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Reviewer: Ranma-sensei Signed Date: 2017.06.13 - 02:09AM Title: Dudley's What?
Interesting little slice of life story - too bad it's so short and compressed, as it might be interesting to explore Dudley's developing relationship with his ex-victim.
Keep narrating,
Ranma-sensei
Reviewer: skiutahnum1 Signed Date: 2017.05.29 - 03:35PM Title: Dudley's What?
love how down Cho has gone.....kutgw
Reviewer: Gin110881 Signed Date: 2017.05.29 - 05:53AM Title: Dudley's What?
Funny idea. I was a wee bit surprised that the two year old kids are using the floo on their own.
Maybe you should edit the story a bit to make it better readable.
Reviewer: potterfan2008 Signed Date: 2017.05.25 - 08:23PM Title: Dudley's What?
Congrats on your first story here on SIYE! I have to say I was surprised, I presumed it would be Romilda from the summary. The idea is funny, but the story is difficult to read. When writing conversation, you should separate the dialogue - each person's dialogue should be separated from the other. It is difficult to read a huge block of text and most people won't even try. I think the idea of four sets of twins is a little silly, but if that's what you want to do the names should be spelled correctly. Harold (why not just use Harry?) and Oliver were both misspelled. I would suggest a beta or at someone to proof read your stories before posting.
