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Reviewer: MollyandArthur Signed Date: 2015.12.13 - 06:46PM Title: Chapter 11 – Genesis of a Nemesis

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Harry did quite well with Slughorn all things considered. He got the information they needed and did not harm him. Considering the life that Harry has led, no one should expect Harry to be calm or patient in a situation like this.

Author's Response: I was actually worried that some of the Harry/Slughorn interaction in my latest story, 'Abraxas' was a bit too similar to this. Of course, I wasn't so hard on Horace in this one.



Reviewer: riegert8 Signed Date: 2014.06.20 - 08:46PM Title: Chapter 11 – Genesis of a Nemesis

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Reviewer: Marinka Signed Date: 2013.02.23 - 06:30AM Title: Chapter 11 – Genesis of a Nemesis

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I agree with Harry's methods. I don't think he would have harmed him but it makes a lot of difference that this information was given now and not 6 months later as in canon

Author's Response: Right, that’s another vote for Psycho-Harry. I think I’m finally beginning to understand that what most people wanted to see in the books was Harry turning round and giving his enemies a good kicking! JKR – you don’t know what your audience really wants!



Reviewer: Emlyn Signed Date: 2013.02.08 - 11:46AM Title: Chapter 11 – Genesis of a Nemesis

I don't necessarily think he overreacted. He was put in a difficult position. He was told by Dumbledore that they needed the memory and that Dumbledore himself couldn't get it. He didn't know the person, was able to fairly accurately assess him, and took a course of action. As he said, he didn't have time to play games. It wasn't like he was going to be around to woo him. He needed answers and needed them now. He was also fairly certain Slughorn would cave fairly easily. His reaction fits with his training, imho.

I'm glad he brought Sirius and Remus in, specifically for the reason you mentioned. If no one else knows, what will happen if things went haywire.

Author's Response: I really misjudged public opinion on this one! I thought everyone would think Harry’s actions were completely out of character. I guess the readers of SIYE are more evil then I give them credit for ;-)



Reviewer: ginnyweasley777 Signed Date: 2013.02.07 - 08:53AM Title: Chapter 11 – Genesis of a Nemesis

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love Sirius' humour :)
Dumbledore still using Harry as a pawn, I see...I actually liked Harry's reaction to Slughorn, much more assertive, got the result in the end, wrong thing for right reasons and all that.
hope he Dumble in his place again soon :)

Author's Response: This was the first time I tried writing Sirius and I admit I had a lot of fun doing it. I’ll definitely have to use him again in future stories. Everyone seems to like Harry’s handling of Slughorn – I was convinced I was going to get howls of protest when I wrote that scene! Still, if you’re packing a big sword I guess you have to get it out and play with it occasionally ;-)



Reviewer: potterfan2008 Signed Date: 2013.02.04 - 11:57PM Title: Chapter 11 – Genesis of a Nemesis

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I don't think Harry overreacted. Slughorn played games just as much as Dumbledore and I think he needed to be shown what the alternatives are. I loved the Sirius/Tonks part, but I am glad it will be a Honks free zone.

Author's Response: Tonks has always been too much like an older sister to Harry to ever really be a convincing partner for him. Personally, I can’t think of a single Honks story I’ve read that I enjoyed and that’s irrespective of the fact I only tend to write H/G. For instance, Jeconais over on FanficAuthors.net has written loads of great ‘other pairing’ stories, but the only Honks thing he’s done was a drabble. Another vote for psycho-Harry as well. I’m just going to let him kill everyone in the next few chapters! ;-)



Reviewer: NoTagBacks Signed Date: 2013.02.04 - 10:56PM Title: Chapter 11 – Genesis of a Nemesis

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I think a lot of fanfiction writers disliked book six because of the introduction of horcruxes into the story. I would agree that they're difficult to write, but a good way to explain Tom's undead-ness. I didn't mind them as a reader (the Deathly Hallows, conversely, did bother me).

Harry's confrontation with Slughorn was perfectly suited with the character he's become in this story. He'll be strong and forceful in any kind of conflict, except perhaps where it involves girls. He did have a muggle girlfriend, but I'm guessing that pureblood hieresses looking for a suitable husband will perplex and annoy him.

So when will Harry be reacquainted with the girl he saved from the diary?

Author's Response: Strangely, book six is actually my favourite for some reason despite the Horcruxes. I think my main problem is that you can’t do a lot with them – they’re in set locations and can only be destroyed by certain means. I’m working on new ways to round them up though. How about Harry launches a fake advertising campaign: ‘Turn your unwanted Horcruxes into cash£££!!!’ Harry could then send Voldemort a little bag via owl post for him to send the Horcruxes in and, hey presto, problem solved! A few chapters yet before the return of our favourite redhead. Look for her around chapter 18.



Reviewer: Mistress of Potions Signed Date: 2013.02.04 - 10:42PM Title: Chapter 11 – Genesis of a Nemesis

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Harry should have done something similar in canon, and might have had JKR not neutered him.

