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Reviewer: Gin110881 Signed Date: 2015.05.29 - 07:30AM Title: Chapter 10 The Prophecy

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The reunion scene between Ginny and Bill was very real and well done. Ginny must be relieved to see someone from her family.
It is remarkable that Neville gives relationship advices to Hermione. I think it would do good to her, when she and Ron would find their way together.
I wonder what you, or more precisely Dumbledore, plans to do with Malfoy after the attack on Ron.
A safe house in Kenya; you have always a new surprise in store. Anyway, I suppose that they will recover well there.
I love the slogan "Together, always", especially because it's so un-canon-like.


Author's Response: Thank you! I think Bill and Ginny would gravitate towards each other as the oldest and youngest. Neville is shy and a bit bumbling in his first years, but he's smart and will back his friends. I think he would want to see Ron and Hermione finally admit their feelings for each other. I'm glad you like the Kenyan safe house. 'Together, always' is perfect for them.



Reviewer: riegert8 Signed Date: 2014.06.17 - 10:29PM Title: Chapter 10 The Prophecy

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Reviewer: Jewels Signed Date: 2013.04.12 - 06:35AM Title: Chapter 10 The Prophecy

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So, I was just giving this story another read through and was wondering when Dumbledore found out about the Friends of Lily? Remus, Sirius, and Bill agreed back in chapter 6 not to tell him about Lily's group since she had never told Dumbledore, and Sirius wasn't about to second-guess her decision now. It sounds like Remus gave him the information and he's definitely helping Dumbledore by not throwing him off the scent at all. Sirius is going to be pissed if Dumbledore tracks Harry down or makes life difficult for the Friends of Lily group by countering their charms. Remus isn't exactly putting a good foot forward. He's so far showing his loyalty to lie with Dumbledore, and that's not exactly Marauder behaviour :)

Author's Response: Okay, I have to admit that was a big oops on my part :). I had intended to keep it from Albus and completely spaced when I wrote the scene where they have to flee the country. Sorry. Remus is definitely a bit more wishy-washy in this story than I've written him in the past. In canon, Remus never really put himself out for Harry - you didn't see him living on rats to stay near Harry. He did two things for Harry - he taught him the Patronus and asked him to be Teddy's godfather. He never visited or wrote to him - so I'm kind of writing that Remus, not the one we wish had been there.



Reviewer: ginnyweasley777 Signed Date: 2013.02.07 - 08:31AM Title: Chapter 10 The Prophecy

superb chapter
glad to hear you're feeling better :)

Author's Response: Thanks!



Reviewer: Imperator 277 Signed Date: 2013.01.25 - 01:57PM Title: Chapter 10 The Prophecy

I read the newest chapter on your other site. It was great! Is that really Tonks Imperiused or someone polyjuiced? It's great that Harry is starting to call Sirius dad. Hermoine still clueless when it comes to house elves. Please keep up the good work. I am starting to think you end with cliffhangers on purpose. If there were an award for most suspenseful story, you would win.Please update soon!

Author's Response: Thanks! I just submitted it on this site last night. Please be careful in what you reveal in your reviews, because it can spoil the story for people who haven't read it yet. Anyhow, I'm glad you like the Sirius/Harry scenes, I think if Sirius had lived they would have become much closer. Hermione still has some growing up to do, but she'll get there. As far as Tonks...well, obviously that will come up in the next chapter ! :)



Reviewer: Imperator 277 Signed Date: 2012.12.29 - 06:55PM Title: Chapter 10 The Prophecy

Please update soon. Hope you have a happy new year!

Author's Response: Thanks! Almost done with the next chapter :)



Reviewer: NoTagBacks Signed Date: 2012.12.18 - 03:26AM Title: Chapter 10 The Prophecy

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Nice to see the re-connection between Harry and Sirius. I'm guessing your story won't have a scene at the Hall of Prophesies.

Glad to read that things are continuing with the students at Hogwarts. But sadly it doesn't look like Harry and Ginny will make their way back to school anytime soon.

Malfoy deliberately and with planning, attacked a fellow student, severely injuring him with a near lethal curse. So, as a result of this awful deed, Dumbledore decides he needs a second chance. What, a second chance to kill Ron? His punishment is he can only use his present wand during class (because Draco would never be smart enough to acquire a second wand). And to top things off, he asks Ron and Hermione not to retaliate. Ron should have told Dumbledore to go jump in the lake. Better yet, Ron should have lied to Dumbledore about avoiding retaliation, then immediately start planning to kill Malfoy before he gets a shot at his "second chance" to kill Ron. They're called Death Eaters for a reason.

