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Reviewer: RighT3rantZ Signed Date: 2016.11.14 - 12:15PM Title: Chapter 1

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When I first saw this story a few day ago, it was Chapter 2 that was posted. Today I saw an update and I went to read it and started realizing I had already seen this. So I went back and read chapter one, which I hadn't seen yet. Just thought I would share. Well done.

Author's Response: Hi! Thank you for stopping by. Maybe I edited some, so chapter 2 was displayed again? Anyway, thank you for encouragement!



Reviewer: ngayonatkailanman Signed Date: 2016.11.14 - 08:41AM Title: Chapter 1

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good idea.

Author's Response: Thanks!



Reviewer: skiutahnum1 Signed Date: 2016.11.13 - 06:22AM Title: Chapter 2 Lifetime Career

Rita is going to wish she just left harry alone shorty i tihnk...as for where you are going, not bad, but a little jumpy but thats ok...kutgw

Author's Response: Thank you again, skiutahnum1! The latter half, Harry's memory was added because Ginny's radio show scene didn't reach 1000 words. I'm planning to submit the other story soon, which isn't jumpy, I guess.



Reviewer: skiutahnum1 Signed Date: 2016.11.13 - 06:07AM Title: Chapter 1

Well it is different but nice start cant wait to see where you go from here...kutgw

Author's Response: Thank you for stopping by. The idea just popped when I joined in the story challenge in the other site, the theme was "game". I enjoyed writing the story with helps from my fellow authors.



Reviewer: Dad Signed Date: 2016.11.12 - 05:35PM Title: Chapter 2 Lifetime Career

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As a story, it rushes through the time line from the first chapter to this, but that is all right. Either the end of this chapter was rushed or the wrong draft got posted because it is full of grammar mistakes. Also a motorbike has a twist grip on the handlebars for the throttle - not a foot pedal. Still a good effort.

Author's Response: Thank you for the review. You are right. The latter half hasn't been beta read yet. I need to request the draft to be checked at one community where I can find a beta.




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