Reviews For Biscuits Deferred
Reviewer: TomBombadil Signed Date: 2017.02.07 - 08:08PM Title: Promises
Very satisfying! I hate how lazily Jo sidelined Ginny in DH! Thank you!
Yes, I had fun plotting this out -- how to deliver a climax where it was most meaningful for Harry and Ginny to stand together as one. A minor regret perhaps that Voldemort went down in the Forbidden Forest, without all the friends and students to witness, but for some reason I have a bit of an aversion to the 'grand spectacle ending'. In Prevailing Counterpoint, for example, Riddle was brought down on a desolate mountaintop.
Anyway, a thought experiment for how things might have turned out if H&G had been the ones exiled to the Hallow and Horcrux quest, while Hermione and Ron were left to sustain the resistance at Hogwarts. I think there's a nice alternate symmetry there.
Reviewer: TomBombadil Signed Date: 2017.02.07 - 06:45PM Title: Helping Hands
Hmmm? Seems like a fitting, well-earned conclusion. But aren't there four chapters?
Ah! Very intentional, in fact. Each of the four chapters is its own mini-story, with a dilemma, leading to crisis, climax and resolution. The magnitude of each builds from chapter to chapter, but I guarantee that breath of satisfaction before each is closed.
A fine observation; a great opportunity for me to grin and spin. Thank you!
Reviewer: TomBombadil Signed Date: 2017.02.07 - 05:31PM Title: Night Flights
Great start! Out of loneliness, a chance with a real friend! Your characters are, well, in character. But normally loquacious Ginny doesn't remain tongue-tied for an eternity. Yes, they have already met on Platform 9-3/4, but this time the meeting comes with expectations of friendship! How long will it take Harry to figure out that it is Ginny, not Ron, that the trunk intended him to meet. Finally, how apropos that his Mum knew the spell to charm parchment to bring Harry and Ginny joy and happiness, when a similarly charmed diary did the opposite for Ginny in CoS!
How long will it take for Harry to realize? Excellent question, and one that you already know the answer to. I will nonetheless state that, in keeping with the romance genre, the realization can't be instantaneous; it cannot even be as quick as we would like, but within the delay lie the seeds of a reward that means much more if hard-won than if tipped from a silver spoon.
Yes, I'm glad that liked how parchment could be a counterpoint to canon.
Anyway, thank you most kindly for the review; great to have your thoughts on the story!
Reviewer: Aragorn Signed Date: 2016.06.07 - 12:56AM Title: Promises
Reviewer: Aragorn Signed Date: 2016.06.07 - 12:37AM Title: Second Kiss
Reviewer: potterfan2008 Signed Date: 2016.05.30 - 07:29PM Title: Promises
Great ending! Loved the explanation of the title. Loved the story. Good luck!
What began in a bit of fluff, also ends as such :)
Okay, technically there was also a bit of angst, romance and drama in there too. Anyway, it was a fun little experiment, and I'm immensely grateful for the readership and kind words of illustrious contributors such as yourself!
Reviewer: potterfan2008 Signed Date: 2016.05.30 - 07:16PM Title: Second Kiss
Very sweet ending! I love how your worked the trunk into the third task - very creative. I love a proactive and protective Madam Pomfrey!
Rwy'n canu fy mawl i chi, Sharon!
Roughly translated: thank you!
So, in truth it's rather rare for me to attempt Rowling-like bitter-sweetness, but this chapter strays a bit in that direction. Somehow she managed to close off four consecutive books (GoF, OotP, HBP and DH) with stinging bitterness tinged with ephemeral silver linings and *not* drive her millions of fans to despair or rebellion. Ultimately, I pulled some punches that JKR landed squarely (especially wrt Cedric), but for me to have Harry and Ginny pledging themselves to each other in the shadow of Voldemort's resurrection is a bit outside my comfort zone... but I have to admit that the feedback proved immensely heartening. Thank you again!
Reviewer: potterfan2008 Signed Date: 2016.05.30 - 07:06PM Title: Helping Hands
Amazing! I love the idea of using the Potions' lab to destroy the diary.