Author's Response: Thanks! Yes, I don't plan on a Hall of Prophesies scene. I realize that Malfoy's punishment isn't much, but it is more than in cannon when Dumbledore knew he was behind the attacks on Katie and Ron.



Reviewer: TomBombadil Signed Date: 2012.12.13 - 01:04AM Title: Chapter 10 The Prophecy

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Wow! I am a big fan of your stories, and this one has me on the edge of my seat! I'd have read it non-stop, but sleep and work interrupted me for a few hours! I love your development of their relationship. You built it slowly enough to be feasible, but not so slowly as to frustrate those of us who are H/G 'shippers! LOL! The plot is great! The suspense is tight and keeps coming at the reader relentlessly. May I also comment about how much your writing has improved from when you first began ... or at least when I first staed reading your very enjoyable stories! Thank you for the time, energy, and dedication you have poured into this work, and thank you for sharing.

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad you like their relationship, I have been trying to build it up, but I don't have the patience to have them wait too long :) Thank you for the comments about my writing, I can also see the improvements and hope my writing continues to improve.



Reviewer: ginnyweasley777 Signed Date: 2012.12.12 - 08:01AM Title: Chapter 10 The Prophecy

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brilliant chapter as always
glad you're starting to get better :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much - on both counts :)



Reviewer: skiutahnum1 Signed Date: 2012.12.12 - 05:32AM Title: Chapter 10 The Prophecy

Well I'm glad to see Harry and Ginny and Sirius made out no prob....sorry they had to leave but then again it's ok....as for Dobby not being free...I don't see that but ok....as for albus screwing up he needs to work on taking himself,out of the role of leader and go away...I know never happen....Molly thou may. Ever get the chance to talk to her daughter again with how she went off....Percy thou is going to die shortly with what he is doing....kutgw

Author's Response: Thanks! I'll have a bit more about Dobby in the next chapter - its just kind of how I see things. Albus is at least understanding that he may have screwed up in the past.



Reviewer: Dad Signed Date: 2012.12.11 - 01:32PM Title: Chapter 10 The Prophecy

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Good to see another excellent chapter. There would still seem to be a fair bit to go before Harry comes out on top.

Author's Response: Thank you so much!



Reviewer: Arnel Signed Date: 2012.12.11 - 11:03AM Title: Chapter 10 The Prophecy

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An all-around moving chapter. Harry had some scary moments in his recovery, but I'm glad he's well enough by the end of the chapter to swim with Ginny and get a bit carried away in the pool. I'm also glad it was Sirius and not Dumbledore on a horrible night who introduced Harry to the prophecy; he knows from the start that at least two people are willing to support him. The letter was very moving and something concrete for Harry to cling to in the days and months to come. It was also good to see Harry secure enough with the people he's with to not bottle up his emotions like he does in canon.

The other thing I was pleased to see was the development of Ron and Hermione's relationship. They're still young and a little exploration is natural, but it's nice to know that when all is said and done, their friendship is strong enough to weather the bumps and tests they put it through.

Finally, as scary as the home invasion was, I'm glad no one was hurt, except maybe a few ruffled feathers where Percy is concerned. He's still a pompous toe rag as far as I'm concerned!

All in all, I enjoyed the chapter very much and hope that your health will improve daily. I'm looking forward to the next chapters of this incredible story.

Author's Response: Thanks so much! It always kind of bothered me how Dumbledore dumped the prophecy on Harry so I wanted him to have the chance to learn it with Sirius' support. I wanted Harry to have something tangible from his parents. I think that Ron and Hermione are a bit too young and too immature to start a relationship at this point, so I want to work on improving their friendship. The bickering really drives me insane.



Reviewer: mdauben Signed Date: 2012.12.11 - 08:00AM Title: Chapter 10 The Prophecy

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I'm glad to hear you are feeling better and that you are writing again. This chapter was well worth waiting for. I love the interaction between Sirius and Harry in this one. The scenes from the Burrow and Hogwarts were welcome, too. I am wondering what will happen next now that they have had to flee the country? I'll be looking forward to your next update.

Author's Response: Thanks so much! I really like exploring the relationship between Sirius and Harry.



Reviewer: LeprechaunJV Signed Date: 2012.12.11 - 02:32AM Title: Chapter 10 The Prophecy

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Reviewer: SYLVELLE Signed Date: 2012.12.11 - 01:16AM Title: Chapter 10 The Prophecy

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Wonderful chapter. Bouncing around getting people together finding out more stuff. I love it. Hope you are feeling better.
Tricia

Author's Response: Thanks!



