SIYE Time:18:45 on 25th June 2019

Reviews For Darkness Within II

Reviewer: GHL Signed Date: 2018.03.03 - 08:03PM Title: Chapter 25 The Headmaster's Office


And now the depths of your premeditation begin to be revealed! I find it actually quite rare in reading fanfic stories to find much by the way of minor details early on attain key significance later, but I find it very cool whenever I do encounter it. Very clever!

I also enjoyed the number play in this chapter, that begins to add significance to details of the Prophesy that were, canonically, seemingly just filler.

My one minor quibble was that it took my sodden brain a little longer than necessary to pin down the speaker of the "I wondered how she managed to overwhelm Draco..." line. There are times when dialogue attributives get a little tedious, but with four people participating in a conversation, it's often best to be pretty regular with them.

Anyway, a fine chapter, with heightening drama!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! What a lovely compliment! Mapping out this story before I began writing it has allowed me to drop small (and occasionally big) hints about future events. What I failed to realize was how long it would take to go from point A to point B, and that every two or three phrases of the outline would require thousands of words and many hours of writing and editing. Lesson learned (far too late, but still)! I'll go back and check the dialogue tags in this chapter. I greatly appreciate your review!

Reviewer: alterdream Signed Date: 2018.01.15 - 09:54PM Title: Chapter 25 The Headmaster's Office


That was a lot of information in one chapter! Looks like Anna's secret might not stay one for much longer. Keep it up, you're doing well with this :)

Author's Response: Thank you very much for your kind words!!!

Reviewer: Aurorofthelight Signed Date: 2018.01.15 - 09:22AM Title: Chapter 25 The Headmaster's Office


Well this was an interesting yet frightening chapter! Looks like Moldyshorts may have figured out Anna may be his granddaughter! Doesn't bode well for her so good thing he apparently doesn't know about her bond with Charlie! I think they are on the right track about Harry bonding with Ginny, but I am among those that believe it would certainly make sense that they began to bond when he saved her from the chamber but didn't manifest itself until later! Would be interesting if the "power he knows not" iinvolves more than one love bond! Can't wait to see what comes next! :D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D

Author's Response: Thank you so much! Unfortunately, one problem with secrets is that they tend to come out eventually, especially the big secrets. And while Moldyshorts is an evil, twisted monster, he doesn't lack intelligence. You bring up an interesting point about Harry and Ginny having a bond because he saved her in the Chamber of Secrets. I've read a few great stories about them having a 'life debt' bond or a 'soul bond' from that event. I agree that some sort of magical connection should have developed between them after he saved her life. JKR made such a point of Harry and Ron becoming friends with Hermione after the incident with the troll, and yet nothing really developed relationship wise between Harry and Ginny after the Chamber. Anyways, I'll stop rambling ;)

Reviewer: Gin110881 Signed Date: 2018.01.15 - 06:41AM Title: Chapter 25 The Headmaster's Office


Ah, Charlie is able to control dragons. That's another detail you insinuated in an earlier chapter, a detail I noticed but somehow decided to ignore. I can't fend off the suspicion that you're occasionally putting a repelling charm on these details. ;-)
I wonder if Charlie, besides a Prewett, is also a descendant of the Targaryen.

Interesting detail, Anna and Fleur are seven years younger than Charlie or Bill,
respectively. Obviously, the Number Magic continues...I guess it's no coincidence that Harry got seven O.W.L.s and that we, maybe, will even have three bonded couples in the end.

Now that Tom knows about Anna, it will certainly become vital for her and Charlie to sense where the other is.

Thank you so much for another intriguing chapter.

Author's Response: Thank you so much! Your reference to the Targaryens made me smile. My husband talked me into binge watching the entire series over the Christmas holidays (I had never seen an episode and was curious). As for Repelling Charms on details, I suppose I probably think I'm providing more hints in each chapter to future events than I actually am. Having said that your comment about Anna and Charlie proves you are reading my mind again ;)

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