Enthralled by your kind words -- thank you!
I'm most gratified by the response I got for the somewhat prosaic choice of using hard work as a means to bring Harry and Ginny together toward a common goal and more. I admit that I considered it to be a bit of a risk to follow an uplifting first chapter with the prolonged downer, but gladly the potioneering and happier resolution to the diary crisis gave people an opportunity to forgive me. Writing angst is an interesting challenge -- how to find the discipline to constrain characters to the doldrums just long enough to make exultation all the sweeter.
Ah well, challenge is good!
Reviewer: potterfan2008 Signed Date: 2016.05.30 - 06:33PM Title: Night Flights
Love the beginning. Interesting the way you've gotten about Dobby! Can't wait to read more.
First of all, let me begin by thanking you for reading and reviewing, Sharon, and also I must congratulate you on fairly recently joining Mark in the very exclusive Million-Words Club (see: http://www.siye.co.uk/search.php?action= tens&list=wordcauthor in case you weren't aware of the list)
Dobby! It may be strange to say this about a character whom I don't even name by name, but he truly made the whole story. Without the wretched little wrinkle he posed, my plot would either have been completely different... or non-existent.
Believe it or not, sometimes fiction is stranger than fact ;)
Reviewer: pottermania Signed Date: 2016.05.21 - 05:54PM Title: Promises
Absolutely fantastic. I kept wondering why that title? And its perfect!!!
Wunderbar! So great to hear that you liked the full package -- thank you very much for reading and reviewing, Joy!
Titles! Yes, I do make an effort to find something obscure but meaningful -- yet another little mystery for the reader to gradually unravel throughout the story. As I mentioned in an earlier review, I did have a debate with myself over a title instead focusing on the ribbon, but I decided to stick with a slightly less obvious one and am totally heartened to find you liking it!
Well, thank you so kindly once again for reading and reviewing, Joy!
Reviewer: pottermania Signed Date: 2016.05.21 - 12:44PM Title: Second Kiss
Loved it from beginning to end, it had a bit of everything.
Yes, I suspect that you're like some of my other readers in seeing chapter 3 as where the plot really takes off. The first two chapters were necessary foundation, but chapters 3 & 4 were truly where the writing became truly satisfying.
Anyway, wonderful that you enjoyed it!
Reviewer: pottermania Signed Date: 2016.05.21 - 12:02PM Title: Helping Hands
Great team work, with a supporting cast in the trunk 😄
Looks like the site decided to double you up here, but no matter -- I can always find something to say, right?
So In guess I would like to have thought, canonically, that Ginny could have been a true force to be reckoned with in Harry's presence. OotP really demonstrated how well she complemented Harry in terms of temperment, and DH was (albeit way behind the scenes) a great reinforcement for the notion of her bravery and resourcefulness, but almost never (barring the Department of Mysteries) did she ever get to combine bravery, resourcefulness and complementary temperment into a true collaboration with Harry. So this chapter is really about showing Harry the depths of Ginny's cooperative value. And, of course, the trunk (and scroll-Lily & scroll-James) are also instrumental in achieving this.
Reviewer: pottermania Signed Date: 2016.05.20 - 06:13PM Title: Helping Hands
Great team work, with a supporting cast in the trunk 😄
Thank you, Joy! This was the chapter that most explicitly shows the trunk's value to a practical end, although I'd like to believe that indirect evidence of the usefulness pervades through the rest of the story.
Reviewer: ProfessorBinns79 Signed Date: 2016.05.19 - 10:25PM Title: Promises
I thought the newbie might win the challenge until I saw that you had written another of your incomparably intricate gems! The ribbon, the biscuits, "Who!"...your writing is, if I may say so, Rowlingesque in how it brings back all the little details to wrap the story up in a neat little bow (in this case, quite literally!).
Another thought-provoking communique -- thanks Greg!
