Reviews For Without a Trace
Reviewer: TomBombadil Signed Date: 2017.05.29 - 02:32AM Title: Chapter 1 The Ball I honestly don't know if this is my fourth of fifth time to read this story. I've re-read a lot of your work recently. In real life I've been feeling a bit low and there is something ab out your writing that cheers me up dramatically. So, first, let me say, "Thank you!" I love your take on this story. I think you have Ron spot-on canonically. As for Hermione, I think she varies from canon, but once you establish that she never forgave Ginny for loosing the Basilisk and getting Hermione petrified, then it all comes perfectly well together. Percy is a prick, so that's about as canonical as it can get! So, I love your premise. Harry's reaction is also spot-on, and Ginny would be furious ... and rightly so. In canon, Ron is lacking in self confidence and remarkably jealous, all the while neglecting to see how he has everything Harry wants! In all honesty, I dislike Ron in the books fairly strongly, so your approach fits perfectly with my view of the Potterverse! All in all, this is great stuff. Very satisfying! I won't pretend that I don't know where it is headed, but it is worth another quick ride!!! Reviewer: MollyandArthur Signed Date: 2016.01.18 - 07:24PM Title: Chapter 1 The Ball Interesting beginning. I see that we are not fond of Hermione and Ron in this story. I am curious to see where you are planning to take this plot line and whether or not we will get answers about Harry and Ginny. Reviewer: Arnel Signed Date: 2016.01.11 - 01:51PM Title: Chapter 1 The Ball You've set the rest of the story up quite masterfully in this first chapter and I think the people I have the most compassion for right now are Arthur and Molly. Their scheming children have kept important information from them, leaving their parents to wonder at the real cause of Harry and Ginny's disappearance, while hiding their own culpability. I didn't say this before, but I'm glad Bill disagrees with Ron and Hermione and Percy. He seems to have Harry's full measure, while George seems to have followed meekly because of his own troubles at the time of the disappearance. Still, the fact that Harry and Ginny left without a trace hurt Arthur and Molly deeply and I can understand Arthur's need to ask that the investigation be reopened. Reviewer: ellen Signed Date: 2016.01.09 - 01:17PM Title: Chapter 1 The Ball Interesting premise for the story. I like that you have Hermione as well as Ron as not much of a friend -usually its just Ron-the-git. They've certainly done well out of the situation. If its taken 8 years for any serious questions into their disappearance, after the initial investigation, I'm not surprised Harry and Ginny haven't bothered to make contact wiyh so=called friends and family. Reviewer: Shalli Signed Date: 2016.01.09 - 09:04AM Title: Chapter 1 The Ball Gah. This is... Fascinating. And frustrating because there is another chapter sitting there unvalidated, but I want to know what happens next now. This is a really different take on the dynamic between Hermione, Ron, Ginny and Harry. I'm not sure I like the implications, but I *do* like how you've expressed and portrayed it. Reviewer: Brennus Signed Date: 2016.01.09 - 05:45AM Title: Chapter 1 The Ball Oh, that's a much better title. I'm glad you came up with it. Nice to see so many reviewers have accepted the story in the spirit it was intended. Yes, Hermione is different from canon but not completely different. You've just taken elements of her personality and built on them. Hermione was Ginny's best friend in canon? Where did that come from? The only time Ginny got to spend any time with the trio was after she started going out with Harry. She was far closer to Luna, if anything. Funny how fan fiction has established certain ideas in people's minds which have no basis in canon. Anyway, as I said before, I love this story and am delighted to see you posting again (even with such a low body count!). Reviewer: trigg Signed Date: 2016.01.09 - 04:50AM Title: Chapter 1 The Ball Great start. I reviewed at other site but I want to do it here too. I really liked your characterizations. Please don't let Harry and Ginny be so forgiving. Ron, Hermione and Percy doesn't deserve that. I don't think they can be best friends again after all that. Looking forward to read more. Reviewer: mdauben Signed Date: 2016.01.08 - 08:22PM Title: Chapter 1 The Ball I reviewed over on that other site, but I wanted to post a rating and support you here, too! Reviewer: Inquisitor Signed Date: 2016.01.08 - 06:19PM Title: Chapter 1 The Ball Your Hermione is rather a large deviation from the canon, where she was best friend with Ginny and helped her on many occasions. The girls shared secrets freely, and it was Hermione who fed Harry inside dopes between Ginny and Dean in HBP. When Harry finally kissed Ginny in the Gryffindor common room, "Hermione was BEAMING". Reviewer: skiutahnum1 Signed Date: 2016.01.08 - 05:01PM Title: Chapter 1 The Ball I think mr weasley has the right idea to reopen it....but give it fresh eyes....as for harry and ginny leaving just look to the frinds they had and family that didnt care for them together to have them taek off....kutgw Reviewer: hubris Signed Date: 2016.01.08 - 04:24PM Title: Chapter 1 The Ball Really interesting slant on the Potter universe. What we've seen and heard of this Hermione is believably presented by only a slightly different view of cannon events. Percy is still insufferable and Ron a fair weather, jealous sort of friend. Very much looking forward to, as Paul Harvey used to say, "the rest of the story." Reviewer: BigFatMaybe Signed Date: 2016.01.08 - 03:55PM Title: Chapter 1 The Ball i like the set-up! You're good at creating interesting plots and mysteries. Reviewer: Dreaming Haven Signed Date: 2016.01.08 - 03:16PM Title: Chapter 1 The Ball I seriously hate Hermione, Ron, and Percy. Ron should have moved out after it was clear Harry wasn't coming back, Hermione definitely shouldn't have moved in. I think Hermione doesn't just hold a grudge against Ginny. I think she's probably just as if not more jealous of her than Ron was of Harry. After all Ginny was considered beautiful and popular, Hermione was only seen as pretty after having her teeth done and spending hours fixing her hair and makeup for Yull Ball. Otherwise she was just the bushy haird friend of Harry Potter. You knkw they say Karma is a bitch, so I hole the lot, especially Hermione gets what they deserve in the end. Reviewer: Aurorofthelight Signed Date: 2016.01.08 - 02:49PM Title: Chapter 1 The Ball Great to see a new one from you and this really gripped me from the start! I can see Percy being a pompous prick but Ron and Hermoines' attitudes are a surprise - that love potion story sounds like something from Romilda Vane! Something isn't right about Robards either! Can't wait to see where you go with this gem! :D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D Reviewer: RighT3rantZ Signed Date: 2016.01.08 - 01:45PM Title: Chapter 1 The Ball Excellent start! Has the makings of another good story, much like your other ones...even if the other ones are sadly unfinished. (Perilous Journey!!) Reviewer: igdrasil Signed Date: 2016.01.08 - 10:50AM Title: Chapter 1 The Ball Intriguing. I jope the next chapter keep up the same. Reviewer: Birlan Signed Date: 2016.01.08 - 08:46AM Title: Chapter 1 The Ball Great beginning and good to see another story from you. Thanks. Your hermione and ron are logical in how they jump to conclusions and so is Robards. Thanks again and I look forward to reading more. Reviewer: CharmHazel Signed Date: 2016.01.08 - 07:11AM Title: Chapter 1 The Ball Oh I am so intrigued to see where this story goes! Loving the twist on the canon you have made. This is definitely a brilliant start what looks like an amazing story. Cannot wait for the next chapter! Reviewer: Gin110881 Signed Date: 2016.01.08 - 05:53AM Title: Chapter 1 The Ball That was a really captivating start to the story. If there were a category Thriller, this story would exactly fall into this category. | |||||||
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