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Reviewer: hawkeye2008 Signed Date: 2017.09.03 - 10:40PM Title: Chapter 1: Shades Of Black

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Reviewer: carolyn jinn Signed Date: 2017.01.13 - 11:36PM Title: Chapter 7: A Game At Dinner

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So, Peter has found the diary. Interesting.



Reviewer: MollyandArthur Signed Date: 2017.01.03 - 06:36PM Title: Chapter 7: A Game At Dinner

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I just read all seven chapters, and I am really enjoying your story. The premise is interesting and plausible, and your writing is mostly very well done. You may want to have a friend read and edit each chapter before posting to correct spelling, grammar, and occasional word usage mistakes. Looking forward to reading your next chapter and finding out what happens in second year.



Reviewer: BkRmGrl87 Signed Date: 2016.12.31 - 12:19PM Title: Chapter 7: A Game At Dinner

Oh.... what a cliffhanger! This is a really interesting story. Great start so far. I can't wait to see what you have planned for year two. Good luck!



Reviewer: Dad Signed Date: 2016.12.30 - 08:04PM Title: Chapter 7: A Game At Dinner

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O eck! Been a while.



Reviewer: carolyn jinn Signed Date: 2016.06.16 - 06:26AM Title: Chapter 6: Points For Not Being Mary Sue

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Quite the interesting version of Dobby (oops..I mean Smeagol!).
Waiting to see the Dursley's response to Mabel going with Harry.r



Reviewer: Dad Signed Date: 2016.06.06 - 11:35AM Title: Chapter 6: Points For Not Being Mary Sue

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Not the usual Dobby, but I like him.



Reviewer: carolyn jinn Signed Date: 2016.04.22 - 06:49AM Title: Chapter 5: Half-Life Three Confirmed!

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Interesting retelling of the story.
Looking forward to more.



Reviewer: Mistress of Potions Signed Date: 2016.04.19 - 02:18AM Title: Chapter 5: Half-Life Three Confirmed!

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Interesting premise, I look forward to more.



Reviewer: wq123 Anonymous Date: 2016.04.18 - 11:03PM Title: Chapter 1: Shades Of Black

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Reviewer: Dad Signed Date: 2016.04.12 - 06:57PM Title: Chapter 3: Diagonally facing

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Not quite sure where it is going and a few odd phrases, but I will wait to see what happens.



Reviewer: skiutahnum1 Signed Date: 2016.04.12 - 12:26PM Title: Chapter 1: Shades Of Black

Wow what a twist you have throw in the first chapter....kutgw



Reviewer: potterfan2008 Signed Date: 2016.04.11 - 08:34PM Title: Chapter 2: Riddles

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Again, a lot of explanation is necessary here. How does Harry know all of these people and why on earth would Sirius encourage a relationship with a racist, bigoted Death Eater? I know that Harry will meet all of these people at Hogwarts and Sirius knew the Longbottoms, but the Weasleys weren't in the Order so how do they know them? I don't know if it is just that you are in a hurry to get to the part of the story you want to tell, but the scene isn't really set. It doesn't seem that the Weasleys knew anyone outside of their village before Hogwarts so just tell us what happened and how they all became friends. Tom is making an appearance a year early - wonder what that will change.



Reviewer: potterfan2008 Signed Date: 2016.04.11 - 08:18PM Title: Chapter 1: Shades Of Black

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It would be nice to see a bit of Harry. The relationships aren't really established very well. There is a lot of dialogue and very little description. Why did they go to this place? Whose is it? What does it look like? Presumably it is the Potter's home in some way. Mabel seems to be the estate manager and she apparently knows Sirius and Remus. How is Sirius doing raising Harry? It would be nice to see a bit of that relationship. The only actions we see of Harry's is of him bullying a house elf - not nice. He's waiting for the Malfoys? Why? Not a good sign of things to come.




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