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Reviewer: Gin110881 Signed Date: 2017.01.19 - 03:44AM Title: Chapter 13 – A dirty-blond truth

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This was a brilliant story with lots of funny ideas.

Bill was my first thought when Harry was looking for his best Man. However, when he finally agreed I suddenly had a sense of foreboding, lol.

Harry's birthday party was perfect, the party game in particular. Unfortunately, the idea is decades too late for me. I don't think I would survive it nowadays.

Too bad that I read the story and the advice to visit Wilton House a wee bit too late. I would have liked to visit Wilton House in June last year. My accommodation, Leena's Guesthouse, was only three miles away. I can still remember a fun evening in The Mill in Salisbury. It was the day of the opening game of the European Football Championship. Hmmm, those evenings in a pub always leave the best memories. It's kind of strange, isn't it?

Author's Response: The Mill? Jeez, these days my local is the Slug and Lettuce right next door! I'd probably have been avoiding the footie, though. It just kind of bores me, these days. Wilton House is one of the best stately houses in Britain, IMHO. If I lean out of my upstairs back window I can even see the grounds. Shame they don't open up all of the gardens, though.



Reviewer: nayin1704 Signed Date: 2016.06.14 - 09:50AM Title: Chapter 13 – A dirty-blond truth

Wonderful sequel. Thank you for writing this story

Author's Response: Glad you enjoyed it. At the time, I actually regretted writing this as I felt I should have moved straight on to 'HP & the Butterfly Effect' which is the story I was probably best known for, until recently, anyway. Now I revisit it, I find its better than I remember. Perhaps I shouldn't be so hard on myself.



Reviewer: MollyandArthur Signed Date: 2016.03.05 - 08:00AM Title: Chapter 13 – A dirty-blond truth

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Great ending to this story. Luna is such a wonderful character. I am glad that you included her and that she and Harry were able to have that very interesting conversation.

Author's Response: I know I kind of threw her in at the last minute, but I couldn't have a story without Luna, could I?



Reviewer: IamGinnyWeasley Signed Date: 2014.08.12 - 05:37PM Title: Chapter 13 – A dirty-blond truth

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Really enjoyed this duet of stories (if that's the right word to use?) Really well written and I loved your author's notes :) I was a bit confused over the part in Harry and Luna's conversation where it goes “You don’t need your barriers any more, do you?” she asked. Harry just shook her head." I think it's supposed to be "his instead of "her" but I don't quite know.

Author's Response: Ah, you see Harry is really into puppetry, so he was using the opportunity to practise using Luna. He's done similar things many times, and even been arrested a few times for it.



Reviewer: riegert8 Signed Date: 2014.06.19 - 10:26PM Title: Chapter 13 – A dirty-blond truth

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This a good story

I like the character Luna, I thought she one of the few people that could understand Harry. Luna lost her mother at a young age, on another fan fic site I like to read Harry/Luna pair storys

Author's Response: Luna's definitely one of my favourite characters, too. Strangely, I'll read Harry/Ginny/Luna stories, but am largely turned off by just straight Harry/Luna ones. Does that make me a pervert? Err, don't answer that...



Reviewer: BobVosh Signed Date: 2013.07.06 - 11:59AM Title: Chapter 13 – A dirty-blond truth

I hate Luna is faking it, just so dull. Plus it doesn't make much sense as she was fairly cruelly tormented for it in school.

However I love your portrayal of all the Weasleys in this story. Especially Molly, you can see a decent amount of the tradition in her but she isn't the horrible stick in the mud style I have gotten used to in these stories.

One thing I never quite understood, is Harry went to Hogwarts until he got pulled out for Quirrelmort. Why didn't the various people meet him before?

Also out of your 4 stories, three have Harry in the aurors with a decent friend whom looks out for him nicknamed Suzie. Ok, 1 of those is sequel, but still.

