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Reviews For Darkness Within II

Reviewer: alterdream Signed Date: 2018.04.28 - 05:01PM Title: Chapter 35 The Plan


Another good chapter to read. That's quite the plan you've prepared. It should make for some interesting reading too.

Author's Response: Thank you!

Reviewer: GHL Signed Date: 2018.04.22 - 01:26PM Title: Chapter 35 The Plan

Oh, you too? Essentially every story I wrote, I had plans to finish it according to a nice even schedule, then ended up scrambling at the end. I'd advise you to not rush it -- the last few chapters are disproportionately important to most stories and, all too often, are accorded the least amount of editing time. Anyway, best wishes!

Author's Response: Yes, indeed! I'll admit my husband's recent hospitalization due to pneumonia slowed me down considerably. Fortunately he is recovering nicely, and now I simply must make my outline become readable chapters :)

Reviewer: GHL Signed Date: 2018.04.21 - 09:36AM Title: Chapter 35 The Plan


And so continues my personal growth as a reader of your story!

Prior to this chapter, the work seemed sometimes to blur the lines between novel and serial, but now all of your master planning begins to tie together, and the story binds coherently into the trajectory of a dramatic novel. Well done! It's not easy to keep all of the threads aligned over the course of two years of writing.

Author's Response: Thank you so much! Now I must find the time to finish a story that is so close to being complete ;) I have truly appreciated your support throughout the course of this rather lengthy project.

Reviewer: Gin110881 Signed Date: 2018.04.15 - 11:29AM Title: Chapter 35 The Plan


Great update.
I could hide a grin when I read the cat and dog phrase.
A dragon attack? Really? Somehow I suspect that Dumbledore is a Game of Thrones fan. Or is it the author? ;-)
I just hope he didn't forget to consider the antiaircraft defences of Malfoy Manor in his plans, the peacocks.
I've always liked the idea of Harry and Ginny defeating Tom together. I hope they'll get the opportunity to beat Charlies and Annas record before they'll have to face him...

Wow, I did it...the 200th review.

Author's Response: Thank you so much! And, wow - the 200th review! My husband actually had me watch the entire Game of Thrones series with him between Christmas and New Years (admittedly, he occasionally skipped a scene that he felt was too far past R for me and simply told me briefly what occurred). Oh my goodness - the peacocks! I had honestly forgotten about them :)

Reviewer: Aurorofthelight Signed Date: 2018.04.12 - 08:34PM Title: Chapter 35 The Plan


Wonderful chapter! Glad Anna didn't Hold Kat against Charlie and they broke their record! ;) I must admit that Sirius and Kat hooking up has definite and interesting potential! And Sirius certainly didn't waste any time hitting on her! I thought poor Charlie was going to have a stroke when he realized what Dumbledore had in mind with the dragons and Anna! Augusta was none too happy either! Dumbledore's plan seems to be well thought out but a lot could go wrong, especially since the last word you'd use to describe the Malflunkys is "trustworthy"! I'd advise them all to remember an old saying" "The best laid plans of mice and men often go astray"(Robert Burns)! Can't blame them all for getting well oiled after the meeting! Really looking forward to the next chapter! :D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D

Author's Response: Thank you! I have to admit I was supposed to bring Kat into the story several chapters ago (in part as a love interest for Sirius - he was alone too long!!!). Somehow I forgot to do it. Oh well, better late than never I suppose ;) Yep, poor Charlie - his delight at the notion of working with dragons again was rather ruined by the realization of Anna's participation. Glad you approve of Charlie and Anna breaking their record and of the group enjoying a few libations after the meeting :) Your quotation is perfect and quite apropos when it comes to many of Albus's plans.

Reviewer: hpforever85 Signed Date: 2018.04.12 - 07:00PM Title: Chapter 35 The Plan


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