Reviews For A Proper Epilogue
Reviewer: melindaleo Signed Date: 2018.03.30 - 10:05PM Title: Chapter 20 - Restoring Order Out of Chaos Well, after too long, I finally managed to sneak in another chapter! It hasn't been lack of trying - I have 3 weeks left in my busy season and it's been insane, but this one is at the top of my reading list. This was an action packed chapter! Leave it to Dawlish to muck it up. I couldn't shake the nagging feeling that Malfoy was back at the Burrow. It really disturbed me! I like that Harry and Ginny have decided to live somewhere other than Godric's Hollow. Even if Harry doesn't remember it, I think it would be hard to live where someone was murdered so violently, never mind his own parents. I think this is a much better option. Diana Parkinson escaped though, so that means there is more danger to come. I loved Ron in his chapter and how he knew exactly what Harry was thinking. Well done! Reviewer: GHL Signed Date: 2017.12.03 - 07:44AM Title: Chapter 20 - Restoring Order Out of Chaos
To say this chapter is 'wild' is almost a bit of an understatement. I had been shaking my head through the first half over some jarring shifts in pace, but that set things well for the disorienting buzz of the operation clattering into a half-failed, barely averted full disaster. When the dust settled, it was definitely worth 'five-stars' for effect. My one constructive criticism here is that Harry's Dawlish reticence would have had greater impact if you had introduced the controversy/anxiety earlier -- perhaps back a chapter or more. A plot set-up works best when the set-up has had time to 'set'. Anyway, good action writing is very difficult, but you turned a few fine tricks here! Author's Response: Your observation about Dawlish is an excellent suggestion. It may be the result of projection on my part, but I always felt JKR wrote Dawlish as a deeply morally ambiguous person. Nevertheless, it would have been an improvement to acknowledge that within the story, itself, rather than assuming everyone else would have the same reaction. Sirius was correct; the world is more complex than pure goodness versus pure evil. Reviewer: MollyandArthur Signed Date: 2017.02.25 - 12:26PM Title: Chapter 20 - Restoring Order Out of Chaos Wow!!! Action packed chapter with a very happy bit at the end. Clearly the Auror Department is indeed a mess for Kingsley not to recognize three traitors in their midst. Hope Narcissa is okay. Reviewer: skiutahnum1 Signed Date: 2017.02.24 - 11:00PM Title: Chapter 20 - Restoring Order Out of Chaos Well at lease they have the wand and now have it in a better place for safty sake......as for harry and ron going to work right away its not right but its the only way to have peace......kutgw Reviewer: Aurorofthelight Signed Date: 2017.02.24 - 10:37PM Title: Chapter 20 - Restoring Order Out of Chaos BLASTED SUBMIT BUTTON!!! Reviewer: Aurorofthelight Signed Date: 2017.02.24 - 10:35PM Title: Chapter 20 - Restoring Order Out of Chaos ...Often go astray! And boy this one did with traitors in their midst! Glad the turncoats got nailed even if they didn't bag all the birds! And at least Harry got the Elderwand back! Kingsley sure has a mess on his hands! Always suspected Dawlish was a bad egg --too willing to follow orders from a corrupt minister and the toad in OOTP! Can't wait for the next one! :D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D Reviewer: Aurorofthelight Signed Date: 2017.02.24 - 10:34PM Title: Chapter 20 - Restoring Order Out of Chaos ...Often go astray! And boy this one did with traitors in their midst! Glad the turncoats got nailed even if they didn't bag all the birds! And at least Harry got the Elderwand back! Kingsley sure has a mess on his hands! Always suspected Dawlish was a bad egg --to willing to follow orders from a corrupt minister and the toad in OOTP! Can't wait for the next one! :D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D Reviewer: Aurorofthelight Signed Date: 2017.02.24 - 10:34PM Title: Chapter 20 - Restoring Order Out of Chaos ...Often go astray! And boy this one did with traitors in their midst! Glad the turncoats got nailed even if they didn't bag all the birds! And at least Harry got the Elderwand back! Kingsley sure has a mess on his hands! Always suspected Dawlish was a bad egg --to willing to follow orders from a corrupt minister and the toad in OOTP! Can't wait for the next one! :D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D Reviewer: Aurorofthelight Signed Date: 2017.02.24 - 10:33PM Title: Chapter 20 - Restoring Order Out of Chaos ...Often go astray! And boy this one did with traitors in their midst! Glad the turncoats got nailed even if they didn't bag all the birds! And at least Harry got the Elderwand back! Kingsley sure has a mess on his hands! Always suspected Dawlish was a bad egg --to willing to follow orders from a corrupt minister and the toad in OOTP! Can't wait for the next one! :D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D Reviewer: ngayonatkailanman Signed Date: 2017.02.24 - 04:04PM Title: Chapter 20 - Restoring Order Out of Chaos Is this the end? I hope that you do have a sequel. I skim through most of the sexual bits as these do not interest me. However, I avidly read your descriptions of places, discussions, characterisations, and most of all the fluidity with which you know how to treat drama, action and adventure. These are so exciting and you know how to hold the reader's interest. Without the sex bits that I skipped, I have throughly enjoyed your story telling. Well done and thank you for updating so quickly as it helps to keep the story going. | |||||||
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