Reviews For Research and Development
Reviewer: Meiadus Signed Date: 2014.10.05 - 01:55PM Title: Mark Five
Reviewer: hpforever85 Signed Date: 2014.09.04 - 12:41AM Title: Mark Five
Reviewer: hpforever85 Signed Date: 2014.09.04 - 12:24AM Title: Mark One
Reviewer: GHL Signed Date: 2014.09.03 - 09:35PM Title: Mark Five
If you were interested, I have a number of more specific (possibly even helpful) comments/suggestions to elaborate on my earlier review. I was going to send them via a private message rather than clutter up your review space, but some major bugs have emerged in the private message system. If you wanted, I could either dump them here (it's nothing controversial, just a bit verbose), or else find some other mechanism to get them to you.
Reviewer: potternut190 Signed Date: 2014.08.29 - 11:37AM Title: Mark Five
Loved George's timing of the tides! Great chapter!
Reviewer: lalachoa Signed Date: 2014.08.29 - 12:23AM Title: Mark Five
Like the chapter very much.
Reviewer: GHL Signed Date: 2014.08.27 - 01:46PM Title: Mark Five
From a writing perspective,this chapter seems a bit forced and rushed -- certainly compared to your best pieces, but even relative to the first chapter of the story. As one proceeds through the banter at Ginny's flat, the dialogue is fast-paced which I'm sure is an effective simulation of what one would experience as a uninitiated bystander, but as readers we are missing much of the nonverbal communication and pregnant pauses that could make the scene witty (and potentially hilarious). As it is, there are many instances in which it is unclear whether a given character is being funny or dim; whether the response is jocular of mean spirited. The result is a bit disorienting.
Of course most of us would still sacrifice our well-callused scrolling-finger to write as well as this, but I figured you could handle some nit-picking
Author's Response: thanks for the review.
I began seriously working on this chapter while I was writing the Harry/Ginny banter in the Cymru chapter of F&F. I thought that the dialogue was as fast flowing. I also thought that I’d given enough signals as to what everyone’s moods were. I’ll take another look at it.-N-
Reviewer: intikhabalam12 Signed Date: 2014.08.27 - 10:41AM Title: Mark Five
As always, a lots of details and very much fun to read.
Reviewer: skiutahnum1 Signed Date: 2014.08.25 - 08:40PM Title: Mark Five
they are getting closer.....to bad for harry getting an EYE full....oh wellhe only has eyes for harry....kutgw
Reviewer: destin4fl Signed Date: 2014.08.25 - 10:31AM Title: Mark Five
Outstanding! Another excellent transition point in your series, love the slow solution of the characters especially George's.
Reviewer: carolyn jinn Signed Date: 2014.08.25 - 09:52AM Title: Mark Five
Reviewer: potterfan2008 Signed Date: 2014.08.25 - 12:25AM Title: Mark Five
Great wrap up to the story! Loved Ginny's contributions to the mirrorphone - very cute story.
Reviewer: Heather Longbottom Signed Date: 2014.08.24 - 03:49PM Title: Mark Five
Reviewer: SYLVELLE Signed Date: 2014.08.24 - 03:42PM Title: Mark Five
Amazing. Just another wonderful chapter, as we expect from you. I love Ginny and Harry. Never disappointed Neil.
Reviewer: Dianainga Signed Date: 2014.08.24 - 07:45AM Title: Mark Five
N - This is SO ingenious and clever. Love, love, love your stories. Poor George is still so far from a happy ending, isn't he? Of course, I am dying for more chapters on Strangers and your Annie and James story....but would love more stories about George's journey. You have developed him into such an interesting character. Thank you so much!
Reviewer: Arnel Signed Date: 2014.08.24 - 02:12AM Title: Mark Five
I'm a little disappointed that there isn't much closure to this chapter. It feels as if it just stops like a cliffie and leaves the reader expecting more, especially with regards to the next generation Mirrorphone's marketing and reception by the Wizarding public. I realize the story is mostly about his R&D with this new product, but seeing the results of his hard work would have been nice.
Reviewer: ngayonatkailanman Signed Date: 2014.08.24 - 01:07AM Title: Mark Five
Very engaging. Exccellnt owrk as usual. What more can I say? LOL.
Reviewer: ngayonatkailanman Signed Date: 2014.08.24 - 12:29AM Title: Mark One
LOL. You are right. What a diatribe. I cannot believe the amount of trouble this invention caused. Love it.
Reviewer: Marinka Signed Date: 2014.08.23 - 11:28PM Title: Mark Five
Ginny is to the point as ever:)) Which story is next one to updat, FaF?
Reviewer: Mistress_Lrigtar Signed Date: 2014.08.23 - 10:41PM Title: Mark Five
Nice wrap-up and cool how you were able to foreshadow the phones Harry and Ginny are seen using in 'Strangers'. George is brilliant and as one of your other reviewers mentioned, Apple owes Ron and George royalties.