Author's Response: I’m not sure; in canon Luna has a number of moments (normally when she’s saying something profound to Harry) where she almost seems like another person. That, however, is just my take on it. I did enjoy writing Molly like this; it’s my favourite take on her in any of my stories. I always see her as an earthy, jolly sort of woman who has learnt how to control her unruly brood with her eyes shut. I suspect that I will return to ‘this’ version of Molly in my next story. Harry never attended Hogwarts in this story; if you re-read that section you’ll see Sirius (who was paranoid about security) came to visit the school before Harry was due to start his first term there and that’s when they encountered Quirrell. Come on, Susan and Suzie aren’t the same names; Miss Bones would punch you in the face for calling her ‘Suzie’! Oh, and if you think I write Harry as an Auror too often you’ll approve of the new story I’m currently writing which has him as almost the exact opposite of an Auror.



Reviewer: potterfan2008 Signed Date: 2013.05.28 - 03:58AM Title: Chapter 13 – A dirty-blond truth

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Great story!!! I loved the wedding. George - he can be such a prat! If my brother had done something like that at my wedding I think I probably would have killed him. She showed some restraint. Great ending to the story :)

Author's Response: Poor George; I’m probably being a bit hard on him here. In truth I just wanted a scene where Harry and Ginny moon all their party guests, twisted git that I am!



Reviewer: Hawk29 Signed Date: 2013.03.17 - 08:08PM Title: Chapter 13 – A dirty-blond truth

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Great story, thanks for sharing it with us! You're a fantastic writer and I greatly enjoyed reading both this and The List.

You stand out to me as being able to do a fantastic job of writing stand-alone scenes that don't rely on a ridiculous amount of connected plot to work. In fact, I'd wager you could take at least half of the chapters in these two stories and make them one-shots or short stories with only minor modification to explain the premise to readers. I like your style of writing because every single one of your chapters gives the reader some satisfaction and fulfillment, if not outright laughs (and you elicited a few from me, by the way). I really appreciate reading a story that is engaging and well-paced the entire way through. Many authors, even some of the best around here, can write 20,000 words between anything significant or entertaining happening.

I read your response to my reviews on The List (counter-reviews? Reviews of reviews?) and am eagerly looking forward to digging into your new story. I don't believe anyone ever mentions that it's very satisfying to the readers when authors take time to personally address the content of reviews. We appreciate the time you take to do that. Again, great job with these two stories. I've enjoyed them immensely and they're definitely going on my favorites list. Thanks!

Author's Response: I’m glad you liked this story as well. In terms of writing I think it’s a bit transitional. Because I got so many good reviews of ‘The List’ I decided to write this as a sequel, scrapping the ‘Harry does to a different school’ story I had been working on. You’re quite right in saying both stories really are a collection of stand alones threaded together. I did give ‘The Oath’ a bit of a plot with the whole revenge against the Malfoy’s thing, but it’s a fairly weak one. My current story ‘Butterfly Effect’ is completely different in that I’ve plotted is out carefully. It’s also a lot darker than these stories as I didn’t want to get typecast. Hopefully I’ve managed to keep the story well-paced and fast moving, but I’ll let you be the judge of that. Anyway, thanks very much for reading and your kind words of encouragement.



Reviewer: parakletos Signed Date: 2013.01.18 - 02:21PM Title: Chapter 13 – A dirty-blond truth

Just thought I'd drop by and let you know I'd been reading. Ladette Ginny, eh? :p

Look forward to more of your writing.

Author's Response: Ladette? Err, well nearly. She is a professional sportswoman so I can’t imagine she’d be much of a timid wallflower. Thanks for reading and I hope you enjoyed it.



Reviewer: I Love Ginerva Signed Date: 2013.01.04 - 07:23AM Title: Chapter 13 – A dirty-blond truth

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Author's Response: Thanks for reading!



Reviewer: dshadel Signed Date: 2012.12.31 - 03:57PM Title: Chapter 13 – A dirty-blond truth

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Good story I'm sad to see it come to a end. Look forward to reading more of your work in the future

Author's Response: Thanks! Strangely, ‘the Oath’ seems less popular then ‘the List’ for some reason, which is a shame because I think it’s better written. Maybe it was just too similar to ‘the List’. Anyway, if you progress onto my next story, ‘Harry Potter and the Butterfly effect’ (plug, plug) you will find it’s a very different beast. I wanted to have a go at a proper action/adventure story and this is my attempt. Time will show if I’ve been successful.



