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Reviewer: GHL Signed Date: 2018.02.03 - 09:50AM Title: Chapter 20 Power

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Commending you on a balanced, plausible and analytical view of the bond! I will confess to having an instinctive tendency to cringe at the mention of 'S.B.', since it always seems to be the ironic antithesis of romance -- a little like turning love into a disease. However, in this case, you render it as a secondary facet to what is otherwise a normal, nascent relationship. It lies somewhere between a challenge and a blessing, but does not alter much about the fact of two young(ish) people beginning to discover each other. And that, of course, sounds like the makings of a romance :)

I'm dropping you a separate PM with a stylistic comment that need not clutter up this space.

Good job, as always!



Author's Response: Thank you so much! Unfortunately, I was unable to open the PM beyond seeing the subject. Technology is certainly fussy sometimes :) Perhaps you can e-mail me if you have the time.... Regarding the S.B. I quite agree that sometimes the concept feels a bit disturbing and occasionally seems to remove consent. In this case it is supposed to be mostly about magical power melding and strengthening. Somewhere between a challenge and a blessing is a reasonable way to consider the relationship I am trying to explain, so I am happy to see your comment regarding it as such ;)



Reviewer: Aurorofthelight Signed Date: 2017.12.11 - 01:57PM Title: Chapter 20 Power

Wow! What a special early Christmas gift this was! HO HO HO! I knew it had to be a bond and boy am I glad I was right! Charlie and Anna are bonded and their love for each other is evident! The betrothal is imminent and they are clearly very happy together! No surprise that Bill and Fleur bonded as well! (Harry and Ginny on deck!) Would love to see the look on that twerp Dorko and his mum's faces when they find out! Wonder what kind of wrench they'll try to throw into the works?! Really can't wait for the next chapter! :D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D

Author's Response: That submit button really sticks sometimes!!!! By the way that event you have been requesting, it's coming in a few chapters. I sincerely hope you approve!



Reviewer: Aurorofthelight Signed Date: 2017.12.11 - 01:56PM Title: Chapter 20 Power

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Wow! What a special early Christmas gift this was! HO HO HO! I knew it had to be a bond and boy am I glad I was right! Charlie and Anna are bonded and their love for each other is evident! The betrothal is imminent and they are clearly very happy together! No surprise that Bill and Fleur bonded as well! (Harry and Ginny on deck!) Would love to see the look on that twerp Dorko and his mum's faces when they find out! Wonder what kind of wrench they'll try to throw into the works?! Really can't wait for the next chapter! :D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm very glad you approve of the bond between Charlie and Anna (as well as the one between Bill and Fleur that occurred in the first chapter of this story). Since I set up this moment about half way through the original Darkness Within when Charlie dreamed of Anna, I'm rather happy to have finally reached this point! More on Dorko and his mum in a few chapters.



Reviewer: Gin110881 Signed Date: 2017.12.11 - 08:37AM Title: Chapter 20 Power

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Intriguing explanations regarding the magical bound, or is it already save to call it a soul bond? I wonder if it's really a Weasley thing, or what else could have been the trigger.

I just had the hint of the suspicion that Harry might not be involved in the defeat of Voldemort. However, since we've already heard the prophecy, that's most certainly wrong. So I'm really curious how these bonds will influence the outcome of the story. They certainly didn't happen for nothing. (No spoilers please!)


Maybe it's a silly question, and it's certainly not important, but whose POV was this chapter actually? It must have been one of the Weasley siblings because Arthur and Molly were referenced as dad and Mum.

I'm looking forward to reading your next update!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for this review! I will definitely try to honor your 'no spoilers please' while still responding to some of your thoughts. As such I will make no comment about Harry, Voldemort, or the prophecy. The bond I am trying to describe is very much a merging of the core magic of the two people involved. This bond causes permanent and vital connections, but is not generally what is thought of as a soul bond (definitely no mind reading for example). Most of this chapter was from Bill's point of view.



Reviewer: HP18 Signed Date: 2017.12.10 - 06:48PM Title: Chapter 20 Power

I'm curious if this will happen to Harry and Ginny. I'm glad you nixed the soul bond I never really like that they share minds

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm very glad you are curious!!! I fully admit that certain aspects of the traditional "soul bond" type of relationship would not work in this story. As such, I have tried to focus on this bonding as being more of a merging of the magical cores between two people.



Reviewer: Truthrowan Signed Date: 2017.12.10 - 10:53AM Title: Chapter 20 Power

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This is one of my very favorite stories. The pairing of Anna and Charlie is wonderful, as is the sibling relationship of Anna and Neville. It is one of the stories I am happiest to see updates of.

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm so glad you're enjoying this story.




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