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Reviews For Raising Albus

Reviewer: skiutahnum1 Signed Date: 2015.06.11 - 01:42PM Title: CH 11 Harry’s New Elves

Harry has his hands fun, but in a good way...albus is growing up understanding that he screwed up and excepts it is a big step....kutgw

Author's Response: Harry does have his hands full with Albus. The challenges are going to continue. Thank you for the review. Jet



Reviewer: carolyn jinn Signed Date: 2015.06.10 - 10:00PM Title: CH 11 Harry’s New Elves

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This was a good chapter.
The only thing that I would be a bit weary of would be the language that Albus and Rose use at the end of the chapter. They are only 4or 5 and you have them talking as though they were a lot older than that.
Looking forward to the next chapter.

Author's Response: I do have a hard time making their language age appropriate. They are very bright, and would talk more like an adult than a normal child, but I agree with your comment. Thank you for the review. Jet




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