Reviewer: allabouthp Signed Date: 2012.12.14 - 12:37AM Title: Chapter 13 – A dirty-blond truth

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I wish I could give you extra points for your author's notes. They are just as witty and entertaining as your story!

Author's Response: They’re just the ramblings of a deranged mind!



Reviewer: NoTagBacks Signed Date: 2012.11.24 - 05:29AM Title: Chapter 13 – A dirty-blond truth

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I'm glad that MinistryMalcontent (aka Tom) is doing a good job for you, but please don't overuse him, as he has a wonderful story of his own of which I'm looking forward to reading the next chapter.

I thought you had Luna a bit too serious here. Obviously it's just my opinion, but I think part of her appeal is that she's slightly off-kilter from the rest of the world, and is quite comfortable with being eccentric. The thought that she may be acting strange intentionally as a barrier to keep people out feels a little sad, and the Luna character has never been one that made me feel sad - usually it's quite the opposite.

This chapter really felt like an epilogue to the series. It's a good place to stop; anything else after this could be better written as a one-shot (or maybe two). The story after this would be almost the same as a canon-matching fanfic. The AU setup has been mostly wrung out out of it by this point.

Keep writing. It's good.

Author's Response: I do try to not take advantage of Tom, he’s really been a major help to me. My writing has come on leaps and bounds under his tuition. I won’t spill his secrets but he has another great story in the pipeline which Mrs B and I are doing a bit of ‘history picking’ for. Hopefully my chapters are less error-ridden these days so it won’t take him so long to go through. Luna here was just my attempt to do something different with her character. I’ve seen all sorts of versions of her including a psychopathic take on her in Darth Marrs ‘Unspeakable Things’ on fanfiction.net (recommended by Tom actually!). I like to think she’s that way in my story because she hasn’t found her perfect partner yet. Just as Ginny help Harry escape from his past, Luna needs someone to fulfil that role – she just hasn’t met Rolf yet. I totally agree it’s time to put this AU to bed. As one reviewer pointed out ‘The List’ and ‘the Oath’ were really both a collection of sketches and one-shots strung together rather than a proper story and really that’s all they were ever meant to be. I just wanted to write something that was funny and a bit rude in places. HP&TBE is my attempt to see if I can write a proper story and I’m keen to see how it will be received. Onwards and upwards, hopefully!



Reviewer: Emlyn Signed Date: 2012.11.16 - 10:06PM Title: Chapter 13 – A dirty-blond truth

Great ending to the story. I loved the part with Luna. She is so marvellous. It sounds like George got what he deserved. Lovely job with this series of stories. Looking forward to reading your next foray into the literary world.

Author's Response: I was quite pleased how Luna turned out and sorry I didn’t use her more in the story but I’d always had her earmarked for the ending. Glad you enjoyed it.



Reviewer: jojo99 Signed Date: 2012.11.09 - 06:19AM Title: Chapter 13 – A dirty-blond truth

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Congratulations on the end of a fun and enjoyable story.

Author's Response: Thank you. Next up, just for a change, some misery and violence!



Reviewer: Arnel Signed Date: 2012.11.08 - 04:46PM Title: Chapter 13 – A dirty-blond truth

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Your "lucid" Luna is exactly how I've always thought she was and I loved her explanation for why she acts the way she does. It was quite amusing how quickly she went from serious conversation to completely batty when Ginny showed up. It's nice to know someone shares my opinion of Luna: she wouldn't have made it into Ravenclaw if she was the total air-head she professes to be.

Poor George... he just doesn't know when to quit, does he? Again, Ron's explanation for why his brother does what he does made a lot of sense, although I think I would have preferred the prank to be during the dance rather than the ceremony. But that's just me. You presented the prank and the solution quite well and having Harry be the unflappable one in the situation just made Ginny's tirade and hex-fest all the more funny in the end. I'm glad she removed a few of her curses so he could participate in her and Harry's send-off.

By the way, you spelled the name of the sparkling wine they were drinking like the city in Illinois: there's no "i" in the word you should have used.

