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Reviewer: Gin110881 Signed Date: 2015.06.17 - 03:19AM Title: Chapter 13 The Cobra Chamber
Dumbledore's knowledge of human nature seems to subside in age, and it is not just Harry. That he wants to apply Malfoy as Head Boy is almost a sign of senility.
The mini-family reunion has certainly done Ginny all good, even though it was very emotional and very dramatic at the end, thanks to Dumbledore. At least she saw her parents again. Moreover, fortunately, Arthur has done very well. I think Ginny and Harry can count on him.
For one thing, however, I have to agree with Molly. Ginny should reconsider the use of high heels. They are very dangerous when she Apparates and they terribly tangle up in the bed sheets! (Oops, now I have revealed that I do not like high heels. I think flat shoes are much more sexy. ;-) )
Great chapter with a dramatic climax at the end!
Thanks for sharing!
Author's Response: I think Dumbledore has always tried to see the best in his students and he always gave more chances to Malfoy and the other Slytherin students because of their background. After all in HBP, he allowed Malfoy to continue at school with no repercussions even after he almost killed Katy and Ron. I think the mini-family reunion did all of them some good. Arthur is such a calming personality - he's a perfect pair for Molly in my opinion.
Reviewer: Kyral Signed Date: 2013.06.21 - 09:59AM Title: Chapter 13 The Cobra Chamber
I must say that I am minorly conflicted on this story. One one hand I am not a fan of Manipulative Dumbledore or Overprotective Molly (though I can certainly see their rationale). On the other hand I love what you've done with Harry, Ginny, and Sirius (I love seeing Sirius in Papa Wolf mode). I am curious to see where this goes, though and am enjoying the concept.
Author's Response: Thank you for the review. I know I have taken rather quite a few liberties with some beloved characters, but it does fit with the story. I'm glad you are enjoying the Harry, Ginny, Sirius interactions.
Reviewer: sabradan Signed Date: 2013.06.10 - 09:03PM Title: Chapter 13 The Cobra Chamber
THAT LOW-LIFE, SLIMY BAG OF FILTH. WHAT ON EARTH GIVES HIM THE RIGHT TO PLAY GOD AND TREAT PEOPLE LIKE CHESS PIECES?!?! Grr.
This story is really good and I thouroughly enjoy it, but I have on rather large critique:
I personally do not like the 'Sirius=dad' thing. I think it is horribly out of character for BOTH characters and takes away from an otherwise extremely well written story.
Other than that, though, very good.
Author's Response: I have to say I got a little scared when I saw all caps at first. Albus will get his - I've already written that scene - it was rather fun. I'm glad you are enjoying the story. I know the whole Sirius=Dad thing causes some people problems, but I've seen stories where Snape gets called Dad and many where he's encouraged to call Arthur Dad. I think Sirius (esp in this story) is the closest thing to a father that Harry will ever have. I can't blame Harry for wanting a Dad, but it would take a bit for Sirius to accept Harry as a son. I think they've grown that close in this story that Sirius would put Harry's need for a Dad over his need to honour James. Thanks for the review.
Reviewer: mdauben Signed Date: 2013.06.08 - 09:26AM Title: Chapter 13 The Cobra Chamber
I recently decided to reread your story and I just finished it. In reminded how good it was and how much I enjoyed it. I hope you get a chance to write some more chapters to this story some time soon.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I have started the next chapter, but keep getting distracted by other stories. Don't worry, I will finish this :)
Reviewer: SYLVELLE Signed Date: 2013.05.04 - 10:29PM Title: Chapter 13 The Cobra Chamber
Hope there is more.Still super good.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! More is on the way :)
Reviewer: ginnyweasley777 Signed Date: 2013.04.07 - 09:59AM Title: Chapter 13 The Cobra Chamber
super chapter as ever and a really enjoyable read
thanks for sharing :)
Author's Response: Thanks! Glad you liked it :)
Reviewer: Mistress_Lrigtar Signed Date: 2013.04.06 - 12:48AM Title: Chapter 13 The Cobra Chamber
There's a lot to digest in this chapter. I'm surprised by Ron's reaction to Harry and Ginny's marriage. It seemed very mature and understanding of him, and not being able to see their relationship grow, I'm not sure I can buy that from Ron. A little, "what in bloody hell were you thinking?" seemed called for there.
