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Reviewer: RighT3rantZ Signed Date: 2016.01.13 - 04:49PM Title: Chapter 13 - A Thousand Stars
Nude flying sex? Nice! It balanced the Slytherin Rapists' Bonfire lower Body Burn Ritual. Hermione seems to be holding a lot of anger at times, I hope she continues lashing out at the enemies...NOT her close associates.
You have given us your prototypical politicking pasting of the Minister, which Is always enjoy able. It allows the opportunity for us to observe the browbeating you give to the opposite side of your protagonist's(') point of view. Still undefeated you are when writing out your arguments. I hedge to bet your record vs Mrs (-ex)Brennus was not quite as 8utstanding:-D.
Speaking of which, I don't mean to be a goat, but if reading my reviews allows for logical(or satirical) discourse between you and the the lovely if ex MrS Brennus I think there is hope still you are a dirty liar about the divorce. Either that or you have an 0dd relationship with her. "We are divorced but reviews of my Fanfics still cause us to converse." I am not judging, most relationships have interesting dynamics. If she stayed for "a few drinks ;)" when you discussed the review AII the better. Give her my best, she is anything but a plain ex-wife.
Author's Response:
Why are you so interested in my personal life? Yeah, she might be my ex-wife but she's still my best friend, and I frequently run story ideas past her. In fact, (ex-)Mrs Brennus has been a huge help with the story I intend to post after 'Abraxas' (provisionally titled 'Gothic' if you're interested).
A lot of people seem quite intrigued by 'on the edge' Hermione, probably as she's normally portrayed as the calm, logic one of the group. She's always struck me as a empathic soul, and I could just imagine her becoming extremely upset when confronted by the true horrors of war. Sadly, things won't get better for her for a while.
Well, wasn't that a serious response. I really should have thrown a few knob jokes in there to lighten the tone, shouldn't I?
Reviewer: carolyn jinn Signed Date: 2016.01.11 - 09:49PM Title: Chapter 13 - A Thousand Stars
Wow, what a way to try to forget horrible memories.
I wonder if Scrimgeour will act the way Harry has suggested or end up backing down!
Author's Response: Good work on Ginny's part, I feel. :-)
Reviewer: Phil42 Signed Date: 2016.01.08 - 10:54AM Title: Chapter 13 - A Thousand Stars
Wow, what a chapter! Too bad the rating stops at 10.
That was an interesting way to deal with the Slytherins. One could argue that they hadn't done much yet (apart from stunning Demelza). But then, attack is the best defence. Maybe they should turn this into the routine treatment for uppity Slytherins. Is there a similar spell for females?
I also liked how Harry put Scrimgeour in his place, if you can call it that. I wonder if the 'Violent Sextett' will 'officially' have a more active part in the war from now on. Here's me hoping to see Malfoy Manor burn (again).
The flying scene was great too. Some of the reviews suggest that the reviewers haven't read "The Hitch Hiker's Guide to the Galaxy". But I guess you have.
Please keep those chapters coming!
Author's Response: I think it's safe to say the Slytherin boys had the intent to do more, so the attack was justified, I feel. Ah, I confess I am a big Hitch Hiker fan. Shame on Douglas Adams for getting rid of Fenchurch like that!
Reviewer: Gin110881 Signed Date: 2016.01.08 - 02:29AM Title: Chapter 13 - A Thousand Stars
Not that the boys didn't deserve it. However, I wonder if this kind of vigilante justice remains unnoticed. Ron ignores his food? It is certainly a sign that they really must have experienced something terrible.
Is it fate that Old Evil Heart's former Horcrux takes part in the planning of the campaign against him?
And yes, Ginny. Urgent needs often bring forth new ideas. She has proven it again.
Great chapter! Thanks a million.
Author's Response: Ron stuffing himself all the time has become such a fan fic cliché that I felt compelled to use it to stress the seriousness of the situation. Amazingly, he'll bit off his food again later in the story. I mean, just how bad could things get?
