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Reviewer: TomBombadil Signed Date: 2017.05.29 - 02:32AM Title: Chapter 1 The Ball

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I honestly don't know if this is my fourth of fifth time to read this story. I've re-read a lot of your work recently. In real life I've been feeling a bit low and there is something ab out your writing that cheers me up dramatically. So, first, let me say, "Thank you!" I love your take on this story. I think you have Ron spot-on canonically. As for Hermione, I think she varies from canon, but once you establish that she never forgave Ginny for loosing the Basilisk and getting Hermione petrified, then it all comes perfectly well together. Percy is a prick, so that's about as canonical as it can get! So, I love your premise. Harry's reaction is also spot-on, and Ginny would be furious ... and rightly so. In canon, Ron is lacking in self confidence and remarkably jealous, all the while neglecting to see how he has everything Harry wants! In all honesty, I dislike Ron in the books fairly strongly, so your approach fits perfectly with my view of the Potterverse! All in all, this is great stuff. Very satisfying! I won't pretend that I don't know where it is headed, but it is worth another quick ride!!!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! It is so nice to hear that others appreciate my work. I'm glad you enjoyed the story. I agree with your assessment of Ron. His lack of confidence is such a large theme through all of the books - it affects his school work, his Quidditch skills, and of course his relationships with Harry and Hermione. I think that is one reason that Quidditch Captain Ron or Tactical specialist Ron annnoys me so much in fan fic. He has no leadership skills and he never seems to be able to translate his chess skills to anything else. One of my big objections to Ron and Hermione together is she would run him down. She's so over confident to his under confidence - he's going to get tired of it eventually.



Reviewer: MollyandArthur Signed Date: 2016.01.18 - 07:24PM Title: Chapter 1 The Ball

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Interesting beginning. I see that we are not fond of Hermione and Ron in this story. I am curious to see where you are planning to take this plot line and whether or not we will get answers about Harry and Ginny.

Author's Response: Thanks!



Reviewer: Arnel Signed Date: 2016.01.11 - 01:51PM Title: Chapter 1 The Ball

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You've set the rest of the story up quite masterfully in this first chapter and I think the people I have the most compassion for right now are Arthur and Molly. Their scheming children have kept important information from them, leaving their parents to wonder at the real cause of Harry and Ginny's disappearance, while hiding their own culpability. I didn't say this before, but I'm glad Bill disagrees with Ron and Hermione and Percy. He seems to have Harry's full measure, while George seems to have followed meekly because of his own troubles at the time of the disappearance. Still, the fact that Harry and Ginny left without a trace hurt Arthur and Molly deeply and I can understand Arthur's need to ask that the investigation be reopened.

To that end, thank goodness Kingsley chose Seamus and Terry rather than one of the older Aurors, to start the new investigation. I think they relate to those involved better than the first investigators and will do a better job of trying to find the wayward pair.

As for Ron and Hermione, I think the thing that makes me maddest is that they've taken such liberties with Harry's property. Having forced Harry from his own house, I take umbrage at the thought that Hermione thought she could waltz in and change the décor to fit her own whims. Also, she seems a bit smug when she tells Seamus that the only things she and Ron pay are the utilities. I hope Harry asks them for eight years back rent if Seamus and Terry find him. It would serve the squatters right!

All in all, I thoroughly enjoyed this chapter and will soon review chapter two.

Author's Response: Thanks so much! And thanks for story's title - I totally stole it from one of your emails. I've enjoyed the investigation aspect of this story. Its funny, many people have commented on the changing of the house. The way I see it, Hermione was waiting for Harry to recover from his love potion and return so she fixed up his house in the meantime. I don't imagine she'd question her right to do so.



Reviewer: ellen Signed Date: 2016.01.09 - 01:17PM Title: Chapter 1 The Ball

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Interesting premise for the story. I like that you have Hermione as well as Ron as not much of a friend -usually its just Ron-the-git. They've certainly done well out of the situation. If its taken 8 years for any serious questions into their disappearance, after the initial investigation, I'm not surprised Harry and Ginny haven't bothered to make contact wiyh so=called friends and family.

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I think Ron and Hermione would feed off each other. The Weaslys (wrongly) assumed an appropriate investigation had been performed. More will be explained later :)



Reviewer: Shalli Signed Date: 2016.01.09 - 09:04AM Title: Chapter 1 The Ball

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Gah. This is... Fascinating. And frustrating because there is another chapter sitting there unvalidated, but I want to know what happens next now. This is a really different take on the dynamic between Hermione, Ron, Ginny and Harry. I'm not sure I like the implications, but I *do* like how you've expressed and portrayed it.

Excellent job. I'm going to check ff.net to see if the second chapter is available there.

Author's Response: Thanks so much!



