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Reviewer: MollyandArthur Signed Date: 2016.10.25 - 08:54PM Title: Chapter 3 – From Hell

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I'll admit I haven't read the previous reviews. I'm guessing you are writing a Jack the Ripper sort of story with a magical element. Of course, that still leaves the question of who and why.

Author's Response: Saucy Jack? I may have incorporated a few elements of him, here and there.



Reviewer: nyladnam04 Signed Date: 2013.07.02 - 08:54PM Title: Chapter 3 – From Hell

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Reviewer: ellen Signed Date: 2013.06.10 - 04:57PM Title: Chapter 3 – From Hell

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Not happy families at the Weasleys then? I wonder exactly what the shadowy figure is expecting from the ritual. Still, a one in five success rate gives scope for more gore...

Author's Response: Yes, not the most reliable of sacrificial rituals, is it? The one’s I do have a much higher success rate…



Reviewer: Aurorofthelight Signed Date: 2013.06.08 - 10:51AM Title: Chapter 3 – From Hell

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Brennus,
You have now elevated this right past billiant to Masterpiece!! This is already right past silver trinket worthy to galleon trinket worthy! And you are correct, you really didn't give us enough info to justify anyone making a wild guess at the killer's identity! I expect your killer will not be a known character but someone of your own creation. Having written fanfic myself, it's more fun that way! However, I think you have revealed enough for one to offer a theory on the killer if given careful thought and logic! For what it's worth, here's mine. I believe we are looking at son of "Jack the Ripper" meets son of "Dr. Jekyll and Mr. Hyde" meets son of Mr. Filch and Mrs. Figg! Our heros are dealing with a male loner who is very intelligent and meticulous, at least to the point of how he researches his victims and plans his crimes. He likely has a magical power level somewhere closer to a Squib than a wizard, and therefore has spent most of his life feeling inadequate and unworthy of his wizarding level while developing a strong jealousy of those above his level of magical power and skill, especially pure bloods who he would view as the elite. He probably blames his parents who may or may not be purebloods. He has likely been an underachiever since at least Hogwarts and likely failed to achieve Newt results that would enable him to obtain the loftier postiions in the Ministry or Wizarding society. Best bet would be he aspired to be a Magical Healer but fell short and either labored a year or two in a low level ministry postion or he might have gone straight into the mjuggle world. He might have been intelligent enough to attend a Muggle medical school and obtained surgical skills, or a muggle profession such as a Mortician or a Meat Butcher. Any of the three would explain his skill with a knife and would have provided ample opportunity to practice and perfect his skill. The fact that he was dissapointed he did not feel "different" after the ritual with the organs leads me to surmise he has found some dark magic ritual that he believes will increase his magical power to a pure blood type level. This would potentially explain his carefully both researching his victim and planning the murder. He is likely looking for pure bloods with a heritage of powerful ancestors and relatives. So great is his obsession with this ritual that he will now graduate to serial killer who will only be stopped by obtaining his obsessive goal or by our heros. I'm betting on the latter! The good news is time and more of your marvelous chapters will tell the tale!!! Can't wait for the next one! :):):):):):):):):):) AurorOTL

Author's Response: Whoa, steady on! You’re making me blush, here. Unfortunately you’re not quite right with some of your speculation but with the story now really getting into its stride, I’m afraid I won’t be giving out too many clues. Hopefully things will become clearer with each chapter I post. Hope you continue to enjoy the story.



Reviewer: gemz1313 Signed Date: 2013.06.07 - 06:34PM Title: Chapter 3 – From Hell

I'm really enjoying this, can't wait for more

Author's Response: The chapters for this one do seem to be coming up pretty quickly. I hope I can keep up the pace.



Reviewer: zequist Signed Date: 2013.06.07 - 12:14AM Title: Chapter 3 – From Hell

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I haven't read the graphic novel, but I really liked the movie version of "From Hell." Although I sincerely hope your Harry is only addicted to alcohol and not opium!

I'm not even going to try to guess who the killer is at this point - it's way too early for that - but you did have me hopping around the internet this afternoon looking up ritual sacrifices of the heart and liver from history and legend, to see if I could come up with any theories about just what this guy's goal might be.

