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Reviewer: MollyandArthur Signed Date: 2016.10.26 - 06:29AM Title: Chapter 5 – Misdirection
Amazing how Draco is always up to no good. The aurors set him up beautifully!
Author's Response: Draco is the classic pantomime villain - despicable but ultimately to be laughed at. I mean, he never even developed his own evil laugh, did he?
Reviewer: redheadedfervor Signed Date: 2013.06.11 - 03:38PM Title: Chapter 5 – Misdirection
I am really enjoying this, it's a fabulous mystery, not to mention one of the best Auror centered plots I've ever read.
I'm not a huge fan of the way Molly and Ron are being written, because even though their characters do have these jealous and overprotective qualities, more often than not they eventually come around because their family and friends are more important to them than their own insecurities. I understand why you're writing them this way, but I feel like it's a bit too over the top and I'm having a hard time believing them. Despite Ron's flaws, and even without Harry's influence in this story I truly believe that Ron's strength and courage resides within his own character.
Also I could do with a few more Harry/Ginny scenes, but I'm sure that's to come.
As for my speculations on who this killer is, all I can really say is that I'm seeing some parallels to Jack the Ripper, but I could be way off base.
All in all keep up the good work. :)
Author's Response: Nope, you’re right, there are a lot of Jack the Ripper parallels in this story, the ‘From Hell’ bit being the most obvious. Lot’s more H/G scenes to come, starting in the very next chapter. I’ve already touched on my regret at writing Molly like this, but I make no apologies about bashing Ron. He really isn’t a favourite character of mine and I would question exactly how much of a help he was to Harry all the way through the books (I’ll give you saving Harry from drowning in DH but would point out anyone in a similar position could have done that). No doubt I’ll get someone who will want to argue the point and I’ll happily listen to any arguments put forward. I’ll still always write Ron as a git, though (snigger).
Reviewer: Mistress of Potions Signed Date: 2013.06.10 - 07:28PM Title: Chapter 5 – Misdirection
Woo Hoo! Draco's going to get it, Draco's going to get it! Draco Malfoy has to be a fun character to write, nasty little ferret he is. Nice job on it.
Author's Response: Not a big Draco fan then?
Reviewer: LadyPhoenixFireRose Signed Date: 2013.06.10 - 06:50PM Title: Chapter 5 – Misdirection
Hehe, I must say I love what you are doing to Malfoy. He deserves it, and so much worse. It's nice to see stories that show Draco as the imbecile that he really is.
I can live with the treatment of Ron, though I really don't see what everyone has against him. He is not that bad, and he does actually grow up in canon.
About the Weasleys, the thing is though you barely mentioned them, you are showing Bill and Charlie in a bad light as well what with their disapproval of their choice of jobs
Okay, I have one big problem with this story. The last murder victim's last name was Brown, and she was a member of a dark family - well at least a pure-blood family that sided with Tommy Girl - also you said that her last remaining relative is a brother, but the thing this is, there was a Lavender BROWN in canon, and she was not from any kind of dark family, she even fought directly against Voldemort. My problem is naming the girl Brown, and having her family be dark causes huge conflict and confusion (for me at any right). I know Lavender does not even show up in this story, but being that is an HP fanfiction one would first assume, that unless said otherwise by the author of the story, all canon characters do actually exist. And you never said that Lavender didn't exist. So...?
I have figured out who murderer is, yep, it's Crookshanks. Okay maybe not... A new guess of mine actually is Marius Black. Who is indeed a squib. Or is it Ms. Brown-Whom-I-Never-Liked-And-Conflicts-W ith-Laveder-Which-Is-Very-Confusing's brother?
On an ending note, "Random Two Facts of the Day Because I Feel Like Giving Them."
1) I am normally a terrible reviewer, and usually leave rather short reviews, and so if I am leaving you really long reviews and lots of them you can be sure that I am enjoying your story(s).
2) Orion Black, Sirius's father, was never head of the Black family.
And of course the two facts of the day are not supposed to be related to the story.
G'day.
Author's Response: Well, thank you for those random facts! One Potter related, one personal: nice mix! Regarding the name confusion, no this is nothing to do with Lavender Brown or her family (and to confuse things, in chapter 6 there is a mention of Lavender, as well. Again nothing to do with Ron’s ex). You may have noticed that I have been using bits and pieces of ‘Jack the Ripper’ folk lore in my story and ‘Carrie Brown’ was an American prostitute killed in New York in 1891. It has been speculated that the Ripper could have fled England and taken refuge in the USA and Carrie was his first victim on his arrival in the states. Her injuries do appear very similar to the ones inflicted on several of the London victims but if this was the work of the Ripper or a copy-cat is impossible to prove either way. Besides, ‘Brown’ is a very common name in Britain. BTW, do you think Ron really grows up? His childish comments in the ‘Nineteen Years Later’ chapter of DH make me think otherwise. Sorry, your guesses are all wrong. Crookshanks would have eaten more than just the heart and liver.