Reviewer: Brennus Signed Date: 2016.01.09 - 05:45AM Title: Chapter 1 The Ball

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Oh, that's a much better title. I'm glad you came up with it. Nice to see so many reviewers have accepted the story in the spirit it was intended. Yes, Hermione is different from canon but not completely different. You've just taken elements of her personality and built on them. Hermione was Ginny's best friend in canon? Where did that come from? The only time Ginny got to spend any time with the trio was after she started going out with Harry. She was far closer to Luna, if anything. Funny how fan fiction has established certain ideas in people's minds which have no basis in canon. Anyway, as I said before, I love this story and am delighted to see you posting again (even with such a low body count!).

Author's Response: Thanks - I totally stole the title from something Arnel said in one of her emails. I'm pleased with how well its been accepted, but the best friend thing does crack me up. Isn't it sad, I don't think I actually kill anyone in this story (although people are upset about Teddy).



Reviewer: trigg Signed Date: 2016.01.09 - 04:50AM Title: Chapter 1 The Ball

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Great start. I reviewed at other site but I want to do it here too. I really liked your characterizations. Please don't let Harry and Ginny be so forgiving. Ron, Hermione and Percy doesn't deserve that. I don't think they can be best friends again after all that. Looking forward to read more.

Author's Response: Thanks for the reviews. I hope you will like how I resolved this.



Reviewer: mdauben Signed Date: 2016.01.08 - 08:22PM Title: Chapter 1 The Ball

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I reviewed over on that other site, but I wanted to post a rating and support you here, too!

Author's Response: Thanks so much! I haven't responded to my reviews on the site, but thank you for the support!



Reviewer: Inquisitor Signed Date: 2016.01.08 - 06:19PM Title: Chapter 1 The Ball

Your Hermione is rather a large deviation from the canon, where she was best friend with Ginny and helped her on many occasions. The girls shared secrets freely, and it was Hermione who fed Harry inside dopes between Ginny and Dean in HBP. When Harry finally kissed Ginny in the Gryffindor common room, "Hermione was BEAMING".

With a Hermione as petty as in this story, I highly doubt the canon story would have played out as it was.

Although I understand that you want to take a stand against those 'love potion Ginny' Harmony shippers, there is really no need to sink to their levels.

Author's Response: I do understand that Hermione is different from canon. I don't know that I would call her Ginny's best friend, that is more a fan fic convention. Hermione was always Ron and Harry's best friend. She and Ginny were friendly and I'm sure they became closer as they got older, but they are two years apart and have very little in common. I know in canon, she was supportive of Harry and Ginny, but I purposefully changed that.



Reviewer: Lokken Signed Date: 2016.01.08 - 05:05PM Title: Chapter 1 The Ball

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Reviewer: skiutahnum1 Signed Date: 2016.01.08 - 05:01PM Title: Chapter 1 The Ball

I think mr weasley has the right idea to reopen it....but give it fresh eyes....as for harry and ginny leaving just look to the frinds they had and family that didnt care for them together to have them taek off....kutgw

Author's Response: I thought Mr Weasley would be the perfect person to push to re-open the investigation.



Reviewer: hubris Signed Date: 2016.01.08 - 04:24PM Title: Chapter 1 The Ball

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Really interesting slant on the Potter universe. What we've seen and heard of this Hermione is believably presented by only a slightly different view of cannon events. Percy is still insufferable and Ron a fair weather, jealous sort of friend. Very much looking forward to, as Paul Harvey used to say, "the rest of the story."

Author's Response: Thank you so much! It's funny, people are split as to weather I completely warped Hermione or changed her a bit.



Reviewer: BigFatMaybe Signed Date: 2016.01.08 - 03:55PM Title: Chapter 1 The Ball

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i like the set-up! You're good at creating interesting plots and mysteries.

Hermione and Ron are pretty OOC here (Hermione and Ginny were very good friends in canon, and Ginny and Ron seemed very close too), but I won't hold that against you. it's your fanfiction after all, and once you look past the OOC aspect of it, you are left with a good plot and different interests with all the different characters, and I'm curious as to what direction this story will go in. Will we see Harry and Ginny's POV too?

Currently impatiently waiting for the mods to validate chapter 2 (and for you to update Perilous Journey! Grrr!). You're a fine writer. Keep it up!

Author's Response: Thanks so much! I know that Hermione and Ginny were friendly in canon. Ron on the other hand didn't seem to have time for his sister until after 5th year. I know that in many fan fics they are the best of friends and all get along really well, but I don't know how accurate that might be. Harry and Ginny are a bit in the second chapter, but heavily featured in the last three chapters (it's five chapters long).



