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Reviewer: alterdream Signed Date: 2016.03.27 - 10:32AM Title: Wealth of Nations Part II

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A great chapter again. Or perhaps I should say a great second half to an awesome chapter. I loved your explanation of the vault door security :D

Author's Response: Awesome, thanks. Rowling never explained much about goblin magic, so that gave me a lot of leeway.



Reviewer: potternut190 Signed Date: 2016.03.11 - 01:10AM Title: Wealth of Nations Part II

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Another excellent chapter! What great action cutting down those Death Eaters. The open quote was great too. A little Doctor Who inspired maybe? And with regard to the author's note, you do an excellent job balancing character and plot for which this medium is well suited. An editor in the publishing world is going to be concerned about how many pages will need to be printed as a more pressing matter than whether or not you are boring the reader.

Author's Response: "A little Doctor Who inspired maybe?" I'm not familiar with Doctor Who, I'm afraid. I've never watched any of its varied incarnations. And I'm glad you find the balance of the story to be suitable. It's already several magnitudes longer than I had intended when I started it, but when I write stories they either seem to end up being short little nothings or much larger than envisioned.



Reviewer: MollyandArthur Signed Date: 2016.03.10 - 05:20PM Title: Wealth of Nations Part II

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Great chapter. Your description of the bank robbery at Gringotts was truly excellent. I could see the whole event happening because of your descriptive writing. I am eager to read your next chapter.

Author's Response: Thanks, glad you liked it. The next chapter will wrap up the Wealth of Nations arc.



Reviewer: Dad Signed Date: 2016.03.10 - 11:38AM Title: Wealth of Nations Part II

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Edge of the seat stuff. Too much history stops the story unfolding (or leads to a very long story).

Author's Response: Well, it's already a very long story. I just prefer not to clog it up with too much Kharadjai information. I prefer clogs of character development.




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