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Reviewer: hpforever85 Signed Date: 2014.09.04 - 12:24AM Title: Mark One

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Reviewer: ngayonatkailanman Signed Date: 2014.08.24 - 12:29AM Title: Mark One

LOL. You are right. What a diatribe. I cannot believe the amount of trouble this invention caused. Love it.

Author's Response: Thanks. Ginny speaks her mind. -N-



Reviewer: ngayonatkailanman Signed Date: 2014.04.07 - 12:31PM Title: Mark One

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LOL. I love the way your Ginny describes a Geek like Hermione. Brilliant.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. Hermione is astonished that anyone would ignore clearly written instructions. -N-



Reviewer: lalachoa Signed Date: 2014.03.21 - 09:19PM Title: Mark One

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Like this back story :)

Author's Response: Thank you. -N-



Reviewer: NoTagBacks Signed Date: 2014.02.24 - 05:10PM Title: Mark One

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Ah, the Ampersand Tales. My favorite so far is Fish & Chips, but I'm looking forward to the upcoming Bangers & Mash. Scratch & Sniff was a bit of a letdown, however.

I wonder what George's previous contact with "that pompous prat Tavistock" was? Perhaps Harpies-themed insult posters?

I'm glad you've kept George's relationship with Angelina held off until years after the battle (and Fred's death). Too early doesn't make sense from a character perspective.

Even though I work with numbers, and am fairly good at remembering them, I've stopped memorizing the mobile phone numbers of my friends and family. It's all stored behind the scenes on my phone and computer. Eventually I'll have people's names stored under pull-down menus like: "Brown haired guys I used to work with but didn't eat lunch with". Technology marches on to reinforce my inability to remember names! :-)

Love the story. Laughed out loud (really) at Hermione's "Read Me First" manual. More, please.

Author's Response:
Fish & Chips sounds like a good title, I may steal it. You're right about Scratch & Sniff, it was a silly idea. :-D

I think that George was reacting because he'd been told about the "Hellions" episode. I may be wrong.

(ADVERTISEMENT:) The George/Angelina relationship is chronicled in: Tales of the Battle (Chapter 18), Chaser, April Fool, and Angelina. Available at fanfiction.net and several other websites at a very competitive price (free).

My mother still remembers phone numbers (even mobile ones) because she can't master the technology. I have forgotten almost every number I knew.

More Soon.

-N-



Reviewer: potterfan2008 Signed Date: 2014.02.19 - 03:16PM Title: Mark One

Rereading it I think this is not quite right - ‘He reminded her that the last time he’d been threatened him with legal action'
I got the gist of what you meant, but its not worded quite right.

Author's Response: Thanks, I've fixed it. -N-



Reviewer: potterfan2008 Signed Date: 2014.02.19 - 03:13PM Title: Mark One

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Cute story. I like that Ginny was more knowledgeable about Muggle technology and able to point out the flaws in the product. It is entirely like Hermione to simply recreate her phone and create an unreadable instruction book.

Author's Response: Thanks.
I know exactly how the Mirrorphones work, and what they can (and cant) do when compared to a smartphone. This challenge gave me a chance to explain. Once Hermione's "innovations" have been removed.
-N-



Reviewer: intikhabalam12 Signed Date: 2014.02.18 - 01:31PM Title: Mark One

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Nice one...
I had seen the mentioned story in your A/N in fanfiction.net recommended stories. First I got the impression that you are trying JKR's tactics and submit a story using different name. As I begin reading it, I got from the first few lines that it was the effort (too big word for that) of a new comer. I just close the window without posting any review because normally I am not the abusive type (and you can say it was not my story which was copied :)) but I am happy that the situation is resolved and next time he came up with a story of his own ideas, and if he doesn't have the talent for that like ME then enjoy and appreciate the original effort of the others. its more simple than what he has done.

As For the story, it is superb but Mark one, really sounds like a model for car/jet.... Mark 3000 or something

Author's Response: Thanks for the review.
Strangers at Ravenshield wasn't well written, but it's gone, and although the author page still exists, there are no stories there. I'd have liked to have read chapter 2, but I think that must have been the trigger for ffn to take action. I'm happy that the situation was resolved.
The use of Mark as a model number seems to date back to the fifteenth century, although chapter two is (at the moment) going to be called "Mark Three". I wonder what happened to the Mark Two Mirrorphone.
-N-



Reviewer: Spenser Hemmingway Signed Date: 2014.02.17 - 10:32AM Title: Mark One

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This was great. You always paint us a nice picture of the scene we're entering, and that builds the story so well. The dialogue was also especially effective. Poor Ginny's reaction to the cell phone...thingy was classic. You've inspired me to go into the garage to retrieve the old rotory dial telephone I have stored there. My kids will love it. I'm looking forward to the next chapter. Thanks--Eric B.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. It's many years since I visited Beaumaris and it's glorious castle, so I had to do some research. This was Ginny at her most annoying, but Harry will be back to calm her down in the next chapter. It's amazing the speed at which telephone technoligy has changed. In the 1990's the Dursleys had a single land-line telephone in the hall, as did most Brits. -N-



Reviewer: vintya Signed Date: 2014.02.15 - 10:41PM Title: Mark One

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I love it how you incorporate SIYE challenges into your main storyline. It gives them a different dimension. Really hope its multi-chaptered story.

