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Reviewer: pottermania Signed Date: 2014.02.01 - 05:20PM Title: The Snare: Three Caged Birds

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Now all we need indeed is the weasleys!!!

Quite a decision for harry to make, but in the end one you would expect of him...

Ron bring an eejit again!!

Author's Response: Harry usually makes the right choice. Ron often makes the wrong one. :-) -N-



Reviewer: Vermouth Signed Date: 2010.12.31 - 03:24PM Title: The Snare: Three Caged Birds

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Reviewer: annep Signed Date: 2010.10.14 - 05:53PM Title: The Snare: Three Caged Birds

I came over to this site when I saw you had more chapters posted here. Certainly not disappointed—this is a terrific story.

Some juicy clues you’ve been throwing out to us (Mark D’Arque pumpkin juice that’s “as potent as a double shot of firewhisky” and pumpkin juice as a component of the sticky mess in Ginny’s hair in the gaol cell). As painful as the current situation is for Harry & Ginny, a thorough investigation by the Fiscal may be best for Ginny as it seems that someone is trying to harm her, and consequently Harry too.

Ron’s behavior at the end of chapter 6 was quite.... something. After all their years together—for Harry & Ron and Harry & Ginny—I can’t really take his ridiculous question at face value. Maybe I’m just a Ron optimist, though Hermione’s anger at Ron seems to back it up. Or maybe this is all staged for their audience? I don’t know, but something seems off.

The alternation of chapters is interesting, like you’re giving two ends of the mystery at once and it will all slowly make sense as the two storylines come closer together. Great job!

I love seeing how Harry is doing as an Auror and how their little group is changing the program. From this it’s easy to see how Harry was Head Auror at a young age, and it would definitely be a title that was earned not just the result of his fame. I also really enjoy your Scottish characters. I liked them in “Waning Moon” and it’s great to see them again, as you flesh them out even more. Thanks and looking forward to more!


Author's Response:
Thanks for the review.

Perhaps I’m slipping too many clues in too early. You (and Birlan and others) are certainly picking up on a lot of them. Ron’s behaviour will be explained soon, I’m now becoming nervous that the explanation will not satisfy everyone.
The alternating chapters were something of an experiment. I wanted to see it I could slide the clues into a non-linear story. But also, the majority of the action takes place at Ginny’s arrest, and in the hours before that. By writing the story this way the H/G action scenes in “The Trap” have drawn to a close, to be replaced by investigation. The investigation scenes in “The Hunt” are drawing to a close to be replaced by action. Is this a good idea? You tell me.
Harry was (in my opinion) always going to make a good Auror. Mark Moon appears in both the “Waning Moon” chapter of “Tales of the Battle” (what he did in the battle) and also in “Moon” (which is set almost seven years later and is a sort-of sequel to “Bare”) None of these are H/G stories, so they are not here.

-N-



Reviewer: jennkaye Signed Date: 2010.10.10 - 03:53PM Title: The Snare: Three Caged Birds

Very nice. I must say, I've been confused as to your purpose in alternating between Harry's hunt and the Magpie incident (though prefacing this chapter and Ch. 4 with "Trap" is suggentive . . .). However, I thoroughly enjoy your stories. I am expectantly awaiting the continuation of "Aurors and Schoolgirls" and "Strangers at Drakeshaugh" (sp?) as well as this fine story. Interesting complicaton--Ginny's drinking and the potential Weasley reaction to this sitiuation. I can't wait for further explanation of what's going on, as well as the outcome of Harry's hunt.

Author's Response:
Thanks for the review

My purpose in alternating chapters? It seemed like a good idea at the time.

I’m now working on all three stories. Expect a third chapter of “Strangers” soon and more A&S, too. Hopefiully after the next two chapters you’ll have a better idea about the whats, whens and whys of this story.
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Reviewer: Green Eyes Signed Date: 2010.10.08 - 09:38AM Title: The Snare: Three Caged Birds

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Great chapter. You have a real talent for painting a scene and then giving a feel for the characters in that scene. The mystery deepens. I am with Hushpuppy. I hope there is some explanation for Ginny’s behavior other than she really missed Harry, got depressed, and in five weeks time became a violent drunk who was capable of harming random little children. In an earlier response to a review, you gave what I thought was a really interesting statement of your rules for Harry. Do you have a set of rules for Ginny that you would be willing to share at this point?

Author's Response:
Thanks for the review.