In my mind, given the quality of BigFatMaybe's story, I'd think that the best scenario would be an equitable split across the categories... although I'd hardly be so presumptuous as to suggest how to divvy them up :)
It's great to read that you, Arnel, and various other reviewers all enjoyed the symbolism -- especially the ribbon! In truth, the title could have warranted a mention of that ribbon but oh well -- the one provided is sufficiently silly and obfuscatory.
Finally, the metaphysics of it all... If I remember correctly, the canonical Dumbledore in King's Cross was artfully evasive regarding the question of whether he was 'real'. I don't have a copy of DH handy as I write this, but I seem to recall Dumbledore having implied that he was as real as Harry needed him to be. This is true for the comparably evasive Companion Ginny in the dream. Rather than render a rigid opinion on this, I am going to paint two alternate, plausible scenarios:
Please feel free to take whichever most stirs your soul, or make up your own!
Great review -- thank you again!
Reviewer: Arnel Signed Date: 2016.05.19 - 09:05PM Title: Promises
I am so glad I waited to review until I knew the outcome of this story! It's as good at the end as it is at the beginning. What caught my attention and made giggle like a schoolgirl was Harry's conversation with Hedwig. Who could have thought a simple word—"Who"—could have so many meanings and connotation! When you brought her back in this last chapter I just knew that eventually all would be well in the end. There's something about faithful Hedwig that just inspires faith that Harry will be loved in some capacity by someone just as Hedwig loves him. Oh... now that I think about it, that head-tilt that makes Ginny smile so is definitely inspired by Hedwig and her "Who!"
Many many things to comment upon here -- that's definitely a good thing!
Let's begin with Hedwig -- a tremendously fortunate character to have had at my disposal! The one thing that threw me for a loop as I read the challenge specs was, OMG, this story begins at almost the exact moment I started Fuddle Fog! Harry shut in a room by his idiot relatives -- how to avoid producing an obvious retread? The answer, luckily stumbled upon, lay in finding a distinct character who could illuminate and distinguish Harry's persona. That certainly wasn't destined to be Dobby this time, so who did that leave? A wise (and thoroughly devoted) owl of course. I'd already decided that Harry in this story would be more canonical than in Fuddle Fog and, in that sense, Hedwig was the ideal foil to elaborate the Harry I was looking for -- a kindly boy yet occasionally a bit thick; downtrodden yet determined. In any case, it was so very gratifying that readers enjoyed my choice for such a key secondary character!
Yes, a trunk for two -- I'm glad to have a consensus with you on that! In canon, Harry always struck me as having something approaching the orphan's attitude toward personal possessions. He is not ungenerous per se, but has a more refined value system than many young people in that he is reluctant to risk something of value in the hands of anyone who might not use it properly. For example, nobody ever got to ride the Firebolt, and the invisibility cape and Marauder's Map were shared exceptionally selectively. So, in fact, the notion that this trunk is intended to be shared is initially a bit distressing to him, but ultimately his parents' intent was bang on -- it is only with the perfect choice of partner that this gift's value truly multiplies.
And speaking of parents, you are absolutely right in seeing this as a story where parents are all in the best light. James is a bit brash (the personality transferred into the scroll is, after all, that of a young man in his early twenties) but he is a dedicated father and a seasoned hero in his own right and is thus a real asset. In pairing with Lily, they are ideal mentors to a pair of young people who augment Marauder mettle with a bit of Lily's common sense. I regret not having had the space to give to Arthur, but I'm immensely pleased with how Molly was received. In canon, I think her reticence toward Ginny's interests in Harry was likely tempered with a bit of insecurity over whether Harry would see Ginny for who she truly was... but in this AU, Molly is implicitly given the chance to recognise the subtle non-verbal clues of a Harry who actually *did* get some quality face-to-face time with Ginny. Thus, Molly is able (with the magic of motherly intuition) to sense some real dynamics and be confident that Harry is not intentionally overlooking her daughter.