Author's Response: Thank you.
I think that this will be a three chapter novella-length story.
-N-



Reviewer: Marinka Signed Date: 2014.02.15 - 08:18PM Title: Mark One

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Perfect! just everything about the dialogue was interesting to read, from Ron's reactions to ideas on original mirrorphone. I never think about Hermione as creative person, tenacious -yes, but not creative:)) so I find it very funny how she railroaded George and the result of it.
Also absolutely love your Ginny, she is great with details and honest about it.

Author's Response: Thank you.
I think that you're right. Hermione is extremely clever and quick thinking, and she has difficulty coping with imaginative and creative people (like Luna).
Ginny certainly speaks her mind.
-N-



Reviewer: skiutahnum1 Signed Date: 2014.02.15 - 05:00PM Title: Mark One

Everybody knows not to agree with hermione when it comes to reading a book. Poor George .......kutgw

Author's Response: It's that time of year, for George. This chapter is set in April, just after his (but not Fred's) birthday and just before the anniversary of The Battle. -N-



Reviewer: lunagranger Signed Date: 2014.02.15 - 04:59PM Title: Mark One

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You really are awesome. This little siblings talk is perfect. The opinions of Ginny, their observations about Ron and Hermione. That's so good to read someone writing about those lovely characters with such a good grasp of them.

Author's Response: Thank you so much. George and Ginny just seemed to spark off each other as I wrote this chapter. George is, I think, a little frightened of Hermione. -N-



Reviewer: potternut190 Signed Date: 2014.02.15 - 03:34AM Title: Mark One

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I enjoyed the author's note almost as much as the story.

Reads like an early iPhone-esque design meeting! I doubt Ron looked up the tides either.

Was there a hint of JKR's interview with Ms Watson in there ;-)

Great stuff--looking forward to whatever story you update next.

Author's Response:
Thanks, I needed to sound off, sorry.

It was meant to. Chekhov's gun! :-D

Only a little. I've always (I think) written Ron and Hermione's relationship as being more spiky that Harry and Ginny's. It took minutes for Harry and Ginny to reach an understanding at the end of Hunters and Prey. Ron and Hermione are still working on it months later.

Front runners are: James and Me, Strangers, or Friends and Foes. Aurors and Schoolgirls and Epithalamium are currently lagging behind.

-N-



Reviewer: rbrt_emmer Signed Date: 2014.02.15 - 12:43AM Title: Mark One

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Oh, and I just realized I forgot to rate the story with that last review, so here we are.

Author's Response: Thank you. -N-



Reviewer: rbrt_emmer Signed Date: 2014.02.15 - 12:42AM Title: Mark One

Wow. Plagiarizing the maestro takes cojones, I'll say that much.

I never cease to love your GInny, or really any of your versions of these characters. I look forward to seeing how the rest of this story plays out.

Oh, and as I've never written fanfiction I'm sure this is a dumb question, but couldn't you, in fact, edit the titles of your "and" stories and ampersand them up?

Author's Response:
Cojones? I'm not sure. I got the impression that the author was a naive pre-teen, and I tried messaging him/her as I didn't want to drop a young kid in it. That was my Tuesday reaction. I told him/her that I'd wait a few days. I thought that the (then six) negative reviews (all accusing plagiarism) would be enough. One reviewer didn't wait that long, but now I think I know why. Yesterday I Googled the author, and discovered that, despite the accusations of plagiarism, chapter two had been uploaded less than two days later; after I'd sent my messages. I think the person who reported it (reviewer ten) reacted to the second chapter. I would have done the same.

I'm very fond of my Ginny, too. This is turning into a story about Harry/Ginny, and George.

Yes I can change the titles from "and" to "&" and I might just do that. :-D

-N-



Reviewer: Wolfs_Scream Signed Date: 2014.02.14 - 10:03PM Title: Mark One

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Y'know, if you're going to be responding to plagiarism by writing & publishing more.... :-)

Seriously, though -- that was a fun read so far.

Author's Response: To be honest, even if I hadn't spent hours on Tuesday trying to figure out what to do, I probably still wouldn't have finished this story. But I might have finished the second chapter. -N-



Reviewer: ngayonatkailanman Signed Date: 2014.02.14 - 08:21PM Title: Mark One

LOL. This is too complicated. You crack me up!

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I try. -N-



Reviewer: Birlan Signed Date: 2014.02.14 - 07:57PM Title: Mark One

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Nice beginning. It seems like you do a great job on capturing the interaction of the characters--again. Ginny spotting the reasons for the flaws in the phone and George being railroaded by Ron and Hermione seems very real. I look forward to reading more.

Sorry to hear about the plagiarization on FFN but glad to hear it ended promptly. I do like the idea of the Ampersand Tales. Since there could have been but are not Ampersands in the titles, maybe the overarching title should be:

"Could Have Been but Are Not Ampersand Tales":

I am not sure its quite as catchy but points for accuracy, I suppose. Thanks and I look forward to reading more about the development of the phone that we will eventually see James Sirius use when blowing off Rose to spend time with Lizzie. I mean Annie.

Author's Response:
Thanks for the review.

This wasn't originally intended to be a George's eye view of Harry and Ginny (and the rest of the world). I rarely use George's perspective, but I think that the rest of the story will stick with him.

I wasn't certain what to do about the plagiarism, and I'm really glad that, in the end, I didn't have to do anything.

"Could Have Been but Are Not Ampersand Tales" :-D I think we share the same sense of humour. I honestly hadn't realised that my novel-length post "Grave Days and pre-marriage" stories are all titles "something and something".

Chapter 2 is a mere 500 words at the moment, and as I'm cloe to finishing other stuff, I may delay working on Chapter 2.

-N-




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