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Reviewer: MollyandArthur Signed Date: 2015.12.06 - 05:45PM Title: Chapter 11 - Painting in the Dark

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Glad to see a bit of levity at the end. The duel is an interesting idea. I have wondered about dueling laws in wizarding England ever since the idea was introduced in second year.

Author's Response: Torturing Hufflepuffs is always a good idea in my book. (ex) Mrs Brennus was sorted into Hufflepuff, you know.



Reviewer: TomBombadil Signed Date: 2014.10.25 - 07:03PM Title: Chapter 11 - Painting in the Dark

Blasted auto-correct! Were, not we're.

Author's Response: And again!



Reviewer: TomBombadil Signed Date: 2014.10.25 - 11:37AM Title: Chapter 11 - Painting in the Dark

Blasted auto-correct! Were, not we're.

Author's Response: Excellent - that gets my review count up.



Reviewer: TomBombadil Signed Date: 2014.10.24 - 05:43PM Title: Chapter 11 - Painting in the Dark

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Arousing and simultaneously terrifying! Snark! I have to admit you have a way of creating extremely attractive female characters ... except for those who are truly reprehensible! I guess Harry deserves to run for his life, even if he did tell Ginevra her ... assets ... We're magnificent! Can't wait to see Pansy and Draco meet their well-deserved demises! I'll also pitch in compliments about your presentation of Dumbledore! AU Dumbledore is so frequently a flat, single-dimensional character, and you render a deeper, more complex puppet master. Great job, and I will promise to write more frequent, doting, respectful reviews if you pick up the pace of posting!!

Author's Response: Pick up the pace? I'm already posting once or twice a week! What do you people want from me - blood? Look at my poor, worn-out fingers; aching from all the typing I'm doing. Oh, poor me!

Ahem. Enough self-pity. I did start this story with the intention of making Dumbledore a far more likeable character then I normally portray him, but he has sunk down into a more manipulative figure then I originally planned. I'm not sure what your assessment of how I portray females says about me, but I'm guessing it's not good!



Reviewer: GHL Signed Date: 2014.10.24 - 02:18PM Title: Chapter 11 - Painting in the Dark

Do you realize that I noticed your beautiful line break (with all due contrition and edification), but completely missed the typo? You could easily have swaggered away with blithe superiority... but now I guess we all know your true humble self.

Author's Response: See? Honesty never pays...



Reviewer: SYLVELLE Signed Date: 2014.10.24 - 01:27PM Title: Chapter 11 - Painting in the Dark

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Oh I like it. Lots of information, poor Sirius. Boy you have sure turned everyone into bad guys. Interesting.
Tricia

Author's Response: I haven't turned everyone into bad guys: see that third year Ravenclaw girl on the left? She's alright.



Reviewer: potterfan2008 Signed Date: 2014.10.22 - 09:23AM Title: Chapter 11 - Painting in the Dark

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Great chapter! I loved the scene with Michelle.

Author's Response: She's a little cutie, isn't she?



Reviewer: carolyn jinn Signed Date: 2014.10.21 - 09:04AM Title: Chapter 11 - Painting in the Dark

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You have followed up with another great chapter.

So, we have finally found out the whereabouts of the 'missing knickers'. And what a way to have them resurface. Brilliant.

The banter between Harry and Ginevra is so great to read. The innuendo that they have between eachother is fairly thick at times. But I love the part where Ginevra defends herself to Sprout by offering to take a magical vow about her virtue.

I love how Ginevra and Michelle got on so well. I loved their little passage of conversation.

I hope we get to read the results of the end race. Ginevra would have to win. If only because, I think, Harry would like to see what she would do.

Looking forward to the next chapter.

Author's Response: Sadly, we will never find out if the three second head start was enough to save Harry, but I probably doubt it. Mess with Ginevra and you're taking your life in your hands...



Reviewer: Mistress of Potions Signed Date: 2014.10.21 - 03:10AM Title: Chapter 11 - Painting in the Dark

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Whoo hoo! Thank you for posting another chapter, it made my vacation just that much nicer.