I liked the part with the hieroglyphics in Parseltongue and Harry feeling that it was finally a useful talent. Plus, it's refreshing to see Bill and Charlie being so welcoming instead of how they are usually portrayed as over- bearing, over-protective older brothers.
I don't understand Dumbledore at all. He always told Harry his greatest gift was love, so why would he try to keep Harry and Ginny apart and think that Ginny will weaken him? Thank goodness Harry has Sirius to look out for him.
At first, I was upset by Molly's reaction, but she is acting like any mother would to finding out her sixteen-year-old daughter has gotten married without her permission and is sexually active, so I was able to forgive her.
Looking forward to more!
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm trying for a bit more mature Ron this time around. He's seen bits of evidence of their relationship, but you're right he might have had a question or two. I had fun with the Red Pyramid and the Cobra Chamber. I really liked Bill and Charlie and see them more as nice big brothers rather than the overprotective prats they are so often seen as. Dumbledore is a bit confused and getting a bit desperate. He needs to find Harry and Albus has never really had a supportive loving relationship that I've seen evidence of so he might not realize how supportive Ginny can be. He is more focused on Ginny perhaps making Harry less willing to give up his life. I agree with your take on Molly. She tends to overreact - we know that. She is a bit freaked out by the marriage.
Reviewer: KateP Signed Date: 2013.04.05 - 11:42PM Title: Chapter 13 The Cobra Chamber
Another great chapter I am trying to pick who I want to hex more albus or molly
one thing I was hoping for but you did not so was Hermione going on the visit also I hope you can put that right at some point and have her meet up with Harry and Ginny
Author's Response: I would pick Albus to start with :) I didn't want to add Hermione at that point in time, but she will get her shot.
Reviewer: hot48cricket Signed Date: 2013.04.05 - 11:27PM Title: Chapter 13 The Cobra Chamber
I think a werewolf should visit Dumbledore on the next full moon.
Author's Response: I like that idea :)
Reviewer: Imperator 277 Signed Date: 2013.04.05 - 10:45PM Title: Chapter 13 The Cobra Chamber
Albus is so freaking stupid there is no other way to describe him or a name horrible enough to call him. He desires Harry to die and believes Malfoy can be saved by giving him the head boy position? It will have the opposite effect. It will empower malfou and make him beleive he is untouchable and he will continue his crimes. Trying to convince the so called "leader of the light" otherwise will be like talking to a brick wall. Really hope he gets offed soon.....
Molly needs a slap in the face. How DARE she insult Sirius like that? He is hell of a better parent than the woman who worships at the alter of a long bearded manipulating old fool.
Where did Harry apparate Ginny to? Will this open their eyes to see the manipulative old bastard Albus really is? Sirius and Remus should put eavesdropping charms on themselves when they go to the school to prevent the protraits from listening. Update soon!
Author's Response: Albus is certainly getting rather deperate. I don't know that he wants Harry to die so much as he thinks it might be necessary. I think in canon Albus never gave up hoping Draco could be saved. Molly does need a reality check - she holds his imprisonment against him as I believe she did in the books. I think Albus took advantage of Molly's hope to have her daughter close to her. I envisioned that Harry and Ginny Apparated home (to Kenya) as a security measure. I rather envisioned Sirius had wards to detect Portkeys and Apparition and when the alarms sound the Potters were supposed to leave immediately.