Author's Response: I’ve only watched the film once and I remember being really disappointed with it, which is unusual as I normally like Jonny Depp’s stuff. The graphic novel is actually nothing like the film at all. I especially love the bonus feature at the back of the book ‘Dance of the Gull Catchers’ which is a brief tale of all criminologists and authors that have written books about Jack the Ripper and all the theories they have come up with. I think my favourite Ripper suspect was Vassily Konoval, a homicidal lunatic and occasional transvestite from St Petersburg! Oh, and really don’t bother researching ritual sacrifices on my account… it’s really not going to help.



Reviewer: allabouthp Signed Date: 2013.06.06 - 08:04PM Title: Chapter 3 – From Hell

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I'm loving it so far! What do you mean only 12 chapters! Come on now no need to rush. :). Thanks and keep them coming.

Author's Response: I had to limit it to 12 chapters; the killer would have run out of witches otherwise.



Reviewer: skiutahnum1 Signed Date: 2013.06.06 - 03:10PM Title: Chapter 3 – From Hell

Well now Ginny. Is seeing the real day to day of a life she chose....and your right I can see in the writings for Molly that your heart is not in it....kutgw

Author's Response: I guess a lot will depend on your opinion of Molly on how you perceive my portrayal of her here, but, yes, being free of the plot restrictions I would definitely write her differently.



Reviewer: ProfessorBinns79 Signed Date: 2013.06.06 - 12:32PM Title: Chapter 3 – From Hell

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Two more votes for Filch (myself and my wife). Your Molly and Ron certainly add drama to the story (in a slightly humorous fashion), but I have to disagree with your other reviewers who seem to think that these are strictly canon characterizations. You have once again taken canon personality traits and amplified them to an absurd and problematic degree so as to make for an entertaining problem for the protagonist to solve. This is good story-writing on your part, but does not -- to my way of thinking -- justify the bashers! Thank you for acknowledging in your author's note the fact that this is one of many possible portrayals of Molly (even for the same author). I wonder if you will flesh-out your characterization of Ron and Molly (and Arthur, for that matter) or if you will leave them as one-dimensional comic relief. Either is fine; every story needs a little comic relief!

And yes...Ginny definitely needs her own place! (So does Ron!)

Author's Response: As I said, Filch is not a bad shout but see my reply to aimless for why it’s not right. I’m not sure why Molly is the only character whose personality I change so much from story to story. Normally her character is plot driven but quite why that doesn’t happen to anyone else is a mystery. To be honest, neither Molly nor Ron will be getting a great deal of screen time in this story, so will just remain fairly shallow. Most of the character development will centre on Harry, Ginny and Susan. Oh, and yes we will be getting a bit of comic relief later but it will be Harry and Ginny supplying that.



Reviewer: zeta_one Signed Date: 2013.06.06 - 12:31PM Title: Chapter 3 – From Hell

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SO a Jack the Ripper reference. Hope it's not some crazed Hufflepuff looking for power to defeat the boy who lived.
Can't wait for more.

Thanks for sharing.

Author's Response: Actually, a few references, but a previous reviewer beat you to pointing that out. I was going to make a comment about it being unlikely there were any crazed Hufflepuffs but then I remembered that Mrs Brennus was sorted into the house of badgers on Pottermore. She was not happy!



Reviewer: aimless Signed Date: 2013.06.06 - 10:14AM Title: Chapter 3 – From Hell

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I would suggest Filch, he's a squib after all and would like to become more powerfull. But doubt he had enough money to have large book collection or have medical education.

Author's Response: Filch is actually a logical suggestion, but sadly wrong. I’ll make this easier on everyone and come flat out and say that the Killer has never stepped foot in Hogwarts in his life. I doubt this will help anyone guess the killers identity, but it may cut out some of the wilder guesses.



Reviewer: ginnyweasley777 Signed Date: 2013.06.06 - 09:50AM Title: Chapter 3 – From Hell

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by Molly is a bitch in this one
lloking forward to the next installment already :)

Author's Response: Yes, she is, but fortunately we won’t see too much more of her in this story. It’s for the best, really.



Reviewer: muggledad Signed Date: 2013.06.06 - 09:02AM Title: Chapter 3 – From Hell

P.S. Oh, yeah, forgot to thank you for portryaing my most unloved HP character (RW) accurately. He's a waste of space, an oxygen theif and an overall prick. And I don't know why it's double submitting my reviews. It boosts your review count, though! :lol:

md

Author's Response: Please feel free to boast my review count as much as you want! Huzzar, I’ve found another member for my ‘Ronald Weasley must die!’ club that I’m founding. It almost killed me giving him a happy ending in ‘Butterfly…’ I’m never doing that again, I can tell you. Fortunately, we don’t actually get to see too much more of him in this story, apart from a few snide remarks in the next couple of chapters. Now why didn’t I write it so Ron gets chopped to little pieces? Damn!