Author's Response: Harry’s been neutered? Who’s going to break the news to Ginny??



Reviewer: dshadel Signed Date: 2013.02.04 - 07:46PM Title: Chapter 11 – Genesis of a Nemesis

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Good chapter. I like the way you have Harry in this. Looking forward to the next chapter

Author's Response: Thanks. Harry will learn to curb his anger a bit but he’ll definitely be a man of action and not just when threatening defenceless Potion Masters with weak chests (how did I end up defending Slughorn???)



Reviewer: hot48cricket Signed Date: 2013.02.04 - 07:17PM Title: Chapter 11 – Genesis of a Nemesis

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I think Harry's reaction was quite impressive - and why should Harry wait for Slughorn to give him the memory? I also HATE horcruxes. I am looking forward to Harry and Ginny's next meeting - hopefully when they meet the mental block dumbledore put on her will fall away - or Harry will ask why dhe did not write!

Author's Response: Another vote for psycho-Harry, duly noted! As I’ve said before, if I write another story with Horcruxes in it I’m going to cheat. How about Harry issues a fake recall notice in the press and Voldemort sends all the Horcruxes back to the factory to be repaired? That might work. Ginny’s time approaches, in a chapter or seven (cough!). You’ll have to wait to see what happens with the memory block.



Reviewer: Phil42 Signed Date: 2013.02.04 - 05:59PM Title: Chapter 11 – Genesis of a Nemesis

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Overreacted? I think not! It may be infantile, but I hope that the first time Harry meets Snape he's going to really use his sword. Snape could do without all the greasy hair (and the attached head). Can't wait for more, especially some Harry/Ginny moments.

Author's Response: Ah, Professor Snape! Yes, he might be putting in an appearance in the next few chapters. And Harry knows it was the greasy git who told Voldemort of the prophecy as well. Game on! It will be a few chapters yet before Ginny makes another appearance (seven to be specific) but hang in there, good things come to those who wait.



Reviewer: Prof McGonagall Signed Date: 2013.02.04 - 04:56PM Title: Chapter 11 – Genesis of a Nemesis

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Actually, I liked Harry's way to persuade Slughorn much better. He's right, it would have taken months otherwise (and cost how many more lives?), so he just cut through all the ... formalities. I LIKE this Harry. Plus, considering his upbringing and training, this reaction was completely in characater, in my mind. Loved his final remard..."I wouldn't know...etc." That should have really shut both of them up, Slughorn AND Dumbledore.
Fabulous story, by the way. Can't wait for the next chapter!!!

Author's Response: I really have underestimated how bloodthirsty the SIYE readers are! I have therefore decided my next story will feature an axe-wielding Harry who goes round chopping people into little pieces and giggling about it afterwards! ;-) Actually, that shouldn’t really bother me; after all I married a woman who giggles when she hits people with axes. No really; we used to belong to a Viking re-enactment society and Mrs Brennus always laughed when she took a swing at someone. Of course, due to her lack of height she was invariably chopping away at people’s knees. I have a weird life…



Reviewer: jojo99 Signed Date: 2013.02.04 - 03:20PM Title: Chapter 11 – Genesis of a Nemesis

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Horcrux hunting - fun fun fun! I kind of like the way Harry approached Slughorn - no nonsense, job done. I really enjoyed the Sirius/Tonks/Harry section at the beginning too.

Author's Response: Ah, another vote for psycho-Harry! I must admit I enjoyed dropping Harry into that sort of ready-made family unit. In canon, he gets to spend very little time with Sirius so it was fun to let their relationship develop. Putting Remus and Tonks in the house as well created a nice dynamic. I have more H/S/R/T stuff coming up but be warned, not all of it is happy. Anymore ‘A set-up gone wrong’ coming our way soon?



Reviewer: Birlan Signed Date: 2013.02.04 - 02:02PM Title: Chapter 11 – Genesis of a Nemesis

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Thanks--I like how Harry is much less deferential about how to treat Slughorn. He has a stronger point of view and isn't willing to follow Dumbledore subserviently. Dumbledore's whining is ironic but not surprising. He is trying to figure Harry out also.

I look forward to reading more.

I am trying to remember from previous author notes, is it Lisa who comes back in a later chapter or is it the little sister of the Canadian Eternal Champion from Saskatchewan? Just kidding of course. I am enjoying your story very much.

Author's Response: On a whim, I Googled ‘Canadian Eternal Champion from Saskatchewan’ and ended up on the web page of some new-age bird who promotes wellbeing through creative dance and herbal tea therapy. I’m blaming you for that entirely.



Reviewer: Trucker Signed Date: 2013.02.04 - 12:22PM Title: Chapter 11 – Genesis of a Nemesis

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I love the idea of a more mature Harry, one who understands his own mind and isn't easily fooled by others. I agree that his temper was properly restrained and used effectively. I also appreciate that you're moving the story in ways that might limit Moldyshort's reign of terror, save the lives of favorite characters, and bring the story to a more satisfying conclusion than the canonical version.

