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Reviewer: ngayonatkailanman Signed Date: 2012.10.28 - 06:49AM Title: Chapter 1
Excellent post-DH one shot. Cleverly written. Less is more applied well.
Author's Response: Thanks! Glad you enjoyed it :)
Reviewer: kingbobrules Signed Date: 2012.08.28 - 09:46AM Title: Chapter 1
Overall, a good story. Plot could perhaps have been livelier, but it certainly came to a proper end. Not bad for a day's work!
Author's Response: Thanks! Glad you enjoyed it :)
Reviewer: SYLVELLE Signed Date: 2012.08.19 - 01:59PM Title: Chapter 1
Great job I think. We all know the end was fushed and I will go to FF to find the expandid version. Well written and I thought some areas ver descriptive. Killer idea Great plot and of course fills in some of the 19 years. I think it also shows the interst and backing Kinglsey has for Harry which lead to him being the youngest Auror and Auror head.
I'd say this is a 9 for me, but with more fleshing out, it's and eash 10. Great job.
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I think Kingsley would have taken an interest in Harry and acted as a mentor towards him, so that is what I was attempting to show.
Reviewer: Arnel Signed Date: 2012.08.19 - 04:08AM Title: Chapter 1
You've done a nice job wth this story, and you're right, the end does feel rushed. As a reader, I would have been more satisfied with a "to be contiinued" notification at the end of Harry's conversation with Kingsley so that the mission in Argentina could be developed further; perhaps you'll consider reworking that part so that it's as detailed as the mission in France?
Criticisms aside, I really enjoyed this story. Hannah's question certainly spearheaded a great learning experience for the Aurors-in-Training and I'm glad Kingsley was interested enough to help Harry with the initial research. You've done a nice job writing each character as an adult witch or wizard, keeping them all true to their canon personalities. Well done. I enjoyed reading your story.
Author's Response: Thanks! I actually have rewritten the ending and posted that reworked version on ff. I will update here once the voting is over. I'm glad you liked it :)
Reviewer: carolyn jinn Signed Date: 2012.08.18 - 09:10AM Title: Chapter 1
Great story and idea for the challenge. It did seem a bit rushed at the end, but overall it was well written.
Good luck.
Author's Response: Thanks! It was definitely rushed at the end. I'm glad you enjoyed it :)
Reviewer: ngayonatkailanman Signed Date: 2012.08.17 - 05:19PM Title: Chapter 1
Congratulations for completing a challenge. Excellent storyline.
Author's Response: Thank you! Glad you enjoyed it :)
Reviewer: skiutahnum1 Signed Date: 2012.08.17 - 11:06AM Title: Chapter 1
Nothing like going back to see what we miss......kutgw
Author's Response: Thanks!
Reviewer: Emlyn Signed Date: 2012.08.17 - 09:45AM Title: Chapter 1
Wow! You covered a lot of territory for a one-shot. The ending was a bit rushed. Loved the part about the broom allowance. That really makes sense. I like the thought that Hannah started the whole chain. I also enjoyed seeing Kingsley playing a working part, even though he is Minister. Logical links with the Nazis and their hideouts.
Author's Response: Thanks! I wasn't happy with the ending - I've actually posted a slightly different version of ff with an improved ending. I'm glad you liked it. I loved your story - I can tell you put a lot of time and effort into it. Good luck on the challenge :)
Reviewer: zequist Signed Date: 2012.08.17 - 12:10AM Title: Chapter 1
I enjoyed this. Your story flowed well and had a lot of interesting and creative ideas; I'm impressed that you came up with the whole thing in only a day. I would have liked to see Ginny a little more involved in the plot, but for the time period it takes place you really did the best you could with her still stuck in school. And I loved that you brought Hannah into it. She's another favorite character of mine, if you couldn't tell from my own entry.
Good luck!
Author's Response: Thanks! Glad you liked it. I also wanted to have Ginny a bit more involved but it seemed to work best while she was still at Hogwarts. I also like Hannah, she is rather overlooked.
Reviewer: mdauben Signed Date: 2012.08.16 - 10:34AM Title: Chapter 1
Good story although the last bit in Argentina was a bit rushed and anticlimactic. It would have helped to expand it out into another chapter or two, I think. Otherwise very well done.
Author's Response: Thanks! Yes, the ending was rushed - I decided to enter at the last minute so I didn't take as much time as I normally do.
Reviewer: Dad Signed Date: 2012.08.16 - 08:07AM Title: Chapter 1
I could have done with a bit more at the end but a good effort.
Author's Response: Thanks! I know, I was finishing writing it at 11:45 last night or I would have added more.
