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Reviewer: Gin110881 Signed Date: 2015.12.30 - 11:25AM Title: Prologue - Wrath of the Dark Lord

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Wow, that's a pretty gloomy beginning. I'm curious what part Snape and Malfoy will play in this story. However, I hope that they don't try to change to the light side, lol.

Author's Response: It is a bit of a dark beginning yes. But, starting as I did right after the climax of Half Blood Prince, it felt right to explore the consequences of those actions. As you read on you will see the roles of Snape and Malfoy, as an author, I hope those roles will surprise you a little, and I make no promises about where those characters will end up. In Deathly Hallows, Snape was redeemed and Malfoy was left largely unanswered, with the same sort of slippery existence of the rest of his family, avoiding any solid consequences. I can assure you in this story there will be consequences. Hope you stick around for the duration, and I hope you have lots of comments. Thank you so much for reading and commenting! Happy reading!



Reviewer: TomBombadil Signed Date: 2013.03.29 - 12:14AM Title: Prologue - Wrath of the Dark Lord

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Fantastic start ... The wrath of a true tyrant! Well written. Well conceived. Convincing. Frightening. Satisfying. Thank you!

Author's Response: I do hope you will keep reading, and of course commenting! Thanks!



Reviewer: Mistress_Lrigtar Signed Date: 2013.03.21 - 10:52PM Title: Prologue - Wrath of the Dark Lord

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That was an intense prologue. I'm looking forward to reading more and seeing your take on the 7th book.

Author's Response: I do hope you enjoy it! Thanks for reading and commenting!



Reviewer: Arnel Signed Date: 2013.03.04 - 08:51AM Title: Prologue - Wrath of the Dark Lord

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If you're looking for sympathy for these characters, they're not getting any from me yet. You created an imagination-catching prologue, so I hope the interest factor continues in subsequent chapters.

Author's Response: Fair enough. I will look forward to your responses to further chapters with great anticipation! Thank you for the reading and the commenting!



Reviewer: potterfan2008 Signed Date: 2013.03.02 - 12:56PM Title: Prologue - Wrath of the Dark Lord

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Interesting beginning! I thought Draco already had his Dark Mark, wasn't that what Harry figured out in HBP? I think you portrayed Voldemort well and I think he would pause at the sight of a mother throwing themselves in front of their child - it would certainly hold bad memories.

Author's Response: Thanks for your comments. Yes if there is anything that would give the Dark Lord pause it is a Mother attempting to protect her child. I did some review of the books and tried to determine if Draco already had a mark or not. Yes, Harry speculated that he did, but I found nothing that actually confirmed it in the books, and I assume that if he had a mark it would have been reason to not allow him back at Hogwarts, so for my purposes I assumed that he would not actually receive his mark until he completed the task assigned to him. As he failed the task, I am assuming that he never got a mark. If there is proof to the contrary in canon, I would like to see the reference. Unfortunately at this point it would be difficult for me to change it. Thanks so much for reading, I do hope you continue!



Reviewer: Emlyn Signed Date: 2013.02.25 - 08:35AM Title: Prologue - Wrath of the Dark Lord

I wonder why Voldemort feared Narcissa? Interesting beginning. I look forward to finding out what happens to these players. I take it Voldemort wanted Draco to do the job and therefore blames Snape for having done it.

Author's Response: Why did Voldy fear Narcissa? Think about it... what happened the last time he faced a Mother who stepped in front of her son? And yeah, something like that... Hope you keep reading and keep commenting! Thanks.



Reviewer: nalaniekeala Signed Date: 2013.02.23 - 05:11PM Title: Prologue - Wrath of the Dark Lord

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Wow, what a start. I'm intrigued enough to keep reading. I like how you characterized Voldy. I think you did a good job of showing how cruel and sadistic he could be. It would have been so much easier to just kill them both, but that wouldn't serve his purpose as well.

Author's Response: Thank you! I am glad you like it, I hope you keep following, and keep commenting! I love comments!



Reviewer: Brennus Signed Date: 2013.02.21 - 03:25PM Title: Prologue - Wrath of the Dark Lord

I have to say I’m a bit surprised this chapter got approved in this format; the archivists are pretty hot on SPaG usually. Sadly, whatever merits your story has are completely lost as, unfortunately, it’s practically unreadable at present.

When you add stories/chapters, you have the option to preview them. This is the perfect time to see if everything looks right before it’s posted for approval. The site’s software can be a bit funny when it comes to formatting and often you will have to go back and manually insert your paragraph breaks etc. again. If problems persist you may have to indulge in a bit of HTML trickery (there’s an incredibly helpful guide to HTML on this site’s help section if you’ve never used it before. I picked it up in five minutes and I’m normally hopeless at that sort of thing). Can I suggest you go back and edit the chapter again via the ‘manage story’ option on your account screen. Hopefully it shouldn’t be too big a job to sort the formatting out.

Above all, don’t be disheartened. It took me a few attempts to get things right when I started and I’m sure that’s true of most of the writers on this site. I’ll look forward to reading more of your story.


Author's Response: This chapter was not submitted like this! The formatting was lost during the validation process. I am working with the Admin to try and get it corrected.

Author's Response: As you can see, the issue has been corrected, and is not persisting into further submissions. Still, I have seen no further comments from you? I did hope that your curiosity would bring you back for more reading, and I had hoped more comments? I always value well considered comments. Thanks again.



Reviewer: seekers_destiny Signed Date: 2013.02.21 - 12:16PM Title: Prologue - Wrath of the Dark Lord

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Welcome to SIYE! Now, about formatting....

Author's Response: It was not that way when I submitted it! I got a note from the editor saying that it happened during validation and I am to contact an Admin about it. This does not bode well!




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