I can only hope that Harry and Ginny enjoy their honeymoon and that nothing bad happens on the trip, although I think the two are off to a good start.

Well done and congratulations on completing the story. I know the feeling of being bored and restless after being immersed in a story that finally comes to an end... there's that hankering to start something new and I'm glad you'll have another story for us soon.



Author's Response: Damn, I swore I looked up the spelling of champagne on Google before I posted this story. Thanks for pointing that out, I will correct shortly. I have seen a few stories where Luna is revealed as being quite lucid but I admit in the majority she just seems to be there for comedy effect or simply because the author didn’t know what to do with her. I’m afraid I’m not very kind to her in my next story but it kind of works out for her in the end. I must admit I’m strangely listless at the moment because I can’t decide what story to start writing next. The action/adventure story I mentioned is ready to go and the first chapter is with my beta as I type but I’m stuck what to do next and it’s frustrating! When did writing become an addiction?



Reviewer: Imperator 277 Signed Date: 2012.11.08 - 11:58AM Title: Chapter 13 – A dirty-blond truth

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I am very sad that this story had to end. It was a wonderful journey for both Harry and Ginny. Two lost, out of luck people can be winners when it comes to love. I cannot wait for any new stories you may have. George's prank, though more inappropriate, and the retaliation by Ginny, well deserved, were awesome.

Author's Response: In cannon, it’s always hinted that the Weasley brothers were scared of Ginny’s hexing ability. I thought I would give a little demonstration why! George’s prank was a follow on from his similar prank played on Ron and Hermione back in ‘the List’. I thought it would be too cruel to have all of Harry and Ginny’s clothes turn in invisible on their wedding day so just limited to the rear view. Or maybe I just like fantasising about Ginny’s bum. Ummm, nice.



Reviewer: carolyn jinn Signed Date: 2012.11.08 - 06:42AM Title: Chapter 13 – A dirty-blond truth

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I am sad to see this story come to the end as I have thoroughly enjoyed it.
That being said, I liked George's prank. It was typical George. But I liked Ginny's revenge better.
Loved Harry's conversation with Luna. Very insightful.
Can't wait to start reading your next story.

Author's Response: I was genuinely sad when I finished ‘The List’ but not so much with this one. I think it’s simply that I’ve already moved on this setting and I’m thinking about the next story. In fact I’m thinking about the story after the next story because I’ve already finished that one! That said, I’m more proud of ‘The Oath’ then the first one because I think it’s better written and actually has a bit of plot to it. I might revisit it one day with the odd stand-alone story but otherwise it’s time to move on. Cross fingers people will like the next one.



Reviewer: Dad Signed Date: 2012.11.08 - 04:41AM Title: Chapter 13 – A dirty-blond truth

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Brilliant ending. Enjoyed the whole thing.

Author's Response: Thanks, Dad! (That’s never going to get old, is it?)



Reviewer: smokeylovegood Signed Date: 2012.11.07 - 06:10PM Title: Chapter 13 – A dirty-blond truth

Bravo!
This was exactly what I needed after a day that led to chips and wine for dinner!
You made it clear that George "put something" on Harry's back, but I was shocked at how outrageous his prank actually was. Wow - that was a seriously scum bag move, but I did love Bill's explanation.
Luna. Ah, Luna. Normally, she makes me happy. Today, she made me sad that she doesn't even share her real self with Ginny. Hopefully, she'll meet Rolf in your next story!
Nice job and I have seen a lot of growth in your writing.



Author's Response: Thank you so much for saying you’ve seen growth in my writing! That makes me so happy (or maybe relieved is a better word). The first few stories I tried to write before ‘The List’ were truly awful. I’m just lucky Mrs Brennus is brutally honest and I was able to delete them before anyone else saw them. There are still bits of ‘The List’ which make me cringe a little. But like anything, the more you practice at it, the better you get (I hope). Still, the proof of the pudding will be with my next story, I think. Will I be able to write something a bit more serious that will still interest people? After all, I won’t be able to just stick a load of knob jokes in there if I start struggling ;-)




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