and well written. You have just made it into my top two stories I follow. Behind Free Life by Fake a smile. You almost make Snape likeable, and that is a job in itself. I like the pairing of Fred and Hermione. I would like to know how you think Ron is taking this or even if he knows. As they say he can be really thick. Hermione's desperation for her first friends is very believable and very well put forth. I would like to see Harry back in fighting form, but I see the theme of this story. Adversity is what Harry does. You have a winner with this story. Great job!!! Bond stories are the best!!!

Author's Response: Thanks for all of the ratings and reviews. I'm glad that you like it.

I am pretty certain that Ron knows that Fred and Hermione are seeing each other. Thick as he can be, it's pretty obvious.

I love bond stories, too, as you might be able to tell! Thanks again.



Reviewer: harrypotterspirit Signed Date: 2009.10.03 - 08:44AM Title: Chapter 24: The Tattoo

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A lot of original ideas here. Harry's progress still seems so slow which is indicative of the seriousness of his health. All the warnings to: not fly, not apparate worry me that something might be coming where the couple will be tested.

Author's Response: Thanks for reading! Well, of course, they are going to be tested. It's almost like an inevitable thing for them. :D



Reviewer: DukeBrymin Signed Date: 2009.10.02 - 11:22PM Title: Chapter 24: The Tattoo

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I am constantly amazed at the thought that goes into the medical part of this story, what with the tattoo and the crystals and all that. That being said, I'm wondering it the story is focusing only on the medical stuff, and the climax will be "whether Harry gets better". If so, then that's fine, but you should probably start hinting at a sequel or something.
Thanks for the great chapter!

Author's Response: Thanks for reading! I don't think I'm going to do a sequel, but you never can tell. The medical stuff is just too important not to focus on at the moment, but the primary focus I have tried to maintain is the relationship between Harry and Ginny. Everything else in the story hangs on that point.



Reviewer: hp_fanatic Signed Date: 2009.10.02 - 12:50AM Title: Chapter 24: The Tattoo

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Awesome story! Update Please.

Author's Response: Thanks for reading! The update is in the works.



Reviewer: Larry Signed Date: 2009.09.30 - 07:04AM Title: Chapter 24: The Tattoo

A great story and I echo everyone elses positive comments. I always felt Snape received too much bad press, it's nice to see your portrayel of this character. All in all I can't wait to read more of your most excellent story. Well done.

Author's Response: Thanks for reading! I'm glad that you like it!



Reviewer: Larry Signed Date: 2009.09.30 - 07:02AM Title: Chapter 24: The Tattoo

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A great story and I echo everyone elses positive comments. I always felt Snape received too much bad press, it's nice to see your portrayel of this character. All in all I can't wait to read more of your most excellent story. Well done.



Reviewer: Zanthus Signed Date: 2009.09.30 - 01:31AM Title: Chapter 24: The Tattoo

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Great chapter mate. You have certainly opened a few lines here. 1. A bored Remus, should be interesting. 2. Will the latest dream manifest itself. 3. Molly & Hedwig pining for their return. 4. Harry & Ginny wanting to return home. But will it be before they return to France or will it be for Xmas. Looking forward to the next chapter. Enjoy
Z

Author's Response: Thanks for reading!

Bored Remus certainly does seem to have some possibilities, doesn't it!

I am sure that there will be more about Harry's dreams coming up soon, and Molly and Hedwig will finally get to see them come back, probably before too much more storyline time has passed.



Reviewer: hawkeye2008 Signed Date: 2009.09.29 - 10:20PM Title: Chapter 24: The Tattoo

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Great chapter, please write the next one soon, thanks!

Author's Response: Thanks for reading!



Reviewer: skiutahnum1 Signed Date: 2009.09.29 - 08:38PM Title: Chapter 24: The Tattoo

well at lease they are moving along...molly needs to give it up and bill will need to have hsi head put in his butt asap.....kutgw

Author's Response: Thanks for reading!



Reviewer: dshadel Signed Date: 2009.09.29 - 04:46PM Title: Chapter 24: The Tattoo

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Good chapter, nice and long the way I like them. Can't wait for next update, I want to see them tell the rest about the marriage

Author's Response: Thanks for reading!



Reviewer: HGRHfan35 Signed Date: 2009.09.29 - 02:17PM Title: Chapter 24: The Tattoo

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Author's Response: Thanks for reading!



Reviewer: KMACKD Signed Date: 2009.09.29 - 06:05AM Title: Chapter 24: The Tattoo

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The first thing I want to say with this review is that this is one of my favorite recent stories that I am reading on this site. What makes it enjoyable for me is that the basic story is just Harry and Ginny together trying to live and enjoy the living of their lives, without a lot of interference from the overbearing rules of society, friends and of course her family. Even any tendency that they might have had to be too proper and too aware of 'the morality' of life is swept away.

Breause of the nature of the "gift', if we want to call it that, that Snape gave them, they can be together in any way they choose. More than that they really only have one choice, one morality, if you will, and that is they have to be together to survive. They have to remain intimate and completely engrossed in each other and share everything to keep on living.