The explanations (or at least a few hints) will be forthcoming soon. Harry, it seems to me is one of the best drawn character (along with Ron and Hermione) yet often in fanfics (especially AU (and dramione of course)) Harry’s characterisation seems way off to me, hence my basic rules.,/br>
My Ginny rules are marginally more complicated. Basically: Ginny is not perfect. She can be violent when she loses her temper (crashing into Smith after his biased commentary). She lies to her parents and gets away with it (throwing dungbombs at the door). She is tough and stubborn and fierce in her feelings towards Harry. She is also a lot less sure of herself than she appears to be, she can be jealous. She is rather more like Molly than she likes to admit.
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Reviewer: hushpuppy22 Signed Date: 2010.10.08 - 02:07AM Title: The Snare: Three Caged Birds

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Ugh, I hate to talk about myself in the reviews but I just have to make this review all about me--well, all about how much I love your work. I loved this chapter. Even though you made up the law here, it's interesting to read about the details of Harry's job. Not only are the details interesting but you're so good at creating original characters that it's actually fun to read a chapter where Harry intereacts with Scottish law enforcement. You put just enough information so that we can imagine them but not too much that we're bored or rolling our eyes. Some great fan-fiction writers (in every other respect) have over-worked original characters that try and take over the story. Yours come across as real people so please keep doing what you're doing.

As someone who loves mysteries, I have so many outlandish ideas about what's going on that I have no idea where you're going. For now, I like the idea that Lynette works with the Death Eater sympathizer group and wants Ginny and Harry to break up for some nefarious reason. Other than jealousy, why would she dislike Harry to the extent that she actively wants Ginny to break it off? Maybe it's my own love of Harry, but I don't get how anyone not "Dark" or jealous, could actively dislike him. Lynette seems the Iago type whispering in Ginny's ear things that make Ginny afraid and insecure (another question is why Ginny doesn't see this part of Lynette or view it as a problem...) Why is Ginny getting so drunk and out of control? Yes, she's young but she's also an athlete and a good person who doesn't like the thought of innocent people hurting. How far have her morals slid if she thinks it's Harpies and their fans against everyone else?. I'm not sure if she is part of the "Harpy Hellion" group but if she is, there's a lot going on that we don't know. For one, why hasn't he family staged an intervention? Wouldn't Molly be utterly ashamed of her daughter's behavior?

What exactly has happened that Ron thinks Harry would hit Ginny? Have there been rumors of her cheating on Harry and Ron thought Harry had found out and a fight got out of control? Even so, Ron's comment really is on the edge of in-character and OOC. He respects Harry a great deal and it's hard to believe that he would honestly think Harry would hit Ginny. Other than Draco Malfoy, I can't think of Harry hitting another human being. Probably wrong, but it's odd for Ron to think that... Maybe Lynette isn't just whispering in Ginny's ear?.

Okay, enough of my theories. I love your Harry/Ginny work and can't wait to read more of this and Aurors and Schoolgirls!

Author's Response:
Thanks for the review.

Some of the Scottish Law Office staff have an existence outside this story. Campbell’s story is as yet unwritten, but Mark Moon appears in both “Moon” and one chapter of “Tales of the Battle” called “Waning Moon”, they are not H/G stories, so not here. I find that using a small cast of O.C.’s allows me to develop them in my mind and in the background without them taking over. Fenella Gray (from Grave Days, Aurors and Schoolgirls and Summer of ’97) has been mentioned in this story already and will reappear.

You’ve got a lot of good ideas about what’s going on. I will (I hope) answer most of your questions eventually and hopefully satisfactorily. Though not next chapter.

the plot hole I found in Aurors and Schoolgirls is busily being filled. And I hope to get another chapter to my beta (Ginny Guerra) soon.



Reviewer: Ginny Guerra Signed Date: 2010.10.07 - 11:56PM Title: The Snare: Three Caged Birds

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Ron always jumping to conclussions.

Author's Response: Ron always doing something stupid.



Reviewer: curren Signed Date: 2010.10.07 - 06:47PM Title: The Snare: Three Caged Birds

I must say i love The Trap part of this story a lot, more than The Hunt. I suppose you have your reasons, but honestly, i'm more fascinated with this storyline, and where you're going with it. Still, love it a lot, keep updating soon!

I personally think you minimise writing the scottish accent in your story. i've always believed it's much better to just say they're speaking in a thick accent without writing that accent down too much, because for many people it's hard to decipher sometimes. Or harder, anyway. Your readers have to imagine scottish pronunciation to easily read it, making it quite a chore (and quite difficult for non-native speakers who are not that familiar with the scottish accent).

