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Reviewer: nayin1704 Signed Date: 2016.06.14 - 12:39AM Title: Chapter 4 – Big balls

Ginny is MAGNIFICENT!!!!

Author's Response: She certainly is!



Reviewer: MollyandArthur Signed Date: 2016.03.01 - 06:32PM Title: Chapter 4 – Big balls

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What woman would not like to have her shirt torn off in a fit of passion at least once in her life. Ginny handled Sharon as well as could be expected under the circumstances. It will be interesting to see if anything comes of the conversation with the Malfoys.

Author's Response: The chapter was, of course, in homage to the AC/DC song



Reviewer: riegert8 Signed Date: 2014.06.19 - 09:58PM Title: Chapter 4 – Big balls

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Reviewer: potterfan2008 Signed Date: 2013.05.28 - 02:09AM Title: Chapter 4 – Big balls

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Loved Ginny in bitch mode! She shut down the Malfoys - Damn but Draco has horrible taste in women. Loved how protective she is of Harry. He needs someone who will stand up for him. I love the little moments as well, like Ginny getting worried Harry would prefer Sharon (silly Ginny) or that she was afraid he was going to dump her - as if he would do something that stupid! Love the chapter - now I'm upset that Harry's psycho ex is named Sharon.

Author's Response: You know, I can’t remember for the life of me why I called her Sharon. Normally I name original characters after friends or work colleagues, but I can’t actually think of anyone I know called Sharon. How odd.



Reviewer: pottermania Signed Date: 2012.10.05 - 08:37PM Title: Chapter 4 – Big balls

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Harry had me wondering too how he was going to react..lol! I giggled at Ginny wondering if there were any other ex-girlfriends of Harry's that she could punch:)))

I think Draco and Astoria got what they deserved...don't think it will stop them though.

Author's Response: I love writing Ginny’s character. She’s just so full of fire and zest that you can just really let rip when coming up with story lines. The moment Sharon opened her mouth it was only a matter of time until she was going to find herself needing medical attention. I must get over this Ginny fixation. If a see a red-head in the street these days Mrs Brennus sarcastically asks if she’s a ‘Ginny lookalike?’ I generally find its best if I keep my mouth shut at that point.



Reviewer: sabradan Signed Date: 2012.10.01 - 04:24PM Title: Chapter 4 – Big balls

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Nothing quite like dinner AND a show.

Author's Response: Absolutely!



Reviewer: Mistress of Potions Signed Date: 2012.09.04 - 05:08PM Title: Chapter 4 – Big balls

About the hyphen thing, JKR is a very lucky amateur. Her inconsistencies are legend.

Author's Response: But wouldn’t it be a boring world if we were all perfect? Other than Mrs Brennus, of course. She informs me she’s perfect.



Reviewer: Imperator 277 Signed Date: 2012.09.04 - 12:51AM Title: Chapter 4 – Big balls

I remember Sharon came at Harry with a knife when he told her he was a wizard. I am guessing she is one of fanatical religious people who believe magic is evil and wizards are the devils minions. What would her working for an insurance firm have anything to do with her attitude to Harry? I am guessing she is just as psycho about wizards as she is about Harry "cheating" on her. I don't think Harry should let Malfoy and Astoria get away with their comments. Hoping they get their comeuppance or get pranked on a national scale or get whatever political clout they have taken away cause I just love a story where arrogant criminals get taken down a peg or two. They get built up thinkin they are about to come out on top and then it all comes crashing down. PLEASE UPDATE SOON!

Author's Response: Do you know, I came SO close to making Sharon a bit of a religious fanatic. In the end I decided that potentially being disrespectful to anybody’s spiritual beliefs was a minefield I wasn’t prepared to cross. There’s already too much of that ‘Harry Potter encourages the young to worship Satan’ stuff about without me creating religious stereotypies. Not that any of that affected me, I was evil long before I got into Harry Potter.