Reviewer: Dreaming Haven Signed Date: 2016.01.08 - 03:16PM Title: Chapter 1 The Ball

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I seriously hate Hermione, Ron, and Percy. Ron should have moved out after it was clear Harry wasn't coming back, Hermione definitely shouldn't have moved in. I think Hermione doesn't just hold a grudge against Ginny. I think she's probably just as if not more jealous of her than Ron was of Harry. After all Ginny was considered beautiful and popular, Hermione was only seen as pretty after having her teeth done and spending hours fixing her hair and makeup for Yull Ball. Otherwise she was just the bushy haird friend of Harry Potter. You knkw they say Karma is a bitch, so I hole the lot, especially Hermione gets what they deserve in the end.

Author's Response: Thanks! I agree that Hermione would be jealous of Ginny. I figured that Ron would stay where he was and Hermione was 'sure' he was under a love potion and would return soon.



Reviewer: Aurorofthelight Signed Date: 2016.01.08 - 02:49PM Title: Chapter 1 The Ball

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Great to see a new one from you and this really gripped me from the start! I can see Percy being a pompous prick but Ron and Hermoines' attitudes are a surprise - that love potion story sounds like something from Romilda Vane! Something isn't right about Robards either! Can't wait to see where you go with this gem! :D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D

Author's Response: Thanks! I wanted to try something a bit different. Hope you enjoy the rest.



Reviewer: RighT3rantZ Signed Date: 2016.01.08 - 01:45PM Title: Chapter 1 The Ball

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Excellent start! Has the makings of another good story, much like your other ones...even if the other ones are sadly unfinished. (Perilous Journey!!)

Is the WHS a stab at frustrations working within our insurance system? BTW, working with children with cancer is about as noble a profession that exists, much respect.

Can't wait to see where you take the plot. I kinda like your Hermione in that I don't really like her. Ron has the ability to be a dolt, or a great helper. Brennus has skewed me into enjoying the dolt versions, so yay!

Author's Response: Thanks! I know, I am working on my other stories. I waited until this was finished before posting so I wouldn't have three unfinished stories. Thanks for the nod - I figured the WHS would be just as messed up as any other insurance. Its kind of fun messing with Hermione. I will stay I agree with most of Mark's characterizations (with a bit lower body count).



Reviewer: igdrasil Signed Date: 2016.01.08 - 10:50AM Title: Chapter 1 The Ball

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Intriguing. I jope the next chapter keep up the same.


Author's Response: Thanks! Hope you continue to enjoy.



Reviewer: Birlan Signed Date: 2016.01.08 - 08:46AM Title: Chapter 1 The Ball

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Great beginning and good to see another story from you. Thanks. Your hermione and ron are logical in how they jump to conclusions and so is Robards. Thanks again and I look forward to reading more.

Author's Response: Thanks! I think the changes I made could have happened with a bit of tweaking. Hope you enjoy.



Reviewer: CharmHazel Signed Date: 2016.01.08 - 07:11AM Title: Chapter 1 The Ball

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Oh I am so intrigued to see where this story goes! Loving the twist on the canon you have made. This is definitely a brilliant start what looks like an amazing story. Cannot wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response: Thanks so much! I saw you reviewed on the other site, too. Glad you like it.



Reviewer: Gin110881 Signed Date: 2016.01.08 - 05:53AM Title: Chapter 1 The Ball

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That was a really captivating start to the story. If there were a category Thriller, this story would exactly fall into this category.
I never liked the idea that Harry is becoming an Auror, and funnily enough you exactly describe how I thought it would be for him. I was never fond of Robards and eventually I also didn't like Shacklebolt much because he'd persuaded Harry into this Auror program.
Hermione is slightly out of character, but I won't complain. While I like a supportive Hermione, from time to time a less friendly Hermione is refreshing. OK, this time she even seems to be evil. She has even reminded me a bit of Umbridge (Yeah, I know, she isn't a favourite character of yours, lol). And Ron. In canon Ron already was overprotective to Ginny, but otherwise he didn't care much about her.
Somehow I have the feeling that almost everyone has something to hide or is lying... yeah, it's a thriller. Percy is a git as ever. However I wouldn't be surprised if he had a skeleton in the cupboard. I wouldn't be surprised if a Weasley brother (Bill?) is secretly in contact with Ginny. We will see...
But why the Tonks and Lupins were killed? I suspect, so Harry is no longer connected to the wizarding world. It would be hard for him to not be in contact with Teddy
It's good to know that the story is already finished. I think the story would lose a part of its suspense if the chapters would appear in large intervals.
Many thanks for a story with a brilliant start and an intriguing plot.


Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad you are enjoying the story. I think Harry would make a good Auror, but I don't think he ever gave himself a chance to figure out what he wanted to do. Hermione is a bit ooc, but it worked with the story. I did kill Teddy off so Harry could make a clean break with the wizarding world - I figured that would give him one less reason to stay.




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