Reviewer: seekers_destiny Signed Date: 2013.04.05 - 10:12PM Title: Chapter 13 The Cobra Chamber
There's a lot to like about this chapter but there are also things that leave me with mixed feelings. I guess my major issue is Harry Apparating Ginny and himself away so abruptly like he did. There were events in this chapter that seemed to be building him up as more mature, confident, etc. Then he pulls a stunt like that. Ginny should be annoyed at him. Did he think he was surrounded by Death Eaters? Was Voldemort on the way? Was there an immediate threat of any sort? No. So why did he act that way?
Something about the Cobra chamber scene left me with mixed feelings too. There were things that were logical about it: Parselmouths are rare (by the way, I don't recall any story with a written form of Parseltongue, that's unique to your story I think) and a chamber nobody has been able to open would be a highlight of a tour so being taken there is logical too. There just seems to be something that weakened the suspension of disbelief for me and I just can't put my finger on it. It's probably just me though.
I liked the wedding scene and the nervous groom was a good touch. I liked how Sirius and Remus reconnected. Remus rambled a bit on his H/G explanation but that's probably just his mixed feelings coming out that way. I also thought you did well with Fleur's accent - it's there but you don't let it get in the way. I also liked the Poppy/Sirius scene and how Sirius got caught off guard with her concern - he can be such a bachelor.
Dumbledore's thoughts were interesting but he certainly is getting more overtly machiavellian. His book portkey was a poor gamble. If it had succeeded he would have a very angry mother looking for him and all of his goodwill with the Weasleys would be gone. Of course, the failure just gives him the same thing without any hold on Harry at all.
Ron hasn't been tested like being hungry while living in a tent but he seems that he has matured since Harry left. I'm not sure if he's more mature than in canon but it does bring up the question if he is doing better with Harry being gone. That's a rather disturbing thought, friends should be helping by being there, not by being gone.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. In my mind I saw Harry and Ginny Apparating as a safety measure Sirius insisted upon. They had wards to detect Portkeys and Apparition and if the alarms go off Harry and Ginny get out. Sorry if it came across as immature - it certainly wasn't meant that way.
I think Parselmouths were probably rare, but perhaps more common in some societies. A society that worships snakes wouldn't look down on talking to them as some other societies would that's why I figured of all societies the Egyptians would have a written language for Parselmouths.
I'm glad you like the wedding - I'm working on Fleur's accent so I'm glad it's getting better. Dumbledore is getting rather desperate and that is why he tried something so stupid. Ron - he has matured a bit from the event of having Harry and Ginny go missing, not because they are not there, but having your sister and best mate go missing can be a sobering experience.
Reviewer: skiutahnum1 Signed Date: 2013.04.05 - 08:16PM Title: Chapter 13 The Cobra Chamber
Sometimes albus tries to much and now he is in for a big word.....mr. Weasley is hot going to be happy at alll...kutgw
Author's Response: Albus is getting a bit desperate to find Harry. He and Mr Weasley will certainly be having words :)
Reviewer: PotterBabe Signed Date: 2013.04.05 - 04:24PM Title: Chapter 13 The Cobra Chamber
Great story. Update soon
Author's Response: Thanks!
Reviewer: zeta_one Signed Date: 2013.04.05 - 10:28AM Title: Chapter 13 The Cobra Chamber
Albus is now on top of the poop-poop list, above Voldie! Wish this was a Super Harry story and have him dual Aldus to get the Elder Wand. Excellent chapter, but the wedding seemed rushed, understandably. I enjoyed the way Ginny's brother accept Harry so well, even Ron. The talk with Harry and Arther was great.
Thanks for sharing.
Author's Response: Albus is getting rather desperate so he did a rather stupid thing. I like Arthur, I think he's a great dad.
Reviewer: LeprechaunJV Signed Date: 2013.04.05 - 10:25AM Title: Chapter 13 The Cobra Chamber
Time for Dumbles to be taken out of the equation.........
Author's Response: Thanks!