Then, just as you so rightly point out, there is the fruition of parental mentoring. This is a key theme tucked away in there -- both Harry and Ginny are given just the right additional nudges along the way to make their path, if not outright 'smooth', at least a fair bit less tortuous. I really wanted to show this subtly, and took a bit of a risk. In each chapter, I wrote both Harry and Ginny with strategically evolving personalities -- the same way one might observe, say, in a member of extended family one only saw every few years. I call this a risk because a reader could take a whack at the story and say that the characterisations are inconsistent but, happily, nobody has. And the fact that you expressly observe exactly what I had hoped is immensely gratifying.
A 'teacher' you say? That explains the insightful reviews! It's always fun when readers take a different tack on a story than I had originally intended, but it's impossible to beat the gratification of when a reader truly 'gets' it. Thanks Arnel!
Reviewer: dannbard Signed Date: 2016.05.19 - 06:26AM Title: Promises
Oh? This time I get to leave a review amidst a bunch of normal ones :)
Well thank you for some unconventional words of kindness, Dann!
Well, I'd rather not do the calculations on precisely how much time I invested on this story over the six weeks between challenge call and deadline. Uh yes... best not to go there. But I do consider myself to be 'paid' for it. The best pay is either with encouraging feedback, with detailed constructive criticism or with mirror interpretations (i.e., seeing interpretations and messages through a reader's eyes is great fun), but any sort of feedback is worth something -- even getting kicked down with the occasional unarticulated low rating is worth a bit.
But it's hard to beat having someone tell you they 'value' your work! The site would be well served if you said things like that to other authours whose work you enjoy!
Reviewer: carolyn jinn Signed Date: 2016.05.19 - 12:50AM Title: Promises
Mais Merveilleux! Thank you so very kindly for following the story through and letting me know your thoughts, Carolyn!
Reviewer: pottermania Signed Date: 2016.05.18 - 06:12PM Title: Night Flights
Now, was that a coincidence that Ginny couldn't sleep and was just passing the living room to go for a fly at the precise moment that Harry arrived by Floo? Hhhmm...I don't think I believe in coincidences like this lol!
Well, there are some things in life (and in stories about magic) that may never be fully explained. One could read a bit into Lily's and James's eagerness to get Harry out the Floo... or one may just ascribe to Fate (as Harry considers in Chapter 3).
Either way, thank you for reading and reviewing, Joy!
Reviewer: LysCsuri Signed Date: 2016.05.17 - 01:26PM Title: Promises
Amazingly ambitious to try to cover six years worth of a Harry Potter alternate universe in just four chapters, but I love the way you did it, with just this small sampling of scenes, a bit of flashback, and little comments here and there that say a lot more than they seem. Brilliant!
Heh, yes, well I can certainly say that this story will surely cover more canon years than any new ones I'm likely to attempt. In retrospect, it seemed like something to try -- something that runs so diametrically counter my normal instinct (a la Splinters or The Prevailing Counterpoint) of sustaining a day by day drama. Anyway, it was fun and seemed to work out well; if I ever do it again, it might be for post-Hogwarts.
Anyway, I'm very glad that you enjoyed it, Lys! Thank you very much for reading and reviewing!
Reviewer: Gin110881 Signed Date: 2016.05.17 - 06:29AM Title: Promises
This was a brilliant end to a brilliant tale.
Ha, yes, I have to admit that I experimented with a few different lines before coming up with the 'stubborn' one. I was looking for something that fit with the story's theme, that was not cliche and was largely, but not completely, noncanonical :)
And also yes, this was a story with a fair bit of symbolism and the ribbon and biscuits were definitely at the fore. I generally prefer to not overburden a story with symbolism but a) I have an aversion to loose ends and inadvertent red herrings, and b) I believe that a lot of readers enjoy the 'gotcha' experience of psychoanalysing a writer's devices. Some readers love it so much that they come up with analogies that are far more brilliant than I would ever have come up with!
Fred lives! Yes, I only ever killed him off in one story, but even in that one (Tijdvelt Twist) I gave him a big compensatory post-mortem role.
Finally, I'm most gratified that you enjoyed a limbo experience led by someone a bit more warming and personal than Dumbledore, as an extension to the story's 'togetherness' theme.
Thank you for accompanying me on another story, Martin!