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Reviewer: MisterBlack Signed Date: 2016.03.10 - 03:28AM Title: Chapter 1 – Why you should never anger a Harpy

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Brennus... you have been holding out. Here I was perusing stories that I have yet to complete reading (Abraxas is one of them...I stopped reading it because I wanted to wait till you finished. The wait for the next chapter was killing me, man) and low and behold I come across this gem.

I have you on my favorites list on FF.net and for some reason this story is not listed. Tsk tsk.

Anyway... excellent first chapter. This reminds me a little bit of Homecoming. I wish more people would write about Harry being an Auror. The potential for story telling is vast! Think about it... these guys go out and capture criminals on a day to day basis. Have you ever seen the show 'Cops'? They see some messed up and funny things.

People are missing out. As an Auror I can imagine Harry seeing some crazy things. Anyway... I hope there is some explanation for Dobby as the story progresses. If Harry recognizes her it could be because she is a Harpies player or from the CoS. I cant wait to read on.

Author's Response: I simply never posted this one on FF.Net as it was my first ever published story and I felt I made too many mistakes on it. It's certainly the lightest thing I've ever written (I do seem to be getting progressively darker, for some reason) but I just know that if I posted it I'd be tempted to start making corrections in grammar, plot lines, etc., and I'd rather write something new. I am still very proud of it as a first effort, though.



Reviewer: MollyandArthur Signed Date: 2016.02.28 - 09:01AM Title: Chapter 1 – Why you should never anger a Harpy

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Great start to this story! I think it was quite wonderful of Harry to allow Ginny one good kick at each of her attackers. Clearly they deserved what they got.

Author's Response: I think this might be more to your taste than 'Abraxas' was. Just remember, this was my first ever published story and I was just starting to learn the craft. There are bits of it that would dearly love to go back and re-write.



Reviewer: riegert8 Signed Date: 2014.06.19 - 06:41PM Title: Chapter 1 – Why you should never anger a Harpy

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Reviewer: potterfan2008 Signed Date: 2013.05.27 - 10:21PM Title: Chapter 1 – Why you should never anger a Harpy

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Somehow I never read this before. Not quite certain how that happened. So Harry never attended Hogwarts? I'm shocked! Okay just kidding - loved their meeting.

Author's Response: Yeah, I know I always turn Harry into a Hogwarts-dodger. Would you believe this story started out as an angsty drama? Mrs B took one look at my first draft and basically told me ‘try again’! I hate it when she’s right.



Reviewer: Marinka Signed Date: 2013.02.24 - 01:58AM Title: Chapter 1 – Why you should never anger a Harpy

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Really funny! Well, who would have thought that Ginny was that creative?:))

Author's Response: She’s a very talented girl, is Ginny. Probably got a lot of practice with having all those brothers.



Reviewer: pottermania Signed Date: 2012.09.05 - 06:14PM Title: Chapter 1 – Why you should never anger a Harpy

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Harry's last line made me laugh!

Poor Harry, what a life and then for Sirius to die...



Author's Response: Although the story is an AU, I do tend to stick to canon regarding deaths/relationships. At the rate JKR was killing them off I’m glad there were some characters left at the end.



Reviewer: kash2110 Signed Date: 2012.08.23 - 07:25PM Title: Chapter 1 – Why you should never anger a Harpy

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Quite a nice start to the story.

Author's Response: Nice start to a review!



Reviewer: beeg123 Signed Date: 2012.06.22 - 05:50PM Title: Chapter 1 – Why you should never anger a Harpy

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Mr Auror...(: I love it.

Gin can be a nasty little piece of work when she sets her mind...and foot to it.

Author's Response: Never mess with Ginny Weasley! I like to think Harry learnt a valuable lesson at this point as well: never, ever make her angry. Hopefully this knowledge will serve him well in later chapters.



Reviewer: gemz1313 Signed Date: 2012.06.21 - 06:07AM Title: Chapter 1 – Why you should never anger a Harpy

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Glad this chapter had more harry and ginny in it!
It feels sort of rushed though...
Good chapter :D

Author's Response: Are you actually reviewing chapter one or a later chapter? I’m interested because I would like to know which one you thought felt rushed. Still, whichever one it was I’m glad you enjoyed it.



Reviewer: jojo99 Signed Date: 2012.05.24 - 11:52PM Title: Chapter 1 – Why you should never anger a Harpy

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Reviewer: ProfessorBinns Signed Date: 2012.05.12 - 02:16AM Title: Chapter 1 – Why you should never anger a Harpy

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Great start! I look forward to more.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. The story is mostly finished so should be posted as fast as my wonderful beta MinistryMalcontent can weed out all my error’s. Writing this stuff is harder than it looks!