Maybe we could make a new category of stories like this where Harry and Ginny have to be together, for whatever reason, just to irritate everybody else in the wizarding world. Lol. I know that wouldn't work.. Too many older moralist out there stuck in a Victorian morality time warp.

Anyway back to the story. I like the details.. It's good to see Harry pushing himself and Ginny by his side to encourage him to do so. He exercises his body and his Magic, and he'll be one hell of a wizard and a formidable opponent to old Tom Riddle some day. In the meantime the two lovers just get on with living.

That was a nice little bit with Kreacher and Dobby, especially since Kreacher is stepping forward to admonish Dobby for his overeagerness to help. The scene with Molly and Bill was great too. Bill the great cursebreaker, humbled by his inability to deal with his sister and her husband, yet full of worry for his mother who pines away over her missing daughter and tries to mother Hedwig the way she would like to be mothering Ginny.

A bored Marauder is not a good thing. That knid of inaction is part of what got Sirius killed. It would be nice to have a few more tidbits about Moony sometime soon.

Maybe Ginny should get a temperary job as a bouncer in that pub they passed by. Good practice to keep her in shape for what's to come, eh?

Does Duncan have a part to play in their future? Oh and what is our resident dark psychotic bitch Bellatrix up to, I wonder?

The last part of the chapter with Madame Pomfrey and Snape followed though very nicely. I am not put off by all of the medical proceedures. They have made the story interesting and kept it focused on Harry and his struggle and Ginny's devotion to Harry. It was funny to see Poppy giggle at Harry while he is trying to deal with what she is doing to him. It was also interesting to see Snape, for once, actually say something positive about Harry's father.

I am happy to see that Ginny and you are taking real good care of Harry. While I would love to see the pair visit with the Weasleys, I'm a little nervous about the Weasley's trying to take Ginny away from Harry. When you send the lambs, Harry and Ginny, to the slaughter, it might be best to work out a quick exit plan, just to be safe. Although I must confess I really want to see how everyone reacts to them being married and that a requirement of that marriage is physical intimacy. Molly Weasley is likely to have a major coniption fit and require time in St. Mungos..


I'm not sure where you are going with this story, but I'm sure you have some rough idea of where you want to go. Don't let any naysayers get you down. I'm enjoying the ride fine the way it is, and as much as I want to see where the outcome of the story takes us, I'll be sad when it's over.

Keep telling us your story, your way. Keep us enthralled with the characters.. One of my favorite stories is Meaning of One by Sovran. It isn't a fast paced thriller but a slowly wound out wonderful character based story of Harry and Ginny and their special relationship, just like yours.. It works for me just the way it is and so does your story.

All my best to you and I'll be on 'constant vigilence' for the next installment.


Author's Response: Thanks so much for reading, and for your thoughtful review!

I have always intended for this story to be primarily a relationship and character driven thing. I'm glad that you like it this way!

You are correct, I do have a goal and end-state in mind. The outline has been modified from time to time to accomodate things I discovered in the writing, or to adjust for length, but the overall arc is pretty much the same as what I started out with.

Again, thank you, and I will continue to work on this.



Reviewer: knightsbridge Signed Date: 2009.09.29 - 03:44AM Title: Chapter 24: The Tattoo

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I love to read reviews, and really understand the person that mentioned that you seem to have no plan or end in sight. I also understand just how much time and effort you have put into this, along with research. While I haven't kept track, I don't think that much time has expired in the story time line.

What you are doing with the crystals, is somewhat akin to what is being done in China with adult stem cells to open the neuro pathways and regenerate the spine. It's long and exhaustive, but reading a medical paper on a girl who was a quad for 10 years being able to walk into her 18th birthday party was well woth it. As I'm sure any improvement has been to Harry.

Please note I said ADULT stem cells, for those of you who are repulsed with the whole idea of stem cell research.

As to Harry and Ginny going home...well, I have my own opinion about that...if Bill was any example of what the reaction will be...they will try to keep Ginny home and to hell with Harry. Hopefully not, but you seem to have written it that way. Maybe Molly could come with Hedwig to see them on her won. Hermione is just too curious for her own good, and we already know Fred is on Harry and Ginny's side.

So I look forward to more, and hope everyone understands where you are going with this, and why it's taking so long to write it 'just so.'

Darian

Author's Response: Thank you for reading!

You are correct about how much time has actually passed. We are still in October, according to the story timeline I have in my outline.

I was not aware of the stem cell research into this type of medical repair, but it does seem to make sense that there would be a real-world need for this kind of treatment.

I also appreciate your patience, and trust me! There is an outline, I do have a goal, it's just ... a lot slower than any of us, myself included, would really prefer to get something like this written to a standard that I can feel good about putting out for public consumption.



Reviewer: marinepotterfan Signed Date: 2009.09.29 - 01:13AM Title: Chapter 24: The Tattoo

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