Reviewer: alterdream Signed Date: 2016.01.07 - 10:19PM Title: Chapter 13 - A Thousand Stars
Well that was some mating scene! :D I see you're setting things up for confrontations later... which is a good thing after a whole chapter without any blood. It was good payback on the evil Slytherins but it's a shame they won't remember where it came from.
Author's Response: Yes, but it was necessary, after all, what Hermione did was probably not strictly legal, was it? More violence to come soon!
Reviewer: Aurorofthelight Signed Date: 2016.01.07 - 09:46PM Title: Chapter 13 - A Thousand Stars
Well cover me with chocolate and whipped creme topped with a cherry and call me a sundae! The A.A. Milne of mind blowing, masterfully molded manuscripts has merited us with more literary brilliance! Important lesson to Slytherin scums: not only do you not tick off the fiery redhead but POing the bushy haired smartest witch of her age isn't a good idea, either! What a masterful bit of revenge! That is about as cold and hard as you can get! Oh wait, maybe not hard! ;) Dumbledore can be a sneaky old fart when he wants to be! Nice Do Si Do Harry pulled on the minister! What was it with you in this chapter with fingers being pulled out of certain places(or in Higgs case, a pinkie)? Nice bit of fireworks there at the end with Harry and Ginny -- always pushing that R rating, to the breaking point, aren't you? Waiting with baited breath(and a Baileys Irish Cream cappuccino) for the next one! :D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D
Author's Response: A.A. Milne? Oh, Pooh!
Reviewer: MollyandArthur Signed Date: 2016.01.07 - 08:30PM Title: Chapter 13 - A Thousand Stars
A good idea for how to deal with the Slytherin boys. I am impressed by Hermione in this chapter, though it is sad that she had to reach this point. The wizarding world needs a serious wake up call in basic morality and decency, and she is quite correct that if they cannot reach this point any other way, it must be forced upon them. It might be a good idea for Harry to try to talk to Ron about what happened in Hogsmead. I am glad that Harry is being practical enough to realize that he needs to work with the Ministry to accomplish the most good quickly, or at least work with them for now. Brilliant idea of Ginny to find a way to make Samhain a positive experience for Harry. Great naughty scene.
Author's Response: I think you can totally sympathise from Hermione's POV. The Magical world has been a major disappointment to her, but the Muggle world probably already feels strange to her. She's stuck between a rock and a hard place.
Reviewer: mdauben Signed Date: 2016.01.07 - 03:58PM Title: Chapter 13 - A Thousand Stars
Another great chapter! Loved the way the group delt with the Slyterine's. Hermione is quite scarey in this story! I wonder if we are going to find out more about what she and Ron saw in Hogsmead? Harry's deal with Scrimgore seems very much in character for the new, composite Harry, and that final scene over the lake has to be the wildest wizarding sex, ever! As always I'll be looking forward to your next update
Author's Response: Hermione is definitely having a rough time of it in this story, and I feel that experiences such as she's encountered would change her. Sadly, she's going to have more problems before long.
Reviewer: HP18 Signed Date: 2016.01.07 - 12:52PM Title: Chapter 13 - A Thousand Stars
Absolutely loved this. The punishment for those animals was exactly what they deserved. I hope Ron and Hermione will be alright. I hope we find out what happened with Malfoy and Greengrass
Author's Response: It's going to get worse for Hermione before it gets better, I'm afraid, and she's going to get a lot of grief from an unexpected source. We will see Astoria again, too.
Reviewer: Inquisitor Signed Date: 2016.01.07 - 09:49AM Title: Chapter 13 - A Thousand Stars
Srimgeour is on board now, or at least appears to. But he might still not survive the process though.
The flying sex is brilliant, and I've never read such idea anywhere.
Draco and his goons are awfully quiet. It's halloween, and we still haven't seen them in action? I bet he's up to something desperate.
