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Reviewer: druggist Signed Date: 2015.01.13 - 02:22PM Title: Instinct
Nice story!
I liked the take on Jason Bourne in this chapter -- I'm surprised no one mentioned that yet...
This is well written. Grammar and spelling errors are my pet peeves, and thankfully are few and far between.
Looking forward to the next update...keep it up!
Jason
Reviewer: SYLVELLE Signed Date: 2014.07.17 - 10:37PM Title: Instinct
All caught up again. The more I read the more I enjoy. I like your Harry's personality. And I love that Sirius came back. He is a favorite. I also like the by-play with Harry and Ginny, maybe Ginny could come along for a training with Ron and Hermione if necessary. Could be fun.
Can't wait for more.
Tricia
Author's Response: Thanks for the padded stats with the repeat review!
Reviewer: SYLVELLE Signed Date: 2014.07.17 - 06:35PM Title: Instinct
All caught up again. The more I read the more I enjoy. I like your Harry's personality. And I love that Sirius came back. He is a favorite. I also like the by-play with Harry and Ginny, maybe Ginny could come along for a training with Ron and Hermione if necessary. Could be fun.
Can't wait for more.
Tricia
Author's Response: I'm VERY happy you enjoy the Harry-Ginny banter. It's been one of my favorite parts of writing this, being able to take my time with their relationship and have it grow gradually. And don't you worry, Ginny won't be content with just physical workouts for long.
Reviewer: mdauben Signed Date: 2014.07.04 - 05:04AM Title: Instinct
Some interesting training this chapter. I'm enjoying the back and forth between Harry and Ginny, too.
Author's Response: I'm glad you found the training interesting. I'm trying to paint a picture of a complete and immersive training, such that Harry is growing powerful and wise enough that defeating Voldemort is believable instead of lucky. We will begin to phase away from detailing the training, but I wanted it early on, so his growth is believable. And I am so glad you like the Harry and Ginny moments. They've been a joy to write.
Reviewer: carolyn jinn Signed Date: 2014.07.04 - 03:03AM Title: Instinct
Great chapter
The main thing I see in this chapter is...Harry and Ginny are discussing the 'tension' between Ron and Hermione BUT not the ' tension' that is growing ( very quickly) between themselves. And they don't realise it.
Looking forward to the next chapter.
Author's Response: I'm so glad you get that strong vibe. I really have worked hard to develop a fun relationship between Harry and Ginny. If we are to believe these two are perfect for each other (which I do) then it makes sense this chemistry and tension would arise quickly. I tried to approach the "getting together" part of two very attracted people slowly, however, even if at times we would want to shout at them to just get together already. Hopefully I've made it believable, and not just delaying for delaying's sake.
Reviewer: skiutahnum1 Signed Date: 2014.07.03 - 05:42PM Title: Instinct
Ah would you please do us all a favor and just get the four to the make out part so the tension can leave the room for a few hours....kutgw
Author's Response: But the tension is what makes it so fun! We can't have it ending so soon! Don't worry, you've seen nothing, yet.
