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Reviewer: Hermine Signed Date: 2013.07.14 - 03:16PM Title: Postscripts
I really like the way you interpreted Harry and Ginny. Ron and Hermione didn't bicker as much as they usually do, but Hermione's domestic situation could arguably cause that. You seem to have forgotten that witches and wizards under age 17 aren't allowed to do magic outside of school. Ginny shouldn't have been much help cleaning up the Grangers' house.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review.
I’m not certain that, after “the kiss”, Ron and Hermione would argue so much. Personally, I think that a lot of it was “I’m here—why don’t you notice me” behaviour and that they would mature. I haven’t forgotten about underage magic, but the Ministry has a lot more important things to deal with.-N-
Reviewer: SYLVELLE Signed Date: 2013.03.18 - 02:55PM Title: Postscripts
I have always loved this story Neil. Had to read it again.
Always a 10.
Author's Response: Thank you. :-D
-N-
Reviewer: ngayonatkailanman Signed Date: 2013.02.20 - 01:41AM Title: Postscripts
Well done. I really enjoyed reading this.
Author's Response: Thank you. This was my first attempt at fanfiction, and I keep wondering whether I should rewrite it. One day, perhaps... -N-
Reviewer: gemz1313 Signed Date: 2012.06.24 - 03:41AM Title: Postscripts
I'm slowly making my way through your stories on here - and then probably the others not on here. I'm rubbish at remembering to review, I should make more of an effort because your stories are fantastic, I'm enjoying them so much I really ought to tell you!
Just finished this one (and started Aurors and school girls...). I can't fault this story I don't think. It's definitely the best story I've read that deals with directly after the battle and the funerals. I can't remember ever crying whilst reading a fanfic, and the in the 7 + years I've been reading fanfic I've read thousands. But the way you've written the funerals had be in tears for every one.... Will ok maybe not Snapes, but it was still brilliantly written and very emotional. The other 4 had tears streaming down my face. Your written style is brilliant, so truthful and believable, your characterisation I love. I had never pictured Harry 'running off' and not wanting or being able to face the Weasleys after the battle, I imagined him tentatively but purposefully approaching Ginny, them kissing and hugging and everything being easier because of that. But after reading your way I think it's so much more Harry of him to the find it easier to shut himself away and worry that they'll blame him etc. Much more believable I think :D
More tiny tiny thing I maybe don't see as in character would be Ginny sitting on his lap so quickly and upsetting her father. I feel she would have wanted to ease the Weasleys into their relationship a bit more after everything that had happened. But that's a tiny part of the story and I suppose the fiery side, the 'I dare you to tell me off ' side of Ginny might have won after kit seeing Harry for so long.
Anyway, fantastic story. Again the way you've beautifully written the funerals is the best I've seen, add so heartbreaking... Thank you for writing this story. I'll try harder to review your others as I read!
Author's Response:
Hi
Thanks for the review.
Aurors and Schoolgirls will be finished eventually, honest. I didn’t start reading fanfiction until after I’d read DH, and much of it horrified and appalled me. I could not find an “after the battle story I liked, so I decided to write one myself. I still am, because I regard almost everything I’ve written as being part of the same after the battle story. I’d also been to several funerals when I wrote this.
In the books Harry would often bottle up his feelings and brood. It always took Rn and Hermione (and later, Ginny) to bring him round. Harry would have been dragged to the Burrow by Ron and Hermione, had they not been in Australia.
After being caught kissing by Molly, I think that Ginny decided that it was simply time to announce that they were together. This was the first novel length story I completed.
-N-
Reviewer: thyrokio Signed Date: 2010.10.25 - 08:08PM Title: Postscripts
The way you write Luna is really awesome, Nice story all around.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review.
N
Reviewer: Ender Signed Date: 2010.08.08 - 09:41PM Title: Postscripts
Awesome story. You struck the right tone for the mourning families trying to get things back to normal; i could relate to the emotions portrayed very well. It was refreshing to see a mature, competent Harry without the typical super-hero nonsense we see in so many fanfics where the authors try it. The folllow- up from DH is almost seamless. The editing and language is good. Pace is gratifyingly fast.
I did expect to see at least one encounter with Hagrid, though - he seems almost forgotten. The story arc for Hermione's parents is very well done.
All in all, a nice, light story. The element of darkness is tiny, tough that is expected.
Is there, or will there be sequel?
Author's Response: Thanks for the review.