Author's Response: Draco is still plotting and planning - he'll make his move soon. I confess I have read a number of flying sex scenes, but normally the couple involved are mounted on a broom (or, in one story, a magic carpet). I obviously read a lot more smut than you. :-)
Reviewer: BigFatMaybe Signed Date: 2016.01.06 - 03:41PM Title: Chapter 13 - A Thousand Stars
I accidentally pressed f5 so my very long review has gone now, this one might not be so long because I'm very annoyed now :(.
Anyway, I this is my first review for your story. I would have made more, had I not lost access to my old account, and it's just such a hassle to make a new one. Sorry! Now onto the real stuff:
This chapter was all over the place, and not necessarily in a good place. While every scene was fun to read (a backroom meeting with the MInister? A pagan castration ritual? A flying sex-scene? Eh?), it did become a bit disjointed. It doesn't feel like one story, more like a series of scenes that are sometimes connected. I hope the next chapters will be a bit more coherent!
As to the story itself: it's brilliant. You've taken a cliche and made it your own, original version, and you can be proud of that. Your writing style has improved a lot too over the past stories (less spelling errors! Oh, who am I kidding ;)). I feel like what I missed the most from the past stories were grand action scenes that spark the imagination with amazing scenery and awe-inspiring magic. Basically, I missed a proper climax. But here, you've definitely improved that, the most notable being the Gringotts heist. That griffin scene was amazing and it painted images in my head, which is a big feat!
I'm also glad you don't bash that much here. Having Dumbledore on Harry's good side makes this story so much more interesting than just "good Harry vs. evil Dumbles". Especially with the Unbreakable Vow while Dumbledore is dying. It makes the story less predictable, and thus more exciting, which is great, of course!
I also love how it's the opposite of Thorny Rose here, with not Ginny, but Harry inheriting some of Tom's characteristics. I do wonder when Ginny's going to find out that Harry has merged souls with the person who possessed her. I expect either a large fight, or a revelation on Ginny's side that has something to do with the Diary. Or both! Either way, I feel like this matter is incredibly important to the story. I do hope you don't break them up, though. I've read more than enough of "we need to break up for your own safety" fanfics, or stories that break them up just to create some cheap angst. Harry and Ginny's relationship here is something else and it makes the story, in my opinion. But hey, it's your story, so don't let me intimidate you into keeping them together forever through some ranty reviews! Hehehe.
What sets this story apart from the other Super!Harry fics is that while Harry is superstrong, he still can't do without his friends and superiors. He is not invincible and his friends are not redundant. Escpecially with Harry and Ginny's relationship. They're equals, and that's refreshing to read. Good job! Although I am surprised at how randy Ginny is here. I mean, creating an impenetrable shield from scratch just to have sex? Haha!
Lastly, Luna. I love her character, and you've nailed her once again here. In canon, her function was to be strange, and through that strangeness she lets Harry see things from a different perspective, and that's also the case here. And I LOVED the Harry/Luna scene from chapter 12. It was funny, romantic, almost wistful, and interlude in the midst of all the doom and gloom (and sex).
I rate this an 8 (m8). It would be higher, but as I said, the disjointed feeling is a bit of a bummer. And I could have been longer, but let's face it, your chapters could never be long enough! I'm just too eager to read more! My f5 button is overused! But the excellent writing and great excecution of the characters more than makes up for those downsides. Thank you for the story, and I can't wait for more!
Author's Response: Okay, that really didn't feel like a 8/10 review! Obviously, I disagree that the chapter is disjointed, but I am viewing it from the perspective of having the completed story sitting on my hard drive and being able to look back over the whole thing. Would it have seemed more coherent to you if the scene with Astoria where she warns them of the attack was at the start of the chapter? Either way, looking at it from my POV it still feels linear and logical. Perhaps if you look back on this chapter after I've finished posting it might not feel the same way.