Reviewer: muggledad Signed Date: 2013.06.06 - 08:58AM Title: Chapter 3 – From Hell

So.

Molly's a borderline harridan.

The murderer reminds me of the sicko in Silence of the Lambs - just smarter.

The coppers are all boozers.

Rough characterizations, but that's what I'm seeing so far. I'm willing to bet that once the big reveal occurs as to who the killer is, I'll look back at this chapter and moan, "He said it right there. I'm blind!" or somehting of the like.

If Voldemort wasnt' already dead, I'd say it was him. BTW, did I miss Sirius' status? Is he dead, missing or unimportant to the plot and therefore ignored?

Thanks for the update, looking forward to more

md

Author's Response: Echo…echo…echo…



Reviewer: muggledad Signed Date: 2013.06.06 - 08:58AM Title: Chapter 3 – From Hell

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So.

Molly's a borderline harridan.

The murderer reminds me of the sicko in Silence of the Lambs - just smarter.

The coppers are all boozers.

Rough characterizations, but that's what I'm seeing so far. I'm willing to bet that once the big reveal occurs as to who the killer is, I'll look back at this chapter and moan, "He said it right there. I'm blind!" or somehting of the like.

If Voldemort wasnt' already dead, I'd say it was him. BTW, did I miss Sirius' status? Is he dead, missing or unimportant to the plot and therefore ignored?

Thanks for the update, looking forward to more

md

Author's Response: Molly’s only a borderline harridan? I’ll have to try harder. It’s so long ago that I watched Silence of the Lambs that I really can’t remember anything about it, so no inspiration was taken from that source. ALL coppers are boozers. And don’t worry, not only have we not seen anything to give away the identity of the killer yet, I haven’t really given any clues that would give you a hint yet. If anybody guesses it at this point I will have to assume my hard drive has been hacked!



Reviewer: mdauben Signed Date: 2013.06.06 - 12:57AM Title: Chapter 3 – From Hell

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Ugh! A rather gruesome chapter but an interesting development in the story. We do seem to spend a lot of time in pubs during your stores I notice, though. Not that that's a bad thing. Now, since everyone else is making wild guesses about your Namlesss Man, I suppose I should, too. Well, my guess is that its... Stubby Boardman! Sigh. Luna will be so disapointed in him.

Author's Response: Of course my characters spend a lot of time in pubs: they are British, after all. Even JKR features three different pubs in what is essentially a series of children’s books! It can’t be Stubby Boardman; I already mentioned Sirius was dead! ;-)



Reviewer: MrsAlphardBlack Signed Date: 2013.06.06 - 12:21AM Title: Chapter 3 – From Hell

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Curse you and your addictive stories, Brennus! Just had to get that out of my system. You're giving us another captivating tale, to be sure. Very interested to see how things play out. Having a hard time remembering so far that this is a Harry/Ginny tale, since the murder mystery is so gripping. As long as we don't go 16 chapters without some development on the romantic front, I'm happy. Looking forward to the next installment!
I will say this for our late, lamented Mary Kelly: at least she seems to have had an easier time of it than Mary Kelly of Whitechapel fame.

Author's Response: Please take a virtual gold star as the first person to pick up on my ‘Jack the Ripper’ influences in this story (or at least the first person to mention it!) I had toyed with naming all of the victims in this story after Jack’s victims, but decided against it. My starting point for this story was Alan Moore’s wonderful ‘From Hell’ graphic novel, although my plot is very different from his; no Masonic influences, for instance. And rest assured, I won’t be keeping Harry and Ginny apart for 16 chapters in this story, not least because it’s only 12 chapters long!



Reviewer: Tonksaholic Signed Date: 2013.06.06 - 12:04AM Title: Chapter 3 – From Hell

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So the Weasley family isn't as bright and shiney here as in cannon, huh? That's to be understood. I imagine the war in your universe was a bit darker and maybe a little more hard on everyone so it's natural that some of that carries over. Molly is a wee bit shrew here, but in the books she did tend to go to extremes with her emotions at times. There, though it always seemed based on her protective instincts as a mother; here it seems to be coming more from disapproval. It's not neccessarily a bad thing, just Molly depicted in a way not normally seen on this site. Now Ron being portrayed as a jealous jerk, that I've seen on this site. :-)

The Ginny-centered chapters have both been great. They've developed her and moved the story along nicely. I do hope we get to see more of a Harry-centric chapter because Ginny is very open as a character. She's someone here who is open about her feelings with the people around her and who doesn't hide her personal issues. Harry's kind of the opposite and I'd like to see his reactions to having Ginny in his life.

