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Reviews For Darkness Within II

Reviewer: alterdream Signed Date: 2017.10.24 - 09:06PM Title: Chapter 12 Family's Consent

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I can't believe you let Anna not use that knife! What a lost opportunity ;-)

It was otherwise a very good chapter with no slow parts.

Author's Response: Thank you so much!!! I fully admit the knife was very tempting indeed.



Reviewer: ginnyweasley777 Signed Date: 2017.10.16 - 09:56AM Title: Chapter 12 Family's Consent

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Well I certainly wasn't expecting that! I can understand why this chapter will get different reactions from readers, but personally I find it a realistic thing that Malfoy would do. (And others behind the scenes in DH, just never in the books obviously).

Anyway, I'm really glad she managed to get away from him, and I like the way that Madam Pomfrey has enlisted the help of the other two. I look forward to the next chapter and the fallout from this. (Oh and I hope Ginny still got to Bat-Bogey someone to escape the office ha ha!)


Author's Response: Thank you so much!!! You raise an interesting point about the behind the scenes happenings by the time we reached DH. While JKR never specifically depicted certain happenings, the level of violence by the last book and the number of people mentioned as being tortured and/or killed was rather telling. The next chapter will be set mostly in the Ministry with fallout from everything mostly in the chapter after that. Ginny and her infamous Bat-Bogey Hex - I must work that in eventually for someone!!!



Reviewer: Gin110881 Signed Date: 2017.10.16 - 04:09AM Title: Chapter 12 Family's Consent

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Malfoy has done what I expect from a Malfoy. I'd already wondered that it didn't already happen when Malfoy waylaid Anna near the Forbidden Forest.

Too bad Anna's channelling her inner Dumbledore, and gives Malfoy a second chance, well, I guess it wasn’t Malfoy's first time, so it would rather be the fifth or sixth chance he gets. Since Malfoy knows that he won't be punished, he'll probably brag about his deed in the hope that the other candidates will withdraw their betrothal requests. However, I still hope that Anna's mysterious ritual soon will cause Malfoy to have a painful end.


Author's Response: Thank you so much!!! You've made several interesting points. I'm glad that you felt Malfoy was in character for Malfoy. By this time in the books, he is rich, spoiled, entitled, and has been given extra power within the school. His parents have been encouraging him towards this betrothal. Unfortunately I can see him truly believing he has the right to take what he wants, including Anna. This is not to say that I am making excuses for him at all! I'm simply relieved he was in character and that you were not surprised by this turn of events. As for what will happen to Malfoy...the next few chapters will answer that question.



Reviewer: Aurorofthelight Signed Date: 2017.10.15 - 09:04PM Title: Chapter 12 Family's Consent

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R is right, as in that really rotten scumbag Dorko! This had to be difficult to write so my hat is off to you!
Glad Anna will be alright but Dorko might not be if Charlie finds out(or if Neville and Augusta do)! I would have to think that Dorko just eliminated himself from betrothal contention and his parents will not be happy campers(although pure bloods probably don't go camping?)! Speaking of Charlie, would love to see him show up about now to save the day for Anna! If I was Charlie or Neville and knew that had happened, I'd be running Dorko's family jewels up the Hogwarts flagpole to see if anybody would salute them besides Dorko! Can't wait for the next chapter! :D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D


Author's Response: Thank you so much!!! I always love reading your reviews and sincerely appreciate your understanding of what Dorko has done, as well as the likely consequences. The family jewels comment was particularly perfect! The next chapter will be set mostly at the Ministry, but Charlie will return to the story soon. On a side note, your comment about pure-bloods going camping made my mind spin in a very amusing direction. Unfortunately, I'm not good at writing comedy, but one of our mutually favorite authors is brilliant at it and could likely write a marvelous short story on the topic! Hint, hint GHL!!!



Reviewer: aryell Signed Date: 2017.10.15 - 12:04PM Title: Chapter 12 Family's Consent

Sigh. I have to say I'm disappointed that you would write such a scene. To me, when a writer uses this kind trope to give the character more 'depth' it's just... I can't even find the words. Look I really love your writing but this chapter was a huge disappointment. There's an article that explains this better. https://www.wired.com/2015/06/rape-scene s/

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Not trying to make you feel bad but as a rape survivor (typing that made me shake) I just had to get that out.

Author's Response: First, I'm very sorry that this chapter upset you and even more sorry for your past experience. I put a trigger warning at the top of this chapter specifically because I hoped to avoid causing anyone distress. As a survivor myself who has had the benefit of a great deal of therapy and many years having passed, I found writing this scene a bit cathartic. Having said that, I understand that everyone's experience is different.




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