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Reviewer: Gin110881 Signed Date: 2017.01.03 - 10:05AM Title: Chapter 3: Hogwarts

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It's been a quite intriguing Sorting Ceremony. I'm curious which Head of House will hand over their schedules, and what school robes the two of them will wear. Molly was surprisingly calm about the Bond, lol.

A lot happened in the chapter. But there are also a few questions left.
When did Harry had the training as a heir, he mentioned to Ron?
How could Hermione know Malfoy even before she attended Hogwarts?
When did Dudley join them in the compartment to talk to Neville?
How does Harry know Tonks?

Many thanks for sharing your story! I'm looking forward to reading the next chapter.



Reviewer: Gin110881 Signed Date: 2017.01.03 - 09:17AM Title: Chapter 2: Almost Ten Years Later

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I like your approach. However, since the story is AU (I love AU stories) a few more explanations would've been nice. Why is Sirius not in Azkaban? Why did he never visit Harry? Apparently, he knows how Harry grew up. He yells at Dumbledore without even asking Harry about his childhood.



Reviewer: Gin110881 Signed Date: 2017.01.03 - 08:41AM Title: Chapter 1: The Beginning

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That's a quite intriguing introduction into the story. I really like your approach and I'm looking forward to reading more.
My only complaint is that, due to the en bloc format, the text is a wee bit hard to read. (Yeah, I know I'm a wisenheimer, I've never transmitted a story myself)



Reviewer: Dad Signed Date: 2017.01.03 - 04:55AM Title: Chapter 3: Hogwarts

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This started really interesting, but you seem to be going faster and faster as if you want to get it finished.

"Ya'll - Ya - K" : Who speaks like this?

"Ginny walked slowly to the common room. She was very glad her mum was fine with this, she took it much better than she had her staying at Hogwarts. She knew Sirius would offer to pay and that her Mum would accept, albeit subsiding." I know what you mean but this does not say anything sensible. Slow down and read what you have written. Practise makes perfect.



Reviewer: dronvire Signed Date: 2017.01.03 - 12:12AM Title: Chapter 3: Hogwarts

Your basic story idea seems alright so far but you're rushing it. Don't forget to tell about why Sirius was not in Azkaban and how Harry knows Tonks' aura when he hasn't met her yet.




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