The Mystery Man...hmmm. I have a couple of reasoanble theories about him and one wildly outrageous theory. All are probably wrong, though. My theory about how he's eventually going to try to complete his ritual, unfortunately, probably is more on the mark.

My one real critique of this chapter is that ending was very abrupt. Not in a, "OMG, I can't believe that just happened" Way but in a, "Wait? Huh, it's over?" Way. The levitity in the bar was good to break up the darkness and hostility of the beginning of the chapter, it just felt like it ended almost in the middle of the scene. It felt like there should have been something more: Harry walking in and Ginny being distracted, Ginny thinking more about her living situation or her family, a joke about Howell being whipped. Just something else to say that the chapter was officially over. It's a minor, nitpickey thing that bears no relevence on the overall wonderful story you have going on so far, it just stood out enough to me in the overall wonderfulness of the story that I had to mention it.

KUTGW!!!

---Kelley
Author's Response: I think I wrote the Weasleys in a more damning manner in my last story, actually. Molly, Ron et al maybe pains in the bum in this story, but isn’t that what families are? I’m a bit surprised that you think that my depiction of Molly is unusual; I’m sure I’ve read loads of stories on site that depict her as a similar overprotective, overemotional shrew. I kind of think of her like this as a bit of a cliché. It just shows how varied people’s perception of characters can be. As Harry eases into the story, we’ll see more scenes from his perspective as well as Ginny’s, in fact, I’ll be swapping between them frequently, with a few scenes seen through the killer’s eyes, of course. I guess the end of the chapter was a bit abrupt, I really didn’t want to start on the next scene but I could have added a few more lines. I just liked the image of poor Howell sat there while surrounded by a group of women all demanding he go to the bar and get the next round. It seemed so… familiar!



Reviewer: potterfan2008 Signed Date: 2013.06.05 - 10:48PM Title: Chapter 3 – From Hell

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Molly is a selfish cow - I can't stand when mothers try to run their children's lives and make them feel guilty for living their own lives. Ron is his usual stupid, selfish prat self. I can see all of the brothers assuming Ginny would put her life on hold to make her mother happy. It's like it's Ginny's responsibility to make Molly happy, but of course her brothers don't have to. Ginny needs to get her own place - hmm will Harry need a roommate? I do like your murder mystery. So not a Squib - definitely wacked though. Hope this makes sense as I've had a bad day and bit more pain meds then normal so what I think sounds right might not really be that way :)

Author's Response: Oh, Sharon! Your review features one guess which is spot on (although it might not be vital to the plot) and then you say something else which isn’t correct. As noted, given the choice I probably wouldn’t write Molly like this but I’m a slave to the plot. I will, however, always write Ron as a complete tosspot given half a chance! Hope you’re feeling better soon.



Reviewer: LadyPhoenixFireRose Signed Date: 2013.06.05 - 10:28PM Title: Chapter 3 – From Hell

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How nice a gory murder seen. Why am I not surprised these murders are all about some magical ritual or another? He also happens to be hunting down some young girls, or fairly young, so is Ginny going to end up being a target?

Running tally of what I know about him so far:

He is a he.
He is a wizard.
May or may not be an orphan.
He never went to Hogwarts. So I am assuming that would mean he went to Durmstrang, or was self taught, or home schooled (though this one seems kind of unlikely judging by how he dislikes his family so much, he also said they never gave him anything, so I assume that would include training).
He has utterly no connection to Death Eaters.
He is trying to increase his power through a ritual using the heart and liver of girls. (Does he want become the next Dark Lord?)

As for him being a psycho, yeah, being completely a totally crazy is exactly what I mean.

Random guessing time, is it Victor Krum?

And just because we know next to nothing about him doesn't mean I have any intentions of not guessing, that is the funnest time to be guessing.

Author's Response: Okay, now we are starting to get to the point I’m giving clues in the story about the killer, I’m not going to be too forthcoming in these reviews. I will say one thing; in your running tally there is one point that is wrong and it sort of negates a few of the others. Victor Krum? Just because his eyebrows are too close together is no reason to assume he’s a vicious killer! Nope, it’s not him. Keep trying!




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