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Reviewer: Loveobsession Signed Date: 2014.03.02 - 12:21PM Title: It Has Begun

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Have loved every chapter so far and look forward to more!

Author's Response: Thank you! Glad to hear it.



Reviewer: carolyn jinn Signed Date: 2014.02.17 - 09:47PM Title: It Has Begun

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Good chapter. Loved the prank. Looking forward to more.

Author's Response: Thanks. It took me forever to come up with that prank. Glad you liked it. I hope to get the next one up soon.



Reviewer: skiutahnum1 Signed Date: 2014.02.11 - 03:18PM Title: It Has Begun

Well here I thought it was malfoy doing the dirty work but now I have no idea....nice to see Molly jump to the worng ideas again....Ginny is way to good to Harry right now, but soon she will be the force to deal with for Harry.....kutgw

Author's Response: As far as Lucius is concerned, you were supposed to think that. Doesn't absolve Malfoy of ALL the dirty work though. Yes, Molly is quick to react. She's passionate, quick-tempered and a mother who only wants to protect her young. Not sure why you feel Ginny is way too good to Harry...



Reviewer: Dad Signed Date: 2014.02.11 - 02:04PM Title: It Has Begun

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I think I will wait till you actually write who it is that is killing werewolves before jumping to a conclusion.

Author's Response: A wise decision.



Reviewer: Arnel Signed Date: 2014.02.11 - 11:40AM Title: It Has Begun

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The second time through is always better, I think. The first time I read a chapter I'm rushing through to see what happens next and with the second reading, the details start popping out at me.

Because the reader of this story is omnipotent and can see the entire picture, I think you hinted at the beginning of the chapter that the one targeting the werewolves is Lucius Malfoy and then confirmed my suspicions with his comments in the last section.

I like how you've written Dumbledore in this chapter. He's his canon self; a little vague, very wise, quite concerned, and willing to help solve the problem at hand, with no apparent agenda except to keep Harry, Ginny, Remus and his school safe. Well done.

Arthur is another minor character you've given a more detailed role to here; he counterbalances Molly's in-your-face attitude quite well with his quiet, supportive demeanor. His actions show how much he loves his wife and children, especially Ginny.

Finally, I think my most favorite line in this whole chapter is the one shared between Harry and Remus about no matter what their differences were, they'd always love each other. That one went straight to my fluffy spot!

All in all, a great chapter, especially the meowing Sirius! Fred and George got him good!

Author's Response: Perhaps you should go back and read that last bit again. I believe Lucius said they wouldn't be getting their hands dirty. Lucius was actually impressed/gleeful someone out there was killing werewolves, which means HE'S not involved in that. Doesn't mean he won't use the situation though. Dumbledore can be difficult to write sometimes. I don't want to make him too manipulative but I don't want him to come across as too transparent either. I ADORE Arthur. I've always thought him the perfect counterbalance to Molly. He's not your typical redhead. His temper can be slow to ignite but when it does, you'll know it. He's not as impulsive. Awww. I'm glad you liked that scene and that line in particular. It's very true. You liked meowing Sirius, did you? Good. I'm not good with the pranking thing so I'm glad that was well received. Maybe one day Fred and George will perfect that potion and actually turn Sirius into a cat.



Reviewer: ginnyweasley777 Signed Date: 2014.02.11 - 10:39AM Title: It Has Begun

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A bit of mutiny in the ranks, but I'm glad they're sorted now
An interesting chapter, well done :)

Author's Response: If you're referring to the scene between Harry and Remus, it wasn't mutiny. More of a juvenile attempting to assert himself, like Sirius had explained.



Reviewer: I Love Ginerva Signed Date: 2014.02.11 - 03:58AM Title: It Has Begun

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Very good, as always

ILG

Author's Response: Thanks. I appreciate that.



Reviewer: Senator of Sorcery Signed Date: 2014.02.11 - 12:03AM Title: It Has Begun

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Great prank! It brought tears of laughter to my eyes. And as for the ending, whew, creepy! Keep up the great work, and update soon!

Author's Response: Aww, thank you so much! I'm glad you liked the prank. I have such a hard time coming up with those. Yeah, the ending is a bit...foreboding. Can't say how quickly the next one will go up. I've gotten a beta and it's a matter of getting the chapter to her AND me getting finished with the chapter I'm writing, not to mention a good start on the one after that.




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