Reviewer: Imperator 277 Signed Date: 2012.12.10 - 11:50PM Title: Chapter 10 The Prophecy

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Thank you so much for the update! This was a good chapter and I'm glad everyone made it out ok. Molly really needs to learn to think before she acts. How can she be so heartless about deserting Harry? She says she wants to mother him the next minute she wants to boot him out. Of she truly loved him as a son she would help him and stop the nonsense about Sirius being a felon. Harry has a short temper because the world just keeps screwing him over. Who wouldnt be pissed with the life he has. No hope for her there. Albus is typical; trying to stop Malfoy from being a death eater when he was groomed to be one since the cradle. And people say Harry has a saving people thing. At least Harry's tries to do some good while the people albus tries to save are a lost cause. Please update very soon. I really enjoy this story. Happy holidays!

Author's Response: Thanks! I think Molly tends to react first and think later. She never really seemed to trust Sirius and I don't see that changing anytime soon.



Reviewer: Aragorn Signed Date: 2012.12.10 - 11:45PM Title: Chapter 10 The Prophecy

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Have been wondering about this story. Good to see an update!

Author's Response: Thanks!



Reviewer: seekers_destiny Signed Date: 2012.12.10 - 07:13PM Title: Chapter 10 The Prophecy

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I was so excited to see the next chapter but I was saddened to see why there was a delay. I hope you have a swift and full recovery (and it's not just because I selfishly want more of the story!).

As I expected, it was good that Padfoot was there for Harry during the night. Hearing that somebody really wanted him to live with them was probably almost as beneficial for Harry as the potions. Harry needs to hear things like that and Ginny has been helping in that area.

The glimpse of life at Hogwarts was interesting and I was amused that it was Neville talking some sense into Hermione as she is always the one trying to do that to others. It was also nice to see the Gryffindors sticking together and helping each other like they did. I was a little surprised that Dumbledore reacted more firmly in your story than in canon. Perhaps he was feeling a little remorse over handling thing so poorly with Harry and put a little more thought into protecting the students than usual. It was also a nice moment that Ron was so happy about the picture of his sister and best mate together.

I liked Sirius' caution about information regarding Harry last chapter even to temporarily excluding Remus. Remus' level of cooperation with Dumbledore made me a little uneasy but he did seem to try to choose his words carefully. I'm sure he is on Harry's side but circumstances will leave Remus out of the loop for a while.

It was nice to see Molly finally seeing things clearly and her fright at the sudden search was a shock. It was nice to see the Weasleys sticking together (except for Percy, of course). I was hoping that some of his attitude was a pose but I fear that it was not. Sometimes it is hard to believe that he is a Weasley at all.

ā€œIā€™m with you, love,ā€ - those are some very powerful words. Maybe he hasn't had time to think of it yet but I'm glad he isn't going to try to protect her by pulling away from her or at least not yet. Besides, they've got a deeper relationship now than in canon so I don't think Ginny would stand for it and Harry has Sirius there to give him some good advice. Sirius seems very much in favor of their relationship so I know he'd push Harry in the right direction. "Together, always.ā€ - those are good words too.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your kind wishes. I think Sirius would have loved to have been able to be there for Harry, so I am giving him the chance to be there for Harry. I'm glad you liked Neville talking some sense into Hermione. One of my biggest issues with Hermione is her surety that she is always right and her dismissal of others' points of view. Dumbledore is reacting differently as he realizes that he may have been mistaken in the way he handled Harry. A bit more about Remus coming up in the next chapter. Molly has always seemed to me the type of person to react first and think later (rather like Ron), so I think it takes more drastic action to wake her up. I'm glad you like the portrayal of Harry and Ginny's relationship.



Reviewer: smokeylovegood Signed Date: 2012.12.10 - 07:04PM Title: Chapter 10 The Prophecy

Most importantly, it is good to see you are once again up to writing. I'm so sorry you've been in so ill, and wish you a speedy recovery.
This chapter was (happily) long and really moved the story forward. Your Harry and Ginny are so sweet and Bill's support is lovely.
How is our favorite couple going to get their magical signatures back and, more importantly, how are they going to get around the trace?
Great job. I hope you are up to updating this and Realizations soon.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the kind wishes. I am almost done with the next chapter and will hopefully be posting soon - some of your questions will be answered :)



Reviewer: gonekrazy3000 Signed Date: 2012.12.10 - 05:24PM Title: Chapter 10 The Prophecy

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I loved the interactions between all the characters. Brilliant chapter as always.
Looking forward to more :)

Author's Response: Thanks!




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