Yes, war is a terrible thing and it must have consequences -- but a war fought properly (right time, right reasons, adequate resources and training) can spare untold thousands or millions of lives and prevent needless suffering.

Author's Response: Save the lives of favourite characters? Err…I’m not sure about that. Pretty soon things are going to get a bit bloody. Unlike canon Harry this version is a trained warrior and there’s no way he’s going to sit on the side-lines and let others fight his battles for him. This could mean things turn into all-out war earlier than in the books. I did say right at the start that all relationships/character deaths would largely be as per canon and that’s true. I just play around a bit with order they die in. On the plus side I’ve given a few of them really spectacular send-offs!



Reviewer: skiutahnum1 Signed Date: 2013.02.04 - 12:14PM Title: Chapter 11 – Genesis of a Nemesis

I think Harry was working wight he cards he has and used his trump card with great effect....as for albus he will need to rethink everything but not Harry....Ginny is going to be needed shortly in order to fix Harry soon I think....kutgw

Author's Response: I don’t think Harry’s really in need of fixing right at the moment. He went a bit over the top with Slughorn but that’s a reflection of the more confident, forceful person he is as a result of his training. It’s just an attempt to get me to bring Ginny into the story earlier, isn’t it? It won’t work! We won’t see Miss Weasley until chapter 18 and that’s my final word! ;-)



Reviewer: Mistress_Lrigtar Signed Date: 2013.02.04 - 11:09AM Title: Chapter 11 – Genesis of a Nemesis

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Harry did not overreact, and I liked how you wove what he said to Slughorn in canon into this scenario. This chapter had me snickering, maybe not always in the appropriate places. Loved Sirius' line about his body being like a god (spluttering laughter).

Some readers must have really given you a hard time in the past! Maybe Harry and Ginny are meant to be together, but that doesn't mean they both can't be normal and recognize attractiveness in the opposite sex. I think Harry's reaction to Tonks is very normal for a boy his age.


As for Dumbledore, he has a lot of nerve referring to Harry to turning black when he is a conniving, manipulative old man hiding his dark heart behind a snowy white beard.



Author's Response: I really am the only person who thought Harry overreacted, aren’t I? I don’t know, nasty little wizards going round threatening defenceless Potion Master with Japanese pointy-things! What’s the world coming to? I’m quite pleased that I managed to give Sirius some good lines in this and later chapters. I just imagine him as the master of the humorous quip. As he’s not been confined to Grimmauld Place in this story he’s had the chance to get out and enjoy himself a bit, hence why I’ve written him a bit different from the rather tortured character in canon. I wouldn’t go as far as to say I’ve been given a hard time by some readers when I’ve given Harry a (non-Ginny) girlfriend but I’ve certainly had people say they hated the character! With this story I’ve only had one person say they don’t like Lisa and that was a bit half-hearted. I’m obviously creating nicer girls for Harry now. :-)



Reviewer: GazingIntoTheAbyss Signed Date: 2013.02.04 - 11:09AM Title: Chapter 11 – Genesis of a Nemesis

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Another great chapter! To be honest, I really enjoyed the way Harry deals with Slughorn. He doesn't take any crap from anybody and I really liked that! Thanks for sharing, can't wait for the next chapter :)

Author's Response: I honestly thought everyone would just tut and say ‘Harry would never act like that!’ Just shows what I know. I actually deliberately made Harry’s reaction to Slughorn over the top because it will have an impact on his actions later in the story. Still, I guess there’s no point in giving him a Katana unless he whips it out occasionally.



Reviewer: Majlena777 Signed Date: 2013.02.04 - 09:41AM Title: Chapter 11 – Genesis of a Nemesis

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Reviewer: carolyn jinn Signed Date: 2013.02.04 - 07:12AM Title: Chapter 11 – Genesis of a Nemesis

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I, personally, think that Harry did not overreact. A Harry said..." They could be waiting months for that memory". At least now they can get that blasted hunt over with.

Harry has very little trust of Dumbledore, with good reason. How is he going to react when he finds out (or works out) about the memory charm he placed on Ginny? Harry may not really know, or maybe even remember her, but I still think he will be 'quite' upset!! He didn't react all that good during his discussion in the kitchen. Secrets are not good if you are all on the same team striving for a common ending.

Can't wait for your next chapter.

Author's Response: Sounds like you have the same opinion of Horcruxes that I do. They’re fine to read about in the books but a right pain in the bum if you’re writing fan fiction. This will definitely be the first and last traditional hunt story that I write. Next time I write something in a similar vein I’m going to cheat – like have Harry discover Cillit Bang dissolves Horcruxes or something. I don’t think the Dumbledore in my story is really on anyone’s team apart from his own. He has very strong views on how the wizarding world should be run and trusts no-one to put this vision in place apart from himself. In many ways he’s an older version of the canon Dumbledore who plotted with Gellert Grindelwald to take over everything. Rather than repenting after the death of his sister he just decided to use subtler means to achieve his ends (insert evil cackle at this point).




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