Author's Response: Oh, go anywhere nice? I've just come back from visiting some friends in Devon and it was so windy I nearly got blown into the sea.



Reviewer: Kanour Signed Date: 2014.10.21 - 01:55AM Title: Chapter 11 - Painting in the Dark

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Conversations between H/G are getiing better and better (and more entertaining). I hope there will be enough time for it in the next chapters which probably will be darker and not so calm.
I am suprised she had managed to resist him so far. Maybe we have to wait until the next trip to the forest :D

I also don't understand Dumbledore. He should like violence between Slytherins and the rest of the school.
Another great chapter. Thanks :)

Author's Response: See my response to The Seeker for an explanation of Dumbledore's thinking.



Reviewer: skiutahnum1 Signed Date: 2014.10.20 - 05:20PM Title: Chapter 11 - Painting in the Dark

Oh boy Harry is really going to go thought it....maybe it s about time the bones crew figure out that quite acceptance is the best policy.....kutgw

Author's Response: I wouldn't bet on it. Susan B and her lackeys will feature quite a bit in the next few chapters.



Reviewer: Enygma1920 Signed Date: 2014.10.20 - 03:21PM Title: Chapter 11 - Painting in the Dark

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Reviewer: GHL Signed Date: 2014.10.20 - 02:19PM Title: Chapter 11 - Painting in the Dark

Note to self-talking reviewer-numbskull: next time only use a single line break...

Author's Response: Not to rub it in, or anything, but I hope you notice the single line break a put in the last response... ;-)

Author's Response: Of course, I should have put 'line break I put in'... that will teach me for getting cocky!



Reviewer: GHL Signed Date: 2014.10.20 - 02:16PM Title: Chapter 11 - Painting in the Dark

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Okay, let's see if I remember how many line break controls to insert in this text so my comments don't look so idiotic this time. Let's try two between every mini-paragraph...



Sorry, am I talking to myself again? That's a bad sign, no?



Actually, I think it's a sign that I've read another of your chapters and have once again lost an alarming number of brain cells due to utter stupefaction. Another serving of seasoned story-telling, grilled to perfection!



I skimmed through the comments, and I want to second ginnyweasley777's motion that Dumbledore is a superb scumbag! He is much more nimble that most AU Dumbledores and is barely half a pace behind your unflappable Mr. Potter at every step. One only wonders if and when he is going to finally find a way to trip things up.



The Seeker raised an interesting question about the Headmaster; I suspect the answer in the long run will prove equally interesting. Personally, (and acknowledging an infinite range of personal preferences) I don't agree with characterizing the story as 'slow moving'. I prefer, 'suspenseful'. My favourite stories are those that build ominously.



Now for my school-marm moment:

* "Oh, and now I’ve gone and messed up her count! She probably does know" -- I believe you wanted a negation here.



Great work -- godspeed ye!

Author's Response: Ooh... all those lovely big spaces! I feel quite dizzy just looking at them. I agree with your reading of a lot of AU Dumbledores. For instance, I've lost count of the number of stories where, when Harry tells him not to use his first name and he keeps doing it. This is one of the greatest wizards in the world and highly involved in politics: he should be able to handle a schoolboy. Hopefully my answer to The Seeker will explain where I'm coming from, but basically it's all about image. He might be happy to foster ill-feeling among the houses but can't be seen to be doing it, and has to be shown to try and head off violence publicly.

Thanks for the usual correction. I will amend it immediately



Reviewer: Aurorofthelight Signed Date: 2014.10.20 - 02:01PM Title: Chapter 11 - Painting in the Dark

