Reviews For Darkness Within II
Reviewer: GHL Signed Date: 2018.04.22 - 01:26PM Title: Chapter 35 The Plan
Oh, you too? Essentially every story I wrote, I had plans to finish it according to a nice even schedule, then ended up scrambling at the end. I'd advise you to not rush it -- the last few chapters are disproportionately important to most stories and, all too often, are accorded the least amount of editing time. Anyway, best wishes!
Reviewer: GHL Signed Date: 2018.04.21 - 09:36AM Title: Chapter 35 The Plan
And so continues my personal growth as a reader of your story!
Prior to this chapter, the work seemed sometimes to blur the lines between novel and serial, but now all of your master planning begins to tie together, and the story binds coherently into the trajectory of a dramatic novel. Well done! It's not easy to keep all of the threads aligned over the course of two years of writing.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! Now I must find the time to finish a story that is so close to being complete ;) I have truly appreciated your support throughout the course of this rather lengthy project.
Reviewer: Gin110881 Signed Date: 2018.04.15 - 11:29AM Title: Chapter 35 The Plan
Reviewer: Aurorofthelight Signed Date: 2018.04.12 - 08:34PM Title: Chapter 35 The Plan
Wonderful chapter! Glad Anna didn't Hold Kat against Charlie and they broke their record! ;) I must admit that Sirius and Kat hooking up has definite and interesting potential! And Sirius certainly didn't waste any time hitting on her! I thought poor Charlie was going to have a stroke when he realized what Dumbledore had in mind with the dragons and Anna! Augusta was none too happy either! Dumbledore's plan seems to be well thought out but a lot could go wrong, especially since the last word you'd use to describe the Malflunkys is "trustworthy"! I'd advise them all to remember an old saying" "The best laid plans of mice and men often go astray"(Robert Burns)! Can't blame them all for getting well oiled after the meeting! Really looking forward to the next chapter! :D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D
Reviewer: hpforever85 Signed Date: 2018.04.12 - 07:00PM Title: Chapter 35 The Plan