Reviewer: Dad Signed Date: 2012.05.10 - 10:54AM Title: Chapter 1 – Why you should never anger a Harpy

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If that was just the start, there should be plenty more big smiles on the way.

Author's Response: Thanks. Chapter 2 should be submitted for validation today



Reviewer: ProfessorBinns79 Signed Date: 2012.05.09 - 02:21AM Title: Chapter 1 – Why you should never anger a Harpy

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Like your story...we need a few more light romantic comedies around here (but not of the "chick flick" variety...nice to see one written by a bloke). I'm an American, but I love British humour, so I'm looking forward to this. I don't know how familiar you are with the Bi-monthly Awards on this site (Your profile says you've only been here for a little over a month.), but I think this story would be great for the Comedy category next time around. For that to happen, you'd have to add "Comedy" to its "Genres" label. It seems that people like to vote for more serious stories under "Romance," and there haven't been many good comedies to vote for lately. Just an idea...

KUTGW, and I'll look forward to your next chapter!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your comments! I must admit I had a bit of trouble with the selection of category button and either ended up selecting everything or nothing. I’ll have another go at it. Chapter two is now with my beta and is a bit fluffier. It features our favourite couples first date which may turn out to be somewhat alcohol influenced (but in a good way!).



Reviewer: Emlyn Signed Date: 2012.05.08 - 08:42PM Title: Chapter 1 – Why you should never anger a Harpy

Nice beginning. Looking forward to more. Can't wait to see what happens next. Ginny certainly didn't pull any punches.

Author's Response: I’m quite pleased with how I’ve written Ginny and some of the later chapters are from her POV. She’s not a girl to be messed with and Harry will be fearing for his manhood if he upsets her!



Reviewer: Keehar Signed Date: 2012.05.08 - 07:23PM Title: Chapter 1 – Why you should never anger a Harpy

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This has definite potential. I look forward to seeing where you can take this story. Well done so far.

Author's Response: While I’m pleased with the second half of this chapter I’m definitely having second thoughts about the first half. There are twelve more chapters and personally I think this is the weakest of all of them as most of it is scene setting. The best is yet to come.



Reviewer: Mistress of Potions Signed Date: 2012.05.08 - 02:52PM Title: Chapter 1 – Why you should never anger a Harpy

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Interesting way to start a story, although I would have liked a bit more of the back story first. Maybe some things about Sirius, Harry , and Remus.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. As I have noted in previous reviews the backstory isn’t that relevant to the rest of the story. An earlier draft had loads of exposition but was quite dull and really looked a bit out of place with the rest of the tale. I concede I may have rushed the start a little (this is my first ever story so I’m allowed a few cock-up’s!) but later chapters do flesh out the story a bit. Hopefully my newly found beta will keep me on the straight and narrow from now on.



Reviewer: hot48cricket Signed Date: 2012.05.08 - 01:25PM Title: Chapter 1 – Why you should never anger a Harpy

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Very nice first chapter!! Looking forward to more!

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. There are twelve more chapters after this and as I have at last found a beta hopefully they should come up fairly rapidly.



Reviewer: Arnel Signed Date: 2012.05.08 - 12:35PM Title: Chapter 1 – Why you should never anger a Harpy

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If the level of amusing banter between Harry and Ginny stays as it is in this chapter, I'm really going to enjoy it. This is one of the better "after Hogwarts" fics I've read and I'm looking forward to future chapters. Keep them coming as often as you can.

Author's Response: Thanks for the great review. The first half of this chapter is by far the oldest and the second half (with the banter) is more representative of the rest of the story. This started life as a fairly dark tale but Mrs Brennus told me it was rubbish and I should stick to writing lighter stuff. I always do what Mrs Brennus tells me.



Reviewer: Truthrowan Signed Date: 2012.05.08 - 11:17AM Title: Chapter 1 – Why you should never anger a Harpy

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Hey, finally a story worthy of me adding to my favorites list to follow. I haven't added many lately, but I really enjoyed the intro to this one. I look forward to reading more.

Author's Response: Thank you! Second chapter to follow as fast as I can get it to my beta and features Harry and Ginny’s first date (in a pub, they are British after all).



Reviewer: mdauben Signed Date: 2012.05.08 - 10:22AM Title: Chapter 1 – Why you should never anger a Harpy

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Looks like an interesting start to your story. I'll definetly be watching to see where you go with this.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review.




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