Author's Response:
Thanks for the review. One of the reasons for my writing this story in the order that I have done was because the opening sections of the hunt are all set up and not much action. So if you’re hooked by The Trap, that’s good. I hope that the next Hunt chapter “Den of Wolves” will leave you wanting more.

I’ve written another story, set in Edinburgh (Moon – which features Bailiff Mark Moon – it’s not a H/G story) and I experimented with Scottish accents in that story. But I went back and re-editted most of them out, because people found them too hard to read. My own accent (Geordie-posh I’m told) is difficult for outsiders and even I have difficulty understanding full Geordie speakers.
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Reviewer: GinnyP7 Signed Date: 2010.10.07 - 05:43PM Title: The Snare: Three Caged Birds

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I am thoroughly enjoying this story and love the continuity of all your work. I find the chapter titles
and the sudden shift in tone and action very intriguing. The Hunt chapters seem straightforward enough,
but I can't help wondering what or who is the "trap". Since these chapters seem to be out of sequence with
the "hunt" chapters, I look forward to finding out if Harry is laying a trap or if one of the characters he
comes in contact with is doing so. At first, I thought the trap was laid before the hunt began. But, we
know Harry was going to be out of contact with his office for several weeks or more. In this chapter, he
says the last time he saw Ginny was "5 weeks ago" because he was on a secret assignment and couldn't say
more. It seems unlikely the trap is concurrent with the hunt. So, you've got me wondering and waiting
with bated breath!

Author's Response:
Thanks for the review

It should not take you much longer to figure out the “real time” sequence of what is going on. The “Hunt” chapters will (I hope) become less straightforward as the “Trap” chapters approach a resolution. The Trap title is a little misleading; perhaps I should have made it “Traps.” The final chapter will be neither, hunt, nor trap, but “Prey.”
-N-



Reviewer: potterfan2008 Signed Date: 2010.10.07 - 05:29PM Title: The Snare: Three Caged Birds

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Poor Harry and also poor Ginny. Obviously something is going on if she is getting that drunk. How on earth could Ron think Harry would hit Ginny? He would never so that.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. Ron (in my view) tends to be very unreasonable when he’s unhappy and, currently he’s very unhappy. Why? Well, Hermione’s “Ginger moron” remark might give you a clue. -N-



Reviewer: skiutahnum1 Signed Date: 2010.10.07 - 05:15PM Title: The Snare: Three Caged Birds

some times ron really does screw up with out thinking andneed to use his head more and not the one 3 feet down...kutgw,,,,,ginny will be ok but i think soon they will have a long talk and a longer working out of differences...kutgw

Author's Response: I am (I think) simply twisting JKR’s formula a bit with this story. Misunderstandings, arguments and confused feelings. -N-



Reviewer: jojo99 Signed Date: 2010.10.07 - 03:44PM Title: The Snare: Three Caged Birds

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What an emotional night for Harry. I would have loved to have seen what happenned when Ginny woke up but I guess we have to wait a bit for that.

Author's Response: You won’t find out what happened when Ginny wakes for a while (six chapters, actually – sorry about that!) but you will have a lot more clues as to what’s going on by then. -N-



Reviewer: ngayonatkailanman Signed Date: 2010.10.07 - 02:22PM Title: The Snare: Three Caged Birds

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What the.....! Oh no! I cannot believe you ended it there! Naughty. Sigh. When is ;the next update? My heart is pumping because Ron is at his best behaviour as usual. Love your pointing out the difference between Scottish and English laws. Well done, you. lol.

Love all your OCs. Hamish and the lawyer. ROTFL. You crack me up!

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. ,br>Next update won't be long. Harry enters a werewolf village. What could possibly go wrong? I live close enough to the border to appreciate the differences between the two countries.
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Reviewer: Birlan Signed Date: 2010.10.07 - 01:56PM Title: The Snare: Three Caged Birds

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Ouch again.

I'm not sure why Ron jumped to that wrong conclusion after having seen Ginny and Harry together for several years. But I expect that we will find out in two chapters--maybe.

I was wondering how much of the difference in process between the Scots and the English which you are showing in your stories is based on the actual differences between them--which I know in general exist but not the specifics.

Thanks again--I am enjoying the story and the nice details(Harry's shirt is one such detail which is carrying through nicely).


Author's Response:
You will certainly find out why Ron is not himself soon. i've taken a little artistic licence with regard to the differences in English and Scotish Law.
Thanks for the review. -N-




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