Reviewer: shlincoln Signed Date: 2012.09.03 - 09:04PM Title: Chapter 4 – Big balls

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I think there is a tendency in this story (and the List) to get a bit broad with the characters who are the "bad guys" which then makes whatever Harry & Ginny do in response perfectly justified. Though considering the story's conceit it's not so much a bug as a feature I suppose? If you want something fun and silly, this is the place, if a more naturalistic approach is your thing, you'll be disappoint. But then again, after ~ 75K words people should come to expect this. Which is my very roundabout way of saying yes they were too bitchy, but it's part and parcel with a Mr. Brennus story, things jump a notch in a hurry, so whatever.

Author's Response: Thank you. I think that explains what I was trying so say better than my attempts. I definitely exaggerate characters personalities a lot in my stories but it was never my intention for them to be too serious. The next story I’m writing will definitely be a bit of a departure from my present style and I hope to make my characters a bit more balanced. We’ll have to see if I can pull off a sensible story.



Reviewer: smokeylovegood Signed Date: 2012.09.03 - 08:58PM Title: Chapter 4 – Big balls

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Good chapter except for a couple of typos (and my pet peeve of a then that should be a than). Are Harry and Ginny a little over the top in this chapter? Yes. Is it a problem? No. This story and The List are both written with Harry and (especially) Ginny being very passionate people that have very large personalities. While not quite in character with the books (well, maybe Ginny, a bit), it is an AU story. I don't generally care for OOC portrayals, but it works here because of the way you have structured the story. If this were in the "what happened during those 19 years" genre, it would not work. Was it a bit trashy of Ginny to put the beat down on Sharon? Yes, but this Ginny would do that and this Harry would love it. It is consistent to the world you've created. And, it was FUN! I would be horribly critical of the trashy behavior of both women if I were in the restaurant, but here, I was cheering Ginny and enjoying her standing up for her man. Sharon seems like a bunny-boiler (80s movie reference alert - but I got the title, so you'll get this). JKR described Pansy and pug-faced, so that is right on.
Now, this is merely a guess, but Pureblood as a noun is name so it is one word, while pure-blood as a descriptor has the "pure" qualifying the type of blood the person has? Who knows, but that's my story and I'm sticking to it!

Author's Response: Eep! I know how much you hate the then/than thing, so I will go and flog myself immediately. Actually, I’m not sure my brain is working correctly at present as I’m having problems with may/might and wave/waive as well. Bunny-boiler! Now that’s a term I haven’t heard for a while but I guess it describes Sharon quite well. I’m glad you pointed out JKR describes Pansy as pug-faced. I was convinced Daphne was referred as horse-faced somewhere in the books as well but I can’t find it. It maybe that I’ve read some much fan fiction that I’m a bit blurry as to what’s canon and what isn’t these days. As for the pure-blood thing, your explanation sounds good so I’m perfectly happy to go along with it!



Reviewer: freshwater Signed Date: 2012.09.02 - 08:56PM Title: Chapter 4 – Big balls

Response to your response: Somewhere in between "bloody boring" and "over the top" is the space we like to call "realistic", otherwise known as "believable". It enables the reader to identify with a character and his/her choices/dilemmas/emotions and generally provides a satisfying reading experience. This area does not preclude the use of humor, drama, action or fluff.

I wouldn't have even mentioned it, but you did ask "Did I make Harry and Ginny too bitchy?", so I thought you wanted feedback.

Author's Response: Response to your response to my response: I wasn’t having a go at you, honest. Maybe I could have phrased it better. Put it like this – I think the ‘realistic’ type of character you mention would not really work in the type of story I’ve written. I always envisaged ‘The Oath’ (and my previous story) as Harry Potter meets the ‘Carry on’ films, or maybe even the ‘Confessions’ films (your profile doesn’t state what nationality you are so I have no idea if you know what I’m referring to). Basically, this is a saucy, bawdy British comedy and it needs the characters to be a bit over the top. As you state, I did question if I had made H&G a bit too bitchy as I was genuinely concerned I’d gone a bit too out of character for them. So far, out of seven reviews you are the only one who thinks I did, suggesting I pitched it about right. This does invalidate your opinion in any way, shape or form. I do appreciate any reviews I get and take on board any comments. I’m currently writing a more serious story and I’ve already changed how I was going to portray one character due to feedback I’ve received from reviewers. Anyway, I hope you stay with the story and welcome any future reviews.



