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Reviewer: Gin110881 Signed Date: 2015.02.03 - 04:28AM Title: Break-in and Breakout
Finally I understood the idea behind the mode of action of the horcrux traps. It always sounded helpfull to have all the features for activation/deactivation but seeing it in action now it really makes sense :-)
Great idea to use the confundus charm to get such a frightening setting, Toms last evil action.
I don't mean to be fussy, but Ginnys patronus is a panther, not a lioness (refer to TC, chapter 6).
Consequently, Harry's "own matching feline" patronus is a lioness (refer to TC, chapter 23).
cu/
Martin
Author's Response:
Brilliant catch on the patronuses -- thanks!
And yes, this is almost as much a mental climax as it is a showdown of power. H&G are full of tricks, but old Riddle is not devoid of them either! It was definitely fun to write.
Reviewer: dannbard Signed Date: 2014.08.21 - 10:58AM Title: Break-in and Breakout
Yikes! Lots of foreboding leading up to one broken window!
Can't believe the next chapter hasn't cleared yet!
Author's Response:
Yes, perhaps some deconstructionist will tell me some day why I keep writing about doors and windows. Maybe I was a building contractor in a previous life? Anyway, glad you enjoyed!
Not sure when the next chapter will clear, but I'm doing some final fiddling with the final one so that you don't have too long to wait for the final wrap-up.
Thanks for the review Dann!
Reviewer: ebdenis Signed Date: 2014.08.14 - 08:51AM Title: Break-in and Breakout
Damn!
Author's Response: I always know I've done something when I get a one word review.
Hopefully that something was good :)
Reviewer: Lokken Signed Date: 2014.08.14 - 12:19AM Title: Break-in and Breakout
Mother of all cliffhangers ... !
Author's Response: 'Tis true! To be honest, no matter where I chose the chapter boundary I was going to have to leave you in the lurch one way or another so I figured I might was well do it with flair :)
Thanks for the review Lokken!
Reviewer: SYLVELLE Signed Date: 2014.08.13 - 04:12PM Title: Break-in and Breakout
Who is it? Should we be able to guess? Arrrgh... Next please
Tricia
Author's Response: Considering I have the smartest, most perceptive reviewers on the site I would say that, yes, you would probably be able to guess. But if you do guess, please send a private note as I still hope to pull wool over a few people's eyes :)
I hope to post again no later than Sunday (possibly earlier).
Thanks for the review Tricia!
Reviewer: Dad Signed Date: 2014.08.13 - 11:52AM Title: Break-in and Breakout
Brilliant. I am now on the edge of my seat.
Author's Response: Wonderful! With any luck I will find the time (sooner rather than later) to find a more comfortable cushion for you. Thanks Dad!
Reviewer: mwinter Signed Date: 2014.08.13 - 10:09AM Title: Break-in and Breakout
Awaiting more.
Author's Response: Great! Chapter 23 had a lot of revising left to be done, but it's easier to find time when I'm not driving endlessly and/or sitting in airport lounges. Hoping for something this weekend.
Reviewer: lunagranger Signed Date: 2014.08.13 - 02:23AM Title: Break-in and Breakout
I usually am not a big fan of action scenes in books, because they are too confusing. But you really did it very well, very graphic. I loved it. Brilliant,
Author's Response: Super! Very gratifying to hear that it worked for you! You've hit the crux of the matter when it comes to writing -- 'confusion' was the principal monster that I was doing battle with during all those revisions. One of the most jarring experiences for a reader is when he or she is reading along and suddenly has a 'Whoa! How did we get here?' moment. Hopefully I've managed to eradicate all of those pitfalls from my original draft.