Many (most?) of the after the battle stories I’ve read seemed to skip over the funerals and concentrate on the snogging. There were a lot of issues I wanted to resolve. Personally, I hate super-Harry (and hard-bitten militaristic Harry) stories.
You are right about Hagrid. I did him an injustice and I am doing him an injustice in the sequel (which does exist, it's called Aurors and Schoolgirls), where he appears once in the background. My only excuse is that I’m a northerner and I find his accent very difficult to write.
N
Reviewer: girl from ipanema Signed Date: 2010.03.05 - 12:00AM Title: Postscripts
Finally, a post DH story that is GOOD. Great job, good characterizations and just the right size. Not sappy, but with the right feel. Thanks.
Author's Response: Thank you, especially for the characterisations comment, I was trying very hard to keep the characterisations right. Hermione is the one who gives me most trouble, I think. I was aiming for 50,000-80,000 words, my next chaptered fic will be the same length (I hope).
-N-
Reviewer: parakletos Signed Date: 2010.03.04 - 05:45PM Title: Postscripts
I've enjoyed reading this so thanks for the effort you've put in.
BTW at 16 you can drink in a pub with a meal if bought by an adult.
Author's Response: Thanks. The pub: I know about the 16 law, but trying to explain why Hermione’s parents weren’t prepared to allow Ginny alcohol turned into a clunky and complicated discussion about the peculiarities of UK licensing laws. I deleted it, and Hermione’s parents simply lied. -N-
Reviewer: ketbelle Signed Date: 2010.03.03 - 01:25PM Title: Postscripts
THE END?!?!?!
Author's Response: The funerals are over. So the Grave Days have come to an end. Harry and Ron have joined the Auror office, Hermione and Ginny are at Hogwarts. So now they're Aurors and Schoolgirls. (-: -N-
Reviewer: ladymblack Signed Date: 2010.03.02 - 10:11PM Title: Postscripts
"Absolutely fantastic!" in the words of one of our favorite HP film actors, ha. It truly was, though. I simply loved it, from start to finish. It's always a pleasure to read good writing, and you rarely have any errors and those you do have aren't distracting, unlike some other authors I won't mention. What will you be writing next...hint....hint? Thank you for sharing another great work with us.
Author's Response:
Thank you. My future plans are:
1. Edit the “Aurors and Schoolgirls” stories to turn them into a 20+ chapter fic.
2. Finish “Aurors and Schoolgirls” while working on its post-school sequel “Beastly People,” (which is actually closer to completion than “Aurors and Schoolgirls”).
3. Do more work on “The Slytherin Four” (a sequel to “Beastly People”).
4. Write more one-shots as the mood takes me. (I’ve just submitted “First Sight,” a sort of sequel to “It Takes Two.”)
Neil
Reviewer: de88jr Signed Date: 2010.03.02 - 12:06PM Title: Postscripts
I loved this story and hate to see it end. Maybe we could talk you into some one-shots or an epilogue down the road? Anyway, it was wonderful. Thank you!
Just and FYI - When Hermione invited them to visit her the first time, she asks Ron to meet her on a Saturday, but in the next line, he tells Harry it was for Sunday. I spent the next couple of paragraphs thinking Ron was going to get in trouble by screwing up the day to meet and make Hermione and her parents angry.
Author's Response:
Thank you.
The Aurors and Schoolgirls sequence is a sequel of sorts. In fact it has been turning from a series of short stories into a direct sequel for some time. I need to figure out how to edit several short stories into one chaptered fic, and then I'll post the next chapter.
Saturday/Sunday, no, they both say Sunday (-: (tries to look innocent). Thanks.
Neil.
Reviewer: LadyRuthless Signed Date: 2010.03.02 - 07:40AM Title: Postscripts
Enjoyed this. Ta.
Author's Response: You're welcome. I'm astonished that I'm finished, even more surprised to find myself working on the sequels. -N-
Reviewer: ginnyweasley777 Signed Date: 2010.03.02 - 05:36AM Title: Postscripts
Hi Neil,
Great ending to the story. I've enjoyed reading it, right from the first chapters that I read and you;ve certainly come a long way with the story since then.
Author's Response: Thanks, Hannah, now it's time for a sequel. -N-
Reviewer: Ginny Guerra Signed Date: 2010.03.01 - 10:30PM Title: Postscripts
This was not the title...
Author's Response: I was confused, then ... End of Days, I couldn't do it, not really, blame my bizarre sense of humour. -N-