Reviewer: Imperator 277 Signed Date: 2012.09.02 - 06:58PM Title: Chapter 4 – Big balls

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Great chapter. Good intro to Shanon and glad that Ginny gave her a whoopin. It would make sense that Malfoy would be behind the slander about Harry, Maybe he paid that one girl to get close to Harry and lie about Harry not being so "heroic in bed?" Hmm........... Malfoy said he may get clear of charges. Please do not let that be so! If he was a DE how did he get out of prison? Hope he gets his ass thrown back in. How in her right mind would Astoria think Harry would be interested in marrying her sister? Makes me mad the blood purists are still in power. Grrr! I had a feeling what Harry would do after watching Ginny beat up Sharon. Why wouldn't he be turned on by that? PLEASE UPDATE SOON!

Author's Response: I’ve always had a horrible feeling that even in canon the pure-bloods would not loosen their grip on power. Although I only hint at it in the story, you can assume Draco got a lenient sentence by throwing money around, just like his dad did after Voldemort was defeated the first time. It’s a sad fact that the people with the cash are generally the ones who always who come out smelling of roses. Anyway, we’ve just seen how protective Ginny is of Harry; do you think she’ll let Draco and Astoria get away with trashing his reputation?



Reviewer: Emlyn Signed Date: 2012.09.02 - 06:38PM Title: Chapter 4 – Big balls

I'm glad Harry's free of Sharon. She seems a bit unbalanced.

Author's Response: Well, back in ‘The List’ Sharon did attack Harry with a knife when he confessed he was a wizard, so I guess you could call her a bit unbalanced. I think I’d decided Sharon worked for an insurance firm, which probably explains why she’s a bit deranged.



Reviewer: Dad Signed Date: 2012.09.02 - 05:11PM Title: Chapter 4 – Big balls

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An eventful chapter.

Author's Response: And the longest chapter I’ve written as well. Six thousand plus words is far too long for a lazy git like me.



Reviewer: jojo99 Signed Date: 2012.09.02 - 04:30PM Title: Chapter 4 – Big balls

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haha - they were a little bitchy but when you're stuck in the evening from hell, why wouldn't you be?

Author's Response: Exactly. And Draco and Astoria started the bitchiness anyway!



Reviewer: skiutahnum1 Signed Date: 2012.09.02 - 02:24PM Title: Chapter 4 – Big balls

I think you where spot on and to have a relaps of sharron was good to see...now draco is in deep....soon they may find Harry's wand trained on them again....kutgw

Author's Response: Ah, but will it be Harry who goes after Draco?



Reviewer: ravenclaw_girl101 Signed Date: 2012.09.02 - 12:52PM Title: Chapter 4 – Big balls

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Nice job. Keep up the good work :)

Author's Response: Thank you!



Reviewer: freshwater Signed Date: 2012.09.02 - 11:45AM Title: Chapter 4 – Big balls

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I like the connection between the Malfoy's ire and the press' vilification of Harry. I do think that you made Ginny too bitchy: insulting Daphne's appearance --and later, Pansy's-- was low class, unattractive and unnecessary. People who speak of others like that are not people I admire or want to hang out with. Ginny screaming at Sharon and punching her is too, too soap opera/B-movie. While I like the final scene, the lead-up to it didn't need to be so over the top.

Author's Response: I take your point but really this was meant to be over the top. I could write the characters as well balanced individuals who sit down and discuss their differences in a reasonable manner, but it would make a bloody boring story, wouldn’t it? I was just having a bit of fun with H&G and, frankly, ‘bitchy Ginny’ is great to write! Besides, what’s wrong with B-movies? Half my DVD collection is made up of B-movies.




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