Reviewer: ellen Signed Date: 2013.06.10 - 05:32PM Title: Chapter 5 – Misdirection
Well, Draco fell into the trap very neatly. Even a politician shouldn't be that stupid! It's a shame nothing else about the case is going so well. On the relationship front Harry is definitely paying more attention to new recruit Ginny than strictly necessary, but maybe he just likes redheads.
Author's Response: Are you sure about Politian’s not being that stupid? Wasn’t there some American Politian in the last election that claimed women couldn’t get pregnant by being raped? If you require evidence that anyone involved in politics is a moron, there it is!
Reviewer: skiutahnum1 Signed Date: 2013.06.10 - 04:24PM Title: Chapter 5 – Misdirection
Draco is suck a worm.....hope he enjoys prison food for the next 20 years....kutgw
Author's Response: ‘Draco is suck a worm’! Brilliant – I might just re-title the chapter that!
Reviewer: gemz1313 Signed Date: 2013.06.10 - 03:05PM Title: Chapter 5 – Misdirection
This is my favourite story of yours so far. I'm not keen on Ron bashing or Molly bashing, but you're not going overboard so I'll let you off ;)
Author's Response: You know, I nearly abandoned this story, mainly due to my dissatisfaction with a later chapter which still needs a major re-write. I do have an idea who I’m going to change it though. As I’ve said before, I’m not proud of my treatment of Molly in this story (I’ve given her a bit of a rough time in my last two stories). Ron bashing comes as standard for a Brennus story, however.
Reviewer: zeta_one Signed Date: 2013.06.10 - 12:29PM Title: Chapter 5 – Misdirection
Ron maybe thick, but Draco is down right dumb to fall for that. Hope Harry has a spare room for Ginny. I can hear the "boom chicka wow wow" song now.
Thanks for sharing.
Author's Response: I like to think of Draco as arrogant, rather than dumb. He just can’t believe one of his schemes could fall apart and doesn’t react well when it does. The 70’s porn film soundtrack is on pause at the moment, I’ll let you know when I’m ready to push play.
Reviewer: Birlan Signed Date: 2013.06.10 - 11:21AM Title: Chapter 5 – Misdirection
Nicely done. Draco being an idiot seemed in character.
Ron and Molly don't come across well. I enjoyed Ginny's description of his academic progress post-Hermione.
I look forward to reading more.
Still have no idea on who it could be. Winky seems like a possibility. I don't think she has an alibi and nothing seems inconsistent with an embittered abandoned substance abusing angry manual worker lashing out and trying to find a short cut to strength and fame.
Author's Response: Hmm, I see Winky more as a poisoner rather than organ-removal kind of elf. She could just snap one day and wipe out half of Hogwarts with arsenic in the cauliflower cheese.
Reviewer: Dad Signed Date: 2013.06.10 - 06:23AM Title: Chapter 5 – Misdirection
A satisfying chapter. But no nearer to finding the murderer.
Author's Response: Actually, someone on this site is VERY close to guessing the murderer. But it’s no use going through the reviews 9if you were so inclined) this person sent me a personal message. I suspect that by the time the next chapter goes up I will have had my first correct answer.
Reviewer: GetlostD91 Signed Date: 2013.06.10 - 03:44AM Title: Chapter 5 – Misdirection
My best guess for who the killer is, Hermione. Authors tend not to mention characters without reason, her current activities are unknown, she fits the profile of smart and muggleborn and its not to unreasonable to assume that without Harry around her life at hogwarts was harsher producing a more embittered character. Her parents were denstists right, think they have scalpels available?
Author's Response: What do you mean? I mention all sorts of things for absolutely no reason. It’s just the sort of random guy I am. Sorry, it’s not Hermione who will not be featuring in this story. The only reason she actually gets a mention is part of my continued Ron bashing. That girl was much too good for the likes of him!
Reviewer: duckster Signed Date: 2013.06.10 - 02:04AM Title: Chapter 5 – Misdirection
I'm enjoying your story, but I thought your portrayal of Draco a bit off from canon. Draco is a cowardly bigoted slimeball, but he never came across as stupid to me, and slipping up like that and practically admitting authoring the letter was a bit much.
You also have a few typos:
"Ginny ideally wondered" probably should be Ginny idly wondered
"felt a hand on her should" - felt a hand on her shoulder
"punish you retrospectively" - punish you retroactively
"being written into folk law" - being written into folk lore
Author's Response: Not sure I agree about Draco. I admit he was never stupid, but he was rather impressed with himself and reacted badly if his plans went awry. Still, when do I ever worry about being canon compliant? Thanks for pointing out the errors, they are now amended.
