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SIYE Time:18:13 on 20th August 2018

Reviews For Darkness Within II

Reviewer: GHL Signed Date: 2018.02.22 - 08:37PM Title: Chapter 23 Favorite Lady

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Fascinating toughness in this chapter! Your writing continues to evolve in ways I certainly would not have predicted when you started.

Stylistically, if I was to compare this chapter to other writings on the site, it would be Matt's (fake-s-smile's) work that he permitted me to continue. And that is a compliment.



Author's Response: Thank you very much! I appreciate your lovely compliment! I must admit I'm experimenting quite a bit with writing while writing this story, which is why some chapters are darker or more intense and others border on light and fluffy (or at least include typical teenage naughty behavior). My writing is also sometimes perhaps overly impacted by my moods ;)



Reviewer: alterdream Signed Date: 2018.01.02 - 09:10PM Title: Chapter 23 Favorite Lady

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I like Charlie :D

Author's Response: Thank you!



Reviewer: Gin110881 Signed Date: 2018.01.02 - 11:32AM Title: Chapter 23 Favorite Lady

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That was doubtless a quite interesting insight into the inner life of Malfoy. If he lives in Taivalkoski for a bit longer, his beloved Darkness will be around him all day long. As much as I wish Malfoy the worst, I hope Charlie will not get into trouble later on because of kidnapping a minor. Nonetheless, he should watch his back if Malfoy ever gets the opportunity of revenge. Though I'm pretty sure he won't be in danger as long as he sees him face to face.

I loved the reunion scene with Ginny and Harry, it made appetite for more.

Thank you so much for another fine update.

Author's Response: Thank you! I'll admit writing the thoughts of Malfoy was a bit challenging. Fundamentally, he is a selfish and spoiled young man who was likely somewhat bewildered by his family's fall from grace. Darkness will indeed be in his future ;) Glad you enjoyed the moment between Harry and Ginny. That scene was wonderfully fun and easy to write!



Reviewer: Dad Signed Date: 2017.12.31 - 06:22PM Title: Chapter 23 Favorite Lady

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An unusual scene for a Harry Potter fanfiction.

Author's Response: Agreed. Thank you for reviewing!



Reviewer: Aurorofthelight Signed Date: 2017.12.31 - 02:35PM Title: Chapter 23 Favorite Lady

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It's New Year's Eve morning in the States but since it's already 2018 in Austrailia I'll consider this new chapter a terrific way to celebrate the New Year(especially since I usually don't go out on amateur night)! Oh how I totally loved this one!!! The passion between Harry and Ginny certainly got as heated as a branding iron! Naturally, I thoroughly enjoyed Dorko's "accidental" meeting with Charlie (still laughing)! What a wonderful idea you came up with - Bravo!! When Dorko gets home he'll obviously need a change of drawers -- yuk! He's lucky Charlie didn't let his favorite lady have toasted nuts for a snack! Would love to be a fly on the wall when Dorko staggers home and explains what happened to his mum! Can't wait for the next chapter!! Have a blessed Happy New Year! :D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D

Author's Response: Thank you so much!!! Glad you enjoyed the scene between Harry and Ginny. I have always thought they are very naturally intense people (dare devils on brooms are not likely to be satisfied with a peck on the cheek). As for the encounter between Charlie and Dorko, I'm happy you liked it and grateful to you for encouraging me to include an 'accident' (it allows some foreshadowing that was not part of my original outline). Hope you are having a Happy New Year :)




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