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Reviewer: carolyn jinn Signed Date: 2017.09.03 - 09:27PM Title: Chapter 1

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Lovely.

Just a couple of things. 'The whole hospital wing went silence'.....should be 'silent'.
Also, 'I'll support you and be right there you'. Do you mean..'I'll support you and be fight there FOR you'?



Reviewer: ngayonatkailanman Signed Date: 2017.08.01 - 01:27PM Title: Chapter 1

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LOL. Sweet and short like an essay. Good job.



Reviewer: JJamieDupane Signed Date: 2017.08.01 - 07:06AM Title: Chapter 1

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The Grammar is quite distracting! There are also some improper phrases. Other than that, a little more substance would have been good. It is a good attempt for a first work. Keep on writing and you will get better provided you learn where you go wrong.



Reviewer: Gin110881 Signed Date: 2017.08.01 - 03:35AM Title: Chapter 1

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Great little story. I like Ginnyís reaction, itís quite believable. Little does she know that Harry will soon leave her behind for another year.

Have you ever thought about publishing your other story, Arbitrium, for which I am eagerly awaiting an update, on Siye, too?



Reviewer: MollyandArthur Signed Date: 2017.07.31 - 07:03PM Title: Chapter 1

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Loved the slap and the snog!!!



Reviewer: Dad Signed Date: 2017.07.31 - 03:30PM Title: Chapter 1

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Short and sweet.



Reviewer: mdauben Signed Date: 2017.07.31 - 12:37PM Title: Chapter 1

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A scene that's been done many times, but I really like your version. I think it captures the feelings of both Harry and Ginny really well and portrays their meeting in a very believable manner. Well done!




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