Reviewer: carolyn jinn Signed Date: 2013.06.09 - 11:51PM Title: Chapter 5 – Misdirection
Well, Malfoy has dug himself a hole that seems to be quicksand...and he is falling further into it.
I love the way Harry can be sneaky!
Hope Ginny finds some place soon as a murder committed by her may mess up the rest of your plot line!!!
More soon, please.
Author's Response: Yeah, it would be a shame if Ginny had to end up arresting herself.
Reviewer: lunagranger Signed Date: 2013.06.09 - 10:50PM Title: Chapter 5 – Misdirection
No Review
Author's Response: Thanks for the stars.
Reviewer: HeroInTheWings731 Signed Date: 2013.06.09 - 08:36PM Title: Chapter 5 – Misdirection
I'm loving this story so far and the way it has shifted focus onto the work aspect of being an Auror, while your other stories focused on the relationship and then the battles with Voldemort/Dumbledore. I like the versatility in the writing. It's also interesting that since Ginny's introduction, there hasn't been any point of view from Harry, so while we know Ginny is starting to fall, Harry is still a bit of a mystery. Although it seems like he plans on inviting her to live with him, which could accelerate their relationship a bit. As for the case, it is rather odd. I'm glad that the letter turned out to be a fake and just a failed attempt by Malfoy to gain pure-blood support, but now I have no idea who the killer is or what his motives and intentions are. With the removal of organs, the main suspect (and completely implausible) that pops into my head is Hannibal Lector, but only because of the gory tv show that I've watched in recent weeks. Anyway, keep up the great work!
Author's Response: I do try and make every story I write slightly different (other than ‘The List/Oath which was just the same story continued). The next one is different again and will be a re-write of GoF with a few twists. We will start to see more of the story from Harry’s POV from now on. Harry offer Ginny a room? What in that huge empty, lonely house of his? Where would he find the room? I hope Malfoy’s letter was cheesy enough. I tried to think of a really crap name for the killer that would be the sort of thing Draco would come up with; the ‘Executioner’ seemed to be suitably naff. Regarding you Hannibal Lector comment, I can assure you that no body parts will be eaten in this story, not even with a nice Chianti.
Reviewer: Comet Moon Signed Date: 2013.06.09 - 08:34PM Title: Chapter 5 – Misdirection
I Love stories where Ginny and Harry work together as more equals.
Wonder if Hermione remained friends with Ginny?
LFTM
Ja ne
Jim
Author's Response: You know, I had to look up both LFTM and ja ne. You will have to remember that I’m a middle-aged bloke from Wiltshire and I don’t understand all these new-fangled, urban, street-gang terms! Are you just trying to make me feel old? Really, all I need to do is look in a mirror to do that! Oh, why is my beard so white? Sob.
Reviewer: zequist Signed Date: 2013.06.09 - 06:39PM Title: Chapter 5 – Misdirection
What a wonderful Slytherin Harry would have made! Snape would be so appalled if he knew....
Author's Response: I haven’t really decided where Snape is in this story (other than not in it, obviously). If pushed I would say that he’s either under a large, damp rock or working in the Post Office somewhere.
Reviewer: Rosina Ferguson Signed Date: 2013.06.09 - 06:24PM Title: Chapter 5 – Misdirection
Oh what a tangled webs we weave when first we practice to deceive! As Sir Walter Scott famously stated and I hope Malfoy's web is occupied by a blooming great acromantula!
I was puzzled by unicorn shit.... surely dragon shit would have more appropriate for purebloods???? Just my take on things.
I liked seeing red-blooded Ginny smacking her lips in metaphorical appreciation of a good steak. Just Harry's type of girl there.
Intrigued as to whether a certain Miss Grainger will be making an appearance and if she does, it what capacity.
Another cracking good chapter.
Author's Response: I don’t know – unicorn shit just gave more of an ‘airy fairy’ feel to it. Dragon shit would be used if you wanted to tell someone that it was hard luck, like saying tough shit. I think I have a character referring to hippogriff shit somewhere in the story, too. That’s more middle ground than unicorn or dragon shit; more of a multi-purpose thing. Err, that’s probably enough of that discussion. Nope, no Hermione this time round (see my reply to ginnyweasley777 for other notable absentees). I would never trust a girl who doesn’t like a good steak. Mrs Brennus, for instance, tends to like her steaks so rare they’re still mooing.
Reviewer: potterfan2008 Signed Date: 2013.06.09 - 05:09PM Title: Chapter 5 – Misdirection
Yeah!! Malferret makes his first appearance - is it just me or do he and Ron have a lot in common? Except for the whole political ideology thing. Ron is so gross. Malferret is like a toddler having a tantrum. I can't wait to see him get squashed like a bug.
Author's Response: Draco won’t be around for long, I just wanted to show him trying to make some political capital from the killings. It’s just the sort of thing the slimy git would do (and just about any politician now I think about it).