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Great Merlin's saggy grey undergarments! The Machiavelli of marvelously merry, mind boggling
mysteries has merited us with another montage of literary brilliance! And in honor of Sven Hassel or Hazel, the pen names of Borge Willy Redsted Pedersen: Kunne ikke modstÃ¥ hebraisk, siden du Ã¥bnede døren, kammerat! (Danish translation: Couldn't resist the Hebrew since you opened the door, mate!) Incidentally, I happen to be a WWII buff! I've driven an Austin Healy before but not an Allegro! Wonder if it was a chick magnet like the 67 Impala convertible, black with white ragtop, that I had in high school!? Oh the memories of that back seat! Wow! No wonder Harry has a burr up his butt toward Lupin and Tonks! I take it that you were leaving it up to our imaginations if Harry got a little hands-on time with that great pair of ****s, eh? Nice touch with Pansy's knickers - definitely better than the flagpole! Draco's chances of winning against Harry and Ginny are about as good as his chances of winning the Nobel Peace Prize! Would love to know what Ginny did to Harry when she caught him (yes, my money's on the fiery redhead!) Oh, and since my favorite Eastern European language is Polish, Podstępny mały cliffhanger tam, kolego! Czekamy na następną! (Translation: Sneaky little cliffhanger there, mate! Looking forward to the next one!) :D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D

Author's Response: Oh, I see - now you're doing two different languages per review, are you? I'm looking forward to seeing something done in runes next time, please. Or Martian. Oh, the Allegro would have been a superb chick magnet... if it had been running most of the time. That classy beige colour would have driven the girls wild.



Reviewer: The Seeker Signed Date: 2014.10.20 - 01:24PM Title: Chapter 11 - Painting in the Dark

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Great line when Ginevra said Hannah's talents were so lacking she'd probably become a barmaid. Very funny interpolation of canon.

Well you know my feelings about Sprout, so no need to restate them. Your Dumbledore is curuious, because I would have thought he would welcome Harry and Ginny's duel with Ernie and Hannah as a way to further seperate Slythein from the other three Houses. Obviously, he wouldn't state that, but the duel would be an excellent way to reinforce what he's been trying to do and to have it play out in front of the entire school would be ideal.

Other than that, the speed of your updating somewhat offsets the slow moving nature of this story so far. The quality of your writing also makes the pace more tolerable. - The Seeker

Author's Response: Glad you liked that line about Hannah - I was quite proud of it! Dumbledore has to tread a fine line, here. While he's been essentially pitting the other three houses against Slytherin, he can't be actively seen to be doing it. To the Gryffindors, Hufflepuffs and Ravenclaws, he has to be seen to be this magnanimous old man, who they can trust to lead them against the forces of darkness. Up to this point, most of the Slytherin's excesses have been blamed on Snape's blatant favouritism and willingness to look the other way. With Snape gone, the school will be looking for the Headmaster to protect the poor, innocent Hufflepuffs from the big, bad Harry Potter, hence why he tried to talk Harry out of the duel.



Reviewer: hot48cricket Signed Date: 2014.10.20 - 01:18PM Title: Chapter 11 - Painting in the Dark

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Are we going to get to hear about Snape's encounter with Sirius????

Write faster!!! This is a great story!!!

Author's Response: Hey, it's all already written! I'm just desperately dragging this out as I am a review whore. As GHL has discovered, however, I am open to bribery...



Reviewer: zeta_one Signed Date: 2014.10.20 - 11:43AM Title: Chapter 11 - Painting in the Dark

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If you had not have your author's notes in the front I would think you story was getting fluffy. However, I can see the dark clouds approaching and so enjoy waiting for the storm to get here.

Thanks for sharing.

Author's Response: Actually, I've just been giving chapter 12 a last once-over before sending it off to Arnel, and I have to admit that it's not exactly dark, either, apart from the duel. That is definitely the last lighter one, though. I have a nice character death in chapter 13, I promise...



Reviewer: ginnyweasley777 Signed Date: 2014.10.20 - 10:37AM Title: Chapter 11 - Painting in the Dark

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You know what, I actually love your Dumbledore because he's such a bastard and it's so fun to bash him, does that make me wicked...

You make a really good point about how "secure" the castle is though - portkey's were made in the books loads of times

I loved the conversation between Harry, Ginny and Michelle :) and I can't wait to see Harry and Ginny wipe the floor with Ernie and Hannah, or will they have done a runner before then?

Author's Response: Enjoying bashing Dumbledore doesn't make you wicked